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The Ballerina and The Sad Violin Part 5

Updated on April 12, 2012


Mr. Baldomero sat in silence in his wooden seat as he anxiously tapped his pen on the desk that seated itself in front of him. He looked up at the white faced clock and it read 3:29. One minute left and his auditionee was not present. The lights dimmed. With confusion, he looked around to see a very attractive young lady strut along the aisle over to the stage. She tip toed up the stairs. She carried a very curvaceous physique with strong body language. Mr. Baldomero could not keep his eyes off her; there was something about this one that yearned.

Kalina took center stage. Her look fastened itself within his eyes. She seductively smirked as the beat of her music began to play. With every beat her body swayed with movement and locomotion. She made sure to keep hold of his eye sight like if her soul was longing his stare. With flexibility she extended her legs as if strings where to be pulling them from the ceiling. He sat in tantalizing temptation and fondness. Kalina concluded her audition and flaunted her swag as she approached Mr. Baldomero.

He applauded her perfection. “Ms. De Lucca, I must say you carry beauty within your art and form,” reaching for her hand as he took it up close to his lips and pecked it softly, brushing it with his thumb. Kalina smiled and hung her head as she felt a little warm. She found herself thrilled to see Mr. Baldomero was quite the attractive gentleman.

“Thank you Mr. Baldomero!”

“Please, refrain from calling me Mr. Baldomero, call me Santos.”

“Ok, so Santos it is! So Have I earned my spot in your honor?”

“Ms. De Lucca, I think you are very well aware of my answer.”

“Please…. call me Kalina” she paused and looked away “Well….Your eyes tell me yes but what do your lips say?”

“The lips of Santos say yes! Welcome to Baldomero’s School of Performing Arts. “Kalina smiled big and her eyes glowed with happiness.

“So tell me Ms. Kalina, how come you did not audition the same time your sister did? You are a great ballerina!”

Kalina’s eyes turned cold and walked away from where Santos and she stood. She paced the area in front of the stage “Our parents died when we where 18. I had to pick up the financial responsibility for both of us. I figured it would be best if only one of us followed in Mothers footsteps. I am the older of the two so I picked up the slack. I never wanted to stop dancing but I had to sacrifice my wants and needs.” she let out a deep sigh in distress “But since now I am looking out for my best interest I resumed to what I love most, and here I am”

“Well I am excited that you chose to pick up where you left off. I think you are fabulous, and I am happy to have you here.” Santos walked over to Kalina, brushed her hair off to the side, and reached for her hand as he raised it again up to his lips and gently kissed it. Kalina glared at him with charm. With only minutes of knowing each other, they both knew they had connected in a different way.

“And I am very excited to be here.” as she stared within his eyes with fascincation.

“Kalina?” called Alinna “what are you doing here?” tainting the moment Kalina and Santos shared.

Santos intervened and replied “Kalina is now a student here just like yourself. It’s good to have you both attending my school.”

“Yes, that is correct I am now a student here.” Said Kalina with fierce in her eyes

“So you decided to come back? I see…… well just to let you know I still take lead in all performances nothing has changed. You will dance in the back and be what you have always been, just an extra.” said Alinna with harshness.

Kalina’s fists clenched as she smiled and replied “Everything has changed, we are not little girls anymore Alinna. My capabilities have taken a different route and you can’t stop that.......Try and stop me.”

“Oh.......you wait and see. You make sure you keep on your toes ‘cause you never know when you’ll get knocked off.” Alinna threatened as she flounced to the door.Santos watched as the rivalry took place, two sisters competing for the spotlight.

What a show this is going to be, Santos thought.

To be continued…..




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      Erica Sanchez 5 years ago from California

      Freelance, Thank you for stopping by and reading it :)

      Smiles :)))

      Bella

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      Erica Sanchez 5 years ago from California

      Echoe, Thank you and I must agree with you I have so much more room to draft up a killer :))

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      freelanceauthor 6 years ago

      Awesome story

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      echoe0021 6 years ago from Conway, AR

      That definitely gave you more room to work with in the story. A greater chance of character development and further exploration of emotion and human nature.

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      Erica Sanchez 6 years ago from California

      There are four more parts it goes up to part 9. I would have to agree Alinna was my victim in the poem but I needed a twist so I plotted differently! :)

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      echoe0021 6 years ago from Conway, AR

      So often people are inspired by music, they go hand in hand. It's a lovely correlation. You have developed the sister characters well, but not quite what I had imagined of Alinna from the poem. She seemed so much more the victim in the poem.

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      Erica Sanchez 6 years ago from California

      Lol I had to go back and re read what I wrote oops I should know my own story its been a while. The Sad Violin is a great piece that I adore it inspired me to write I would play it and just clear my mind and put myself in each characters shoes and just imagined! and thats how it was written... I started with no plot with nothing just let my mind unravel at the time. As of yet I do not know my ending...

