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The Boulevard of Empty Shoes (A Flash Fiction Story)
Have you ever participated in writing challenges or contests?
Inspiration for this Story
Last year there was a forum post by Christy Kirwan advising of an outside short fiction competition/social experiment based on a photo prompt. The only guidelines were that the story be based on the photo provided and under 100 words in length. Unfortunately I can't find the link to that particular forum and can't use the original photograph. It was a picture of a lone figure standing at the entrance to a street filled entirely of shoes.
This is the story I submitted but expanded to around 350 words. I hope you enjoy "The Boulevard of Empty Shoes".
The Boulevard of Empty Shoes
I woke up with a start. Not knowing what aroused me I stared at the alarm clock. It was 7.00 am; time for me to get up for work, but the alarm hadn't gone off. I showered, dressed, downed a quick cup of instant coffee, slipped on my shoes, and walked out the door.
I only lived three blocks from my office building so rarely drove; besides walking was healthier and you could enjoy the sights. Today, though, something seemed a little odd. Normally at this time of day, there were scores of people commuting to work, driving, cycling, and walking. But today... the streets were deserted. No cars, buses, nothing. What the f… was going on?
I turned the corner into Birkenstock Boulevard and was momentarily stopped in my tracks. The street was literally covered in shoes and boots. It was as though there had been a sudden storm that had rained down foot-ware. But there wasn’t a soul in sight.
Where were the people the shoes belonged to?
I bent down and picked up a few shoes. They were all types and sizes, from size 12 steel capped work boots down to tiny baby booties, and everything in between. I am no detective, but even if my name was Sherlock Holmes or Charlie Chan was I doubt I would be able to solve this mystery.
Tentatively I made my way along the boulevard of empty shoes and turned into Agapanthus Avenue. I stared aghast! There were a few parked vehicles in the distance, but not a sign of life, human life at least, on the busy street … just flowers, thousands of flowers.
The alarm woke me. 7.00 am, right on schedule. I pushed the snooze button and rubbed my eyes. Wow! That had been one hell of a dream.
After laying there semi-awake for another 10 minutes, I showered, dressed, downed a quick cup of instant coffee…and went to slip my shoes on … but they weren’t there. I couldn’t find them anywhere. In fact, all my shoes were missing.
Looking out the window didn't ease my discomfort. My flower garden was also empty.
© 2016 John Hansen
Comments
A bewildering mystery that makes me wonder what did happen? Well written and enjoyed.
Wonderfully entertaining.
I meant the guy must have freaked out to find his dream wasn't really a dream at all, but you figured out what I was trying to say anyway. That's what happens when someone's talking to me while I'm trying to type....
Funky story, John. The guy have freaked out to find his dream wasn't really a dream at all.
What a cool title; and the pic was so intriguing, John. You met the challenge well; this story had me from the very start and I didn't expect that twist, shocker ending that still has me thinking and wondering.
I enjoyed reading this story and loved the mysterious ending! This is the type of flash fiction that I like to read. Thanks for sharing the tale, Jodah.
Whoo spooky! lol! I love these kind of stories, you wake up, its weird, then you wake and its still, well, weirder! great write!
Great story, brilliant write. I can imagine so many things that could have happened.
Nice work. It has been a long time since I have read your work and I can see the growth.
This is a fabulous story. Truth can be stranger than fiction, yet you were given a small glimpse into the future. A great piece, for sure. Keep it up.
Mysterious. Leaves a lot of room for speculation on the part of the reader. I wish I had the patience for flash fiction, because I think it actually requires a great deal more discipline than the longer, more rambling type, an ability to reign in the running roughshod imagination for a quick burst. Great work!
This was great fun to read. Easy to step into your character's shoes and imagine myself looking at a street filled with nothing but shoes. To take it a step further, I imagine what fun it might be to look for size six designer shoes. Any Chanel, Farragamo...? LOL.
Great response to the challenge!
