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Take Care of My Eyes- Short Story

Updated on March 18, 2012

"Shanwa, how bright is the sun? Is the sunset beautiful? How about the moon and the star?" asked Kola. "They are beautiful, just beautiful," replied Shanwa. "Shanwa, I wish I could see the world, if only I have eyes..." said Kola. Kola than started crying and expressed her feeling, "do you know how it feel being blind? It feels like I've been isolate from this world. I could not see myself, my parent, siblings, friends, you, and everyone else." Tears slowly caress Kola cheek and Shanwa wipe her tears with his hand. Gently, Kola rests her head against his shoulder.

Kola sister Shingling came to take Kola home. "Hi Shanwa," Shingling said softly with a smile. "Hi," replied Shanwa. "Kola, its about time to go home," said Shingling. "Okay sister," Kola respond smiling holding her sister hand as Shanwa help guide Kola to the car.

On their way back home Kola told Shingling how wonderful Shanwa was. "Shingling, if only I have eyes, the first person I want to see is Shanwa. Is he as handsome as his heart? He has a very precious heart and if I could see, I would definitely marry him!" said Kola. Shingling started to cry because she's in love with Shanwa as well. Her heart aches so much yet she doesn't want to betray her older sister. "Are you okay Shingling? Are you crying?" asked Kola. "No, I'm fine...I'm listening sister," Shingling responded sniffing. Kola smile and continue talking all about Shawna until they arrive home.

The next day, Shanwa came to visit Kola. Shanwa bought many yummy fruits for Kola to eat. Kola was so happy to know Shanwa visit her and brought her goodies. Shanwa than told Kola about his feelings...he said, "Kola, after all these years we've been together, I feel great. You made me smile, you made me laugh, and most importantly, you kept my heart beating. I love you and if only I could do something to cherish you, I would. Would you marry me?" Kola face turns blemish pink and said, "if only I have eyes, I would love to marry you!"

Shingling overheard Shanwa proposal with Kola and ran to the bathroom crying. "Waaaaaaah, if only I have a perfect beauty, Shanwa would have loved me," cried Shingling. Later in the day, Shanwa was looking for Shingling. "Shingling, Shingling," called Shanwa. Shingling heard Shanwa calling her and wipes her tears. "Oh there you are! Guess what? I asked you sister to marry me and she said if she have eyes, she would definitely marry me, so...I want to donate my eyes to her!" said Shanwa. "Your eyes? Are you sure about that?" asked Shingling. "Yes, I'm pretty sure. For love, I'll do anything," said Shanwa.

Shingling wasn't quite sure if it was a good idea but Shanwa was so sure and so positive that he would do this for his love. Shanwa than tells Kola that he had found someone to donate a pair of eyes to her. Kola was so happy when she heard the news.

After the operation and the recovery, Kola finally sees the world. When she notices that Shanwa was blind, Kola told Shanwa that she would not marry him. Shanwa was very upset, heartbroken after what he learn; rejection. Shanwa fell to his knee and Shingling rest her hand on his shoulder. He lean his head against her shoulder and cried, "If only I knew that a person mind could change so quick."


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      chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

      Hi raciniwa how are you? and thank you! @ christy Thank you.

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I have shivers from the emotions in this love story... excellent.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      wow...what a touching story...

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      chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

      Hi Gypsy and Joyce, thank you! Yes, there is more. Thank you!


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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Wow! This is a great story, Is the going to more? Voted up and Awesome.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Awesome! A powerful story of love and betrayal.