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Sunday, 11:45

Updated on September 1, 2014


Every child should be alive,

protected and made to survive,

but this was Sunday, 11:45,

at the Baptist Church,

over on the Eastside,

the air felt oddly thin,

the lights were purposely low

and dim,

a small coffin, dark red with a gold trim,

was at the far end

of the center aisle, sad, lonely, grim,

a young black woman made her way

to the front of the church,

passing the people who would pray,

she would hesitate for a moment,

as if she had something to say,

a sadness would grow,

in her eyes it would show,

her heart sunk low,

she touched the corner of the casket

with her right hand,

before turning to face the front row,

she knew it was a sin to even look in,

so not a single word was spoken,

the young woman’s face was empty, broken,

listening to the deep gospel tone

of an old minister,

but in the air she knew,

there was something foul and sinister,

the memories of her child would sift,

her eyes would drift,

she stood quietly, made no sound,

she’d go to hell

if the truth was found,

it wasn’t an accident

when she told everyone that her child had drowned.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      Icy!!!!!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      like a stare huh? LOL thanks for stopping by Senoritta

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      Sunnie Day 5 years ago

      OH Frank this is so sad..My daughter who worked for the prison system for many years can tell endless stories of this very tale but the women she knew are now behind bars as it should be..Very graphic and creative.

      Sunnie

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      Annie 5 years ago from NewYork

      darn! this is so sad, yet so truthful

      love how you build us up and in the end drop that news

      great write, this is what you called getting their attention to the very last end.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Sunnie for your comment and your visit.. and thanks to you DarknLovely.. means a great deal coming from you bless you both

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Oh My this great Frank.. I LOVE IT.. how many times does this really happen? You captured it all so well.

      I am so glad to see this poem I was missing you

      Voted way up my friend

      blessings

      Debbie

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Frank...so touching yet sad.

      How do you pour out such genuine feelings in your writing...love it!

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      KatrineDalMonte 5 years ago

      Oh dear, that's a tragedy expressed so well it really hurts. Hope it's not real.

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      Brenda Barnes 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      It happens a lot more than we know. You write so well of a horrible subject. The poem is beautiful in its sadness.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Our Ms Brooks thanks so much for stopping by and Ruch thank you too for stopping by and also Kat thanks for visiting my fiction and Hyphen.. good to see you as always Bless you all

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      Terrye Toombs 5 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

      Very vivid, I felt like I was there. Beautifully written, even for such a sad and tragic topic. Well done.

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      Helen Murphy Howell 5 years ago from Fife, Scotland

      Wow what a creepy shocker at the end!! I didn't see that coming and I loved it! I love the way you move effortlessly from taking our emotions from sympathy to shock! This was a gruesome awakening. Awesome!

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      Gypsy48 5 years ago

      Very captivating poem Frank. Your writing is awesome. The subject is so tragic but a reality.

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Such an evocative piece--wow!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      With this sad dramatic poem in my mind, I'm going to bed.

      Good night Frank

      12:30 AM, Kathmandu

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much ttoombs and Seeker7 for reading my Sunday, 11:45

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Gypsy, and Audrey and VG oh sleep well tonight VG :) bless you all

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      LaDena Campbell 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      This is another great one, Frank - the little twist at the end got me...

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank

      A great piece.

      Voted up and awesome.

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      Peg Cole 5 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Dark and deeply disturbing on so many different levels. Written in true Alfred Hitchcock surprise ending style. Love the way you captivated me then shocked me at the end.

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      time2rite 5 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

      Okay, Frank: WOW, I did NOT see that ending coming AT ALL!!! You never cease to write a single piece that doesn't deliver that certain "Uhn" to the gut; awesome job once again.

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Oh yes Frank;so sad;so true and also so well told.

      Great work yet again.

      Take care my friend and have a wonderful day.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Justateacher, Pegcole17 Sueswan, time2rite amd eddy. thank all of you for visiting my Sunday @ 11:45

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      Cynthia B Turner 5 years ago from Georgia

      You are such an awesome writer! The poem was so well written, so vivid and so sad. Great storyline, with a huge twist. Have a creative day!

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Oh my Frank, how you create such a vivid scene of despair and guilt. Can there be anything worse to go thru carrying in life than that young woman's conscience.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Cyndi10 thank you soo much and Alastar thank you for the wonderful comment honestly Frank

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Frigid Frank! A true masterpiece. Deep s*** Frank, very very deep.

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 5 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      Beautifully written and you kept my interest right up to the shocking end.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      rock on the lyricwriter LOL and thank you so much for visiting BlossomSB.. bless you guys

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Frank, how do you do this... boy you make me jealous! Voting it up and awesome. Have a blessed day! Peace.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      shim-dawn it is I who envy you.. lets come correct now..:) Bless you

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      chilling until the end...voted up awesome...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Raci for stopping by :)

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ...first of all Frank thank you for 300 wonderful hubs and congratulations on that milestone - you are one of my favorite writers to be sure and I always love your cinematic readings in poetry form - you can say so much with so few well chosen words - you are indeed a true artist and a grand storyteller - lake erie time 10:19pm

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Epi.. coming from you I'll take IT! bless you

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      Caroline Marie 5 years ago from Close to Heaven

      Wow Frank. Darkly beautiful.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again Caroline for stopping by bless you

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      You are very creative in your use of imagery. You convey the emotions very well.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Lovedoctor926 :)

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Really well-written and heart-rending as well.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much X- :)

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      Theresa Ast 5 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Oh my, Frank! Certainly did not see (although really, do I ever?) that particular twist coming. You really are so terribly good at this. Quite amazing. You are one of a kind. I do not know, have never known, anyone who writes the kind of poetry that you do.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much PHdast7

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      Maurice Wisdom Bishop 5 years ago from San Tan Valley

      This is a shocker! Great write! Much Love and Respect!

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      Kebennett1 5 years ago from San Bernardino County, California

      Sad, but a very true ending for this day and age. Wonderfully written. I like all poetry and this is a winner!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks wqisdom and Keb for stopping by my Sunday, 11:45

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      SanneL 5 years ago from Sweden

      Oh my, the ending gave me a shock. I didn't see that coming, lol. Eerie, dramatic and fantastic. Loved it!

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      Melissa Flagg 5 years ago from Rural Central Florida

      Whoa!! I so did not see that coming. That was AWESOME! I'm not a huge fan of poetry, but this was amazing! It was very gripping and so vivid. You just gained a new follower!!!

      Simply awesome!

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      Demas W Jasper 5 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Dark for a sabbath day's reading, but the other side of the coin. The truth is always found, if not here then hereafter, and by then the self-condemnation has taken its toll. As a mother, this is Cain in spades.

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      What satire my friend, what suspense and what sadness! Amazing, heartfelt...

      I feel for the child in there... a life taken before its bloom...

      Epic poetry!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Sannel, you too Daughter of Matt and Rahul0324 and of course Perspycacious for stopping by :)

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