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      echoe0021 6 years ago from Conway, AR

      I enjoy good stories; the first scene of the series really captivated me. That along with the music on part one which really set an eerie and dramatic tone. Overall it was great use of your vices.

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      Erica Sanchez 6 years ago from California

      thank you echoe0021! I am glad it has peaked the mind!

      smiles :)

      bella

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      echoe0021 6 years ago from Conway, AR

      This story has ben fabulous. Very engaging.

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      Erica Sanchez 6 years ago from California

      Birds, thank you I have no limits as to where my writing can end up at if it stops here on the hubs then I think I have still come a distance. I thank you with the very bottom of my heart on leaving your thoughts and insights with me. :)

      bella

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      mckbirdbks 6 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Bella, now that you have written this there is no limit to what you can acheive. There still seems to me there was more to this. Can't imagine why I did not leave a comment for such a fine piece of writing.

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      Erica Sanchez 6 years ago from California

      Shy, lol I have 3 sisters and we all have attitudes but never pushed our boundaries like Alinna and Kalina but hey I know it happens in some places of the world. THanks for reading shygirl.

      Saddle, I have to agree but Santos idk about him which side is he playing for we will fins out.....

      Bella

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      saddlerider1 6 years ago

      The plot thickens, the rivalry is going to be exciting as Santos watches from the sidelines and grins. I believe siblings are always very competitive. This is going to be exciting.

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      shygirl2 6 years ago

      Sibling rivalry...nothing else like it, huh bella? I've lived through a bit of those moments. Scarey stuff! On to to read the next... : ) Great job!

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      Always , I dont know yet it ends very sad is all I know at the moment I dont think of what to write as I am writing it kinda writes itself I just type do I make sense I dont know lol! Thanks for following my story though I appreciate it!!

      smiles :)

      bella

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      Ruby Jean Richert 7 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Your story is captivating. Sister rivalry, who wins? See you next time.

      Smiles

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      Astra, Thank you yes a big uproar its going to be. Part 6 is pretty intense and snaps. I will be back shortly....

      smiles :)

      bella

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      Cathy Nerujen 7 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

      These two sisters are definitely going to duke it out in dance or a catfight. Either way, I want a front row seat, Bella. LOL. What a fantastic read. You make it so real and the characters so alive. Wonderful writing. I am just hooked. :D

      Oh and the picture is kind of cute too. LOL.

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      Lol hahah I know for reals!!

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      Nikki Wicked 7 years ago from Louisiana

      and that picture is crazy. all i see is BUTT every time i look at it lol

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      Pen, Thanks you!! Good to see you've joined in reading my story of the twin sisters!!

      smiles :)

      bella

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      PenMePretty 7 years ago from Franklin

      Such a creative piece. Flows well. I love the pic.

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      lol yippee skippy I will go one then ....

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      Nikki Wicked 7 years ago from Louisiana

      well we know kalina screws alinnas face up, and goes crazy but the journey till we get there is still riveting.

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      sunshine, Nope neither one who will stand and who will fall. I think I have given that part from the begining but we will see what twists and turns.

      I will continue....

      bella

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      Nikki Wicked 7 years ago from Louisiana

      but the show must go on! there can only be room for one! and kalina isnt just going to step down, neither is alinna. cant wait for the rest!

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      Aver, I want to say the same I dont know what sister I like yet they are both so much the same but different in their own way. thanks for sticking with me still.

      sub, thanks pal I really appreciate it!!

      hyph, lol honestly I cannot tell you cause I dont even know haven't gotten that far Jinkies!!! >_< will have it up today tho... cant leave into the weekend without having the cheese.

      smiles :)

      bella

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      Brenda Barnes 7 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      WhooHoo, I think there will be a knock down, drag out dance fight before long. This is getting good and I cannot wait to see what happens next. I'm a lovin' it bellawritter.

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      James W. Nelson 7 years ago from eastern North Dakota

      Good job, Bella, I will look for part six.

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      Mentalist acer 7 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

      Good for Kalina.;)

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      :) thank you

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      bbnix 7 years ago from Southern California

      Exactly right...and keep it up...I believe in you!!!

    • bellawritter23 profile image
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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      Billy bear, I am writing the story as I go I do not know whats gonna happen next. It comes as I type!!

      Bella

    • bellawritter23 profile image
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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      L.K. I will do it!!! ;)You are my encouragement!!

      smiles :)

      bella

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      bbnix 7 years ago from Southern California

      hah...did everyone see that... that's billy bear's dearest brave friend showing the world how to write a hell of a good story.... Just keep thinking Pulitzer, baby.....keep it up!!!!

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      L.K. Egooh 7 years ago from United States

      You can do it.

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      Erica Sanchez 7 years ago from California

      L.K. thank you. I hope it will! I am starting to think whats next and I haven't got a clue time to start thinking again!!

      smiles :)

      bella

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      L.K. Egooh 7 years ago from United States

      Oooh. This is going to be good!

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