This sounds so mysterious and keeps the reader engaged till the end. Reading stories about dreams is always very intriguing and I like the suspense and the twist towards the end.
Thanks for an interesting read!
Great job Jodah, left me with a bewildered feeling, but not all things need answers.
EWF
John,
Your shoes were walking out on you
Taking all your flowers too
Where were they taking all the flowers
While you just slept for hours
Maybe you could go back to sleep
If that is not hard
You just might find them on the Boulevard
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Blessings my friend
You could add the Youtube video of "My Shoes Keep Walking Back To You" that would be a nice touch.
I enjoyed this little flash.. but really thought the ending was right on... :) I don't remember the challenge, but I bet you nailed it with this little piece :)
do do do do, or na na na na? I couldn't remember what the beginning of that show sounded like the most. lol. Anyway, again, I loved this story, and I am a fan of Green Day. The song you posted is one of my favorite songs of theirs! :)
Na na na na na na na na...You unlock this door with a key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension; a dimension of sound, a dimension of sight, a dimension of mind. You are moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You just crossed into the...Twilight Zone!!
Great story, John, as you can tell, it reminded me of The Twilight Zone episodes. lol. This story would have made an interesting episode on that show. :)
You tied it up expertly. But then again, I have always thought that you do an expert job on every type of writing I have read from you. Real good!
I love the choice in song to accompany this piece Jodah :) I enjoyed the read, as always :)
Hi Jodah you so interestingly approached Flash Fiction here always a good hub from you. Best Wishes!
Well done, John!
I may have to take a shot at this one myself.
Beautifully written
Good morning Jodah wow what an awe-inspiring hub, this was fantastic. So heart-felt and stirred so many different emotions as you read it. Terrific, absolutely loved it. Take care Jodah.
Reading stories about dreams are always very intriguing, they usually have some suspense. Your story has a very great twist of reality connected to the dream you have dreamt. (Though Fictional) :-)
- hari
Hello John. I also remember this challenge. You addressed it well here in this flash fiction fury.
Well...maybe it's just me, but I thought your story was hilarious. Not sure if that's what you were going for though. =)
As always John, well done. I love everything from the title to the prose and especially the enigmatic ending. This one brought back memories of a friend of mine who wrote a series of radio commercials about shoes. His shoes talked and were named "Left Shoe" and "Right Shoe". I don't remember the dialogue but I recall that it was funny and did generate a goodly number of shoe sales.
Very creative Jodah. Just the way some dreams appear to be crazy with no meaning, yet, there is a meaning behind it.
Very thought-provoking for such a quick read. Thank you. I will be looking at my shoes in a different light . . .
What site have you got going? I missed seeing it...
You said so much in 350 words...I cannot even imagine it being done in 100 or less!
How is your site going? Looks like you got plenty of volunteers. Popular guy I would say.
May it all go like magic!
Amazing story! It seems you actually experienced that dream and put into words. But, the ending is even more stupendous. What a great crafting of the story! Enjoyed a lot. Thanks for the treat.
You had me with the title...from there on it was all dessert, and very tasty dessert at that. Great ending!
Beautifully written with a very intriguing end!
Great story and so brilliantly short! I guess we are all very curious what actually happened. To be continued maybe...? :)
Oh, cool one, John. I do remember some sort of challenge here on HubPages, as Ruby does, involving shoes. I know he wet his pants after looking out that window! Peace and blessings
This is so strange. I wrote a story on this picture of shoes. I don't remember the name of the contest, I didn't win but received an honorable mention. I think it was connected to Hub Pages somehow. It was a long time ago. Anyhow, I liked your story and the surprise ending.
Wonderful. Makes me just pause and wonder.
Yes, bro. Awesome! You've mastered it. Even the ending which not all can do. That bit of magic! That unexpected twist!
So sorry that you can't find this challenge. I believe I read something of it, but this was a long time ago. Well done!
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