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The Boulevard of Empty Shoes (A Flash Fiction Story)

Updated on October 31, 2016
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John has many years writing experience including a Writing School course "Writing for Profit." He has written text for children's books etc.

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Inspiration for this Story

Last year there was a forum post by Christy Kirwan advising of an outside short fiction competition/social experiment based on a photo prompt. The only guidelines were that the story be based on the photo provided and under 100 words in length. Unfortunately I can't find the link to that particular forum and can't use the original photograph. It was a picture of a lone figure standing at the entrance to a street filled entirely of shoes.

This is the story I submitted but expanded to around 350 words. I hope you enjoy "The Boulevard of Empty Shoes".

Cropped and enhanced version of original photo
Cropped and enhanced version of original photo | Source

The Boulevard of Empty Shoes

I woke up with a start. Not knowing what aroused me I stared at the alarm clock. It was 7.00 am; time for me to get up for work, but the alarm hadn't gone off. I showered, dressed, downed a quick cup of instant coffee, slipped on my shoes, and walked out the door.

I only lived three blocks from my office building so rarely drove; besides walking was healthier and you could enjoy the sights. Today, though, something seemed a little odd. Normally at this time of day, there were scores of people commuting to work, driving, cycling, and walking. But today... the streets were deserted. No cars, buses, nothing. What the f… was going on?

I turned the corner into Birkenstock Boulevard and was momentarily stopped in my tracks. The street was literally covered in shoes and boots. It was as though there had been a sudden storm that had rained down foot-ware. But there wasn’t a soul in sight.

Where were the people the shoes belonged to?

I bent down and picked up a few shoes. They were all types and sizes, from size 12 steel capped work boots down to tiny baby booties, and everything in between. I am no detective, but even if my name was Sherlock Holmes or Charlie Chan was I doubt I would be able to solve this mystery.

Tentatively I made my way along the boulevard of empty shoes and turned into Agapanthus Avenue. I stared aghast! There were a few parked vehicles in the distance, but not a sign of life, human life at least, on the busy street … just flowers, thousands of flowers.

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Cropped from original by J. Hansen | Source

The alarm woke me. 7.00 am, right on schedule. I pushed the snooze button and rubbed my eyes. Wow! That had been one hell of a dream.

After laying there semi-awake for another 10 minutes, I showered, dressed, downed a quick cup of instant coffee…and went to slip my shoes on … but they weren’t there. I couldn’t find them anywhere. In fact, all my shoes were missing.

Looking out the window didn't ease my discomfort. My flower garden was also empty.

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      John Hansen 19 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Flourish. Maybe one day I will continue the story and help solve the mystery.

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      FlourishAnyway 19 months ago from USA

      A bewildering mystery that makes me wonder what did happen? Well written and enjoyed.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Larry, glad you enjoyed this piece of flash fiction.

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      Larry Rankin 20 months ago from Oklahoma

      Wonderfully entertaining.

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      Shauna L Bowling 20 months ago from Central Florida

      I meant the guy must have freaked out to find his dream wasn't really a dream at all, but you figured out what I was trying to say anyway. That's what happens when someone's talking to me while I'm trying to type....

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Yes, I would freak out if it was me, Shauna. Thanks.

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      Shauna L Bowling 20 months ago from Central Florida

      Funky story, John. The guy have freaked out to find his dream wasn't really a dream at all.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Genna. Good to see you. From your comment, I assume this little flash fiction story..worked? Thanks for reading. Have a great week.

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      Genna East 20 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

      What a cool title; and the pic was so intriguing, John. You met the challenge well; this story had me from the very start and I didn't expect that twist, shocker ending that still has me thinking and wondering.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      It was my pleasure to share this Alicia and thank you for reading. I am glad you enjoy this type of flash fiction tale.

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      Linda Crampton 20 months ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I enjoyed reading this story and loved the mysterious ending! This is the type of flash fiction that I like to read. Thanks for sharing the tale, Jodah.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      thank you for reading this rather weird little story, Nell. Glad you enjoyed it.

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      Nell Rose 20 months ago from England

      Whoo spooky! lol! I love these kind of stories, you wake up, its weird, then you wake and its still, well, weirder! great write!

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Vellur. I wanted to leave it up to the reader to try to imagine the cause and outcome of the story.

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      Nithya Venkat 20 months ago from Dubai

      Great story, brilliant write. I can imagine so many things that could have happened.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you very much, rcorcutt. I really appreciate that comment. It is hat all writers love to hear.

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      rcorcutt 20 months ago

      Nice work. It has been a long time since I have read your work and I can see the growth.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Deb. Truth certainly can be stranger than fiction. This was a little weird. But glad you enjoyed it.

