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Still You Breathe

Updated on May 27, 2011


Lovingly extracted from each child

Permission to end this long fight

But still you breathe


With the smile of an excited child

You are eager for this final trip

But still you breathe


Finally your head lays on your own pillow

Your chosen ending place

But still you breathe


Farewells and endearments shared

Like a king holding his final court

But still you breathe


You go to sleep with this grand intention

Then wake in frustration

For still you breathe


To God, spirits not born and ancestors returned

I pray for them to bring you home

But still you breathe


I lie on the floor in the dark

Counting the long seconds after a gasp

But still you breathe


We have made the switch in our hearts

Wishing for you to crossover not recover

But still you breathe


I wish I knew the password to open the gates

The magic sentiment that would at last

still your breath


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    • Patricia Costanzo profile image
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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Well Joy, I'm glad you finally did. Hugs.

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      Joy56 6 years ago

      can you believe this is the first time i read you ....... your head does fit your other half, but i was very wrong, as per usual.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      I learned that the vessel isn't as fragile as I thought. That grown men do scream and that Hospice workers are angels in disguise. Thanks Sligobay. He's at peace.

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      No Pain more poignant; Patricia; than powerlessness over the passing parent. To cling or release is the usual dilemma but once released from life to have life cling is a strange scenario. Death be merciful.

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      RandomLife 6 years ago from Nashville TN

      That's ok. =) Some things are bitter sweet.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thank you RandomLife. I'm sorry it brings back memories though :(

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      RandomLife 6 years ago from Nashville TN

      This is so beautiful and emotional. It brings back so many memories for me.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thanks Ashlie I'm glad you liked this one.

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      AskAshlie3433 6 years ago from WEST VIRGINIA

      beautiful words patricia. love your poems.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Ahhh, I'm glad you felt it WW.

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      Writing_Wine 6 years ago from San Francisco Bay Area

      Reading this and knowing the story behind....let's just say I have tears trickling down my cheeks. Beautiful release of emotion into words.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thanks for the comment Chris. This is something I guess all children go through if things go as they should. The only thing worse would be for the child to die before the parent.

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      Christoph Reilly 6 years ago from St. Louis

      Hi Patricia. This was so touching, and it hits on a feeling that many in the world have faced as well, yet have not considered it in such poetic fashion. I challenge anyone to read this and not be instantly transported to a similar time in their lives.

      I know exactly what you mean when you say that "tears are best" to write through. I find the same think.

      My love to you, Patricia.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thank you katrinasui! I write tons, I guess I should post more of them.

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      katrinasui 6 years ago

      beautiful Poem! Please keep going.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Greetings Highvoltagewriter! I find tears and other strong emotions are the BEST to write through. Love and Light.

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      William Benner 6 years ago from Savannah GA.

      Wow so powerful...I find it hard to write though the tears...Thank you and God bless...

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thanks for "finding" me Stan. I'm glad you liked this one.

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      Patricia Costanzo 6 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thank you for comment pjk_artist.

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      Stan Fletcher 6 years ago from Nashville, TN

      "You go to sleep with this grand intention

      Then wake in frustration

      But still you breathe"

      I LOVE that part of the poem most of all. Makes me realize others are like me, which is comforting. Glad i found you.

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      pjk_artist 7 years ago from Turkey Point, ON

      Everyone passes on when it is their time. No sooner...no later. Your loved one lingers because you or somebody around them need to learn something.

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      Patricia Costanzo 7 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      Thanks for reading poetvix. Writing helps me process emotions that I would be trapped behind otherwise.

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      Patricia Costanzo 7 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

      It took so long and was over so too soon Tom.

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      poetvix 7 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      This impresses me as so sad, like one lingering when passing would be such a blessing. I imagine it took some courage and pain to write this. I thank you.

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      Tom Rubenoff 7 years ago from United States

      Beautiful poem, unique emotion. It's amazing how elastic time can be.