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Star in the sky

Updated on July 4, 2015

You are the star in my night sky
Your loving stickers, smileys and kisses linger in my mind
You are always there in my path
The star which shines the brightest from the west to the east
Smacking sounds of your big wide lips banging on the sails
In my direction landing softly on my small full lips
Together we shine in the darkest sky dreaming a future

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      Demas W Jasper 22 months ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Second line "linger" for plural subject.

      Go to your own "My Account" and in the upper right corner click on Author to add something about you to this poem that would inform readers of what you would like them to know about you without going to your Profile page.

      "Smacking sounds" sounds rougher than what you are trying to convey here.

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      haikutwinkle 22 months ago

      Thank you for your comment

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      Missy Smith 21 months ago from Florida

      I think this is beautiful. You have a talent to use words in a way that's unique. I wish I could think up brilliant lines like these.

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      haikutwinkle 21 months ago

      Thank you Missy Smith for your kind comments.

      Nature is often the basis of my inspirations. Letting nature flow into all your senses, the rustling leaves, the sound of waves, they all have a story to tell you. Hope this helps ;)

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