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      John Hansen 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Mel, much appreciated. I do admit I was always reluctant to try my hand at Flash Fiction. You can either pull it off, or it just falls flat. It sure takes some practice, but it seems to get easier and is satisfying when it works, especially the ending. Now I am off to read your hub about watching sci-fi movies. Cheers.

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      Deb Hirt 20 months ago from Stillwater, OK

      This is a fabulous story. Truth can be stranger than fiction, yet you were given a small glimpse into the future. A great piece, for sure. Keep it up.

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      Mel Carriere 21 months ago from San Diego California

      Mysterious. Leaves a lot of room for speculation on the part of the reader. I wish I had the patience for flash fiction, because I think it actually requires a great deal more discipline than the longer, more rambling type, an ability to reign in the running roughshod imagination for a quick burst. Great work!

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Haha Cyndi10, I am sure if you went through them all you would find at least the perfect pair of one of those brands. Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed the story.

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      Cynthia B Turner 21 months ago from Georgia

      This was great fun to read. Easy to step into your character's shoes and imagine myself looking at a street filled with nothing but shoes. To take it a step further, I imagine what fun it might be to look for size six designer shoes. Any Chanel, Farragamo...? LOL.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Chitrangada, I am glad this short story kept you interested and intrigued right to the twist at the end. In my original story it wasn't a dream, but I thought that would add a little extra to the tale.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 21 months ago from New Delhi, India

      Great response to the challenge!

      This sounds so mysterious and keeps the reader engaged till the end. Reading stories about dreams is always very intriguing and I like the suspense and the twist towards the end.

      Thanks for an interesting read!

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Eric, I did leave he readers with more questions than answers with this one but sometimes that is what makes it all the more interesting. It allows the imagination to get a little exercise. Thanks for reading as always.

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      Eric Wayne Flynn 21 months ago from Providence, Rhode Island

      Great job Jodah, left me with a bewildered feeling, but not all things need answers.

      EWF

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Shyron, thanks for adding that funny little verse. Yes, the video of that song would be a good addition. Blessings.

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      Shyron E Shenko 21 months ago from Texas

      John,

      Your shoes were walking out on you

      Taking all your flowers too

      Where were they taking all the flowers

      While you just slept for hours

      Maybe you could go back to sleep

      If that is not hard

      You just might find them on the Boulevard

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      Blessings my friend

      You could add the Youtube video of "My Shoes Keep Walking Back To You" that would be a nice touch.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Frank. The ending was something I added in the revamp.I wasn't happy with the ending only 100 words allowed me.this worked much better. I think the original challenge was part of a psychological experiment by a college...not 100% sure

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      The Twighlight Zone and the lesser known The Outer Limits were two of my favourite shows as a kid, Missy, so if anything I write is considered to have been suitabeofan episode it is quite a compliment. I can hear the music opening of Twighlight Zone In my head up don't know how to write it down :) glad you like the Green Day song too. Cheers.

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      Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton

      I enjoyed this little flash.. but really thought the ending was right on... :) I don't remember the challenge, but I bet you nailed it with this little piece :)

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      Missy Smith 21 months ago from Florida

      do do do do, or na na na na? I couldn't remember what the beginning of that show sounded like the most. lol. Anyway, again, I loved this story, and I am a fan of Green Day. The song you posted is one of my favorite songs of theirs! :)

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      Missy Smith 21 months ago from Florida

      Na na na na na na na na...You unlock this door with a key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension; a dimension of sound, a dimension of sight, a dimension of mind. You are moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You just crossed into the...Twilight Zone!!

      Great story, John, as you can tell, it reminded me of The Twilight Zone episodes. lol. This story would have made an interesting episode on that show. :)

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Compliments like that could go to one's head MsDora :) but thank you anyway.

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      Dora Weithers 21 months ago from The Caribbean

      You tied it up expertly. But then again, I have always thought that you do an expert job on every type of writing I have read from you. Real good!

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Luna Blue. Glad you enjoyed the read, and Green Day is one of my favourite bands so I thought this song appropriate.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for always reading my hubs Devika. I always appreciate your comments too.

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      Luna Blue 21 months ago

      I love the choice in song to accompany this piece Jodah :) I enjoyed the read, as always :)

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      Devika Primić 21 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Hi Jodah you so interestingly approached Flash Fiction here always a good hub from you. Best Wishes!

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Will, much appreciated. Sure, why don't you have a shot at this one. As I said I don't have the original pic but you can use my main photo as a prompt.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Dehan.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Linda, thank you for reading and leaving such a lovely comment. I am glad you enjoyed this weird little tale. Have a great day.

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      WillStarr 21 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Well done, John!

      I may have to take a shot at this one myself.

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      Dehan 21 months ago

      Beautifully written

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      Linda Robinson 21 months ago from Cicero