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That Apartment

Updated on March 24, 2015

An argument,

a brief struggle,

torn leather, torn lace,

wounds to the face,

tempers brew, emotions grew,

black and blue,

the muffled cries,

leaning forward

until their eyes

were less then an inch apart,

then over again,

they’ll start,

each with a short fuse,

afraid to refuse,

the noise loud,

and in that apartment

two was a crowd.

© 2015 Frank Atanacio

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Yikes! What a horrible place to be. If someone doubts that there is hell on earth -- well they should read this. Excellently done.

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      I wonder how often that goes on every day all around the world.

      Punchy rhythm! Great!

      Ann

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Annart and Eric for stopping by to that apartment...:) bless you both

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I love the pace of this poem...fast and furious, just like living there. Very good work, Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Billybuc :)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow! I bet the people in the adjacent apartment has to wear earplugs. Awesome Frank..

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      LOL thanks always.. for reading my apartment

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      Evelia Veronica Rivera 2 years ago from Bridgeport, CT

      What a terrible life if that is the "norm"..nice job frank

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Domestic violence is actually on the increase here in Australia which is a sad statistic Frank. This poem is short and sweet but describes such a situation very well. Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much A-C and Jodah for chiming in

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      Diana L Pierce 2 years ago from Potter County, Pa.

      It sounds like a real ruckus. I loved it. Voted up.

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      Sara Sarwar Riaz 2 years ago from Michigan, USA

      Wonderfully put together. Your ideas are very unique.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      I lived next to them in Albuquerque. Paper thin walls. I knew everything about them, mostly stuff I didn't want to know. Thanks Frank. Great work on a fast paced poem.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Diana Lee, Sara for visiting that apartment and cam8510 LOL thanks for the out loud laugh :) Frank

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Wow, Frank, I thought this was going down another avenue with the leather and lace : ) ... but alas, no fun there for sure! Sad reality how we tend to hurt each other with words and then even more so with violence against each other. I wonder if many do not even know what love looks like? Real love that is?

      Up +++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

      Great writing and in-your-face action-packed pace too.

      Bless you

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      nice, maybe they need a walk in the park and get out of that warsome space.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Faith.. who let the dawgs out? LOL I agree all kidding aside... thanks for commenting dear one.. and Clive maybe they do need a walk on the mild..side :)

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      They sound like a violent couple, or roommates, in a small apartment. I would not want to live there or near them. I voted up, and Tweeted.

      Kevin

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      So easy for the memory of those fights to become synonymous with the memory of life in that apartment. You captured the mood, the attitude and actions very well.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you for reading that apartment :) Ms Dora bless you

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Examiner 1 for checking out the fight :)

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      William Thomas 2 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

      Voted 'up' and 'interesting,' Frank.

      As I said before, you are good at finding the story in the space in-between. As MsDora has commented, it is so easy to synonymize the arguing couple with "That Apartment."

      Take it easy.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much winged for stopping by that apartment :)

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Wounds to the face, two was a crowd ... You can sure paint a vivid picture. Frank. This was superb. Voted way up and more and sharing

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Flourish always good to see you :)

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      I can hear them, as well as see them in “that apartment,” Frank. The tempo of the words melds with the fighting. Well done.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Genna East good to see you and bless you

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      Smilealot 2 years ago

      As short as the frayed tempers it is portraying, which makes it work really well. Great write Frank:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Smilealot.. Hope you had a good Passover

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      It sounds like 2 was a crowd here--love the leather and lace reference!!

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

      I remember living downtown and hearing couple arguing about every night. You were able to recreate these images. Jamie

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Audrey and Jhamann for visiting that apartment

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      Dana Tate 21 months ago from LOS ANGELES

      I had this best friend since middle school, and in our early twenties we tried to share an apartment together. We were young and free and full of ourselves but unfortunately her ways were different from mine. She was a wild person who partied all the time and had all kinds of people over. Me, I'm more of a quiet introvert. It was inevitable that we would come to a huge argument, which made me leave the apartment. We did not speak again until twenty years later.

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      Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton

      that's a sad story Dana.. :(

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      Dana Tate 21 months ago from LOS ANGELES

      I know. The good news is we are back friends and closer than ever, but it took a long time.

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      Word 21 months ago from Chicago

      Cool poem Frank and quite creative. It's funny, arguing drains so much energy and nothing is accomplished from it. That's why we are to discuss matters in order to come to reasonable conclusions. Good idea...

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      Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton

      Dana all those years wasted.. glad you became best friends again... and word55 thanks for dropping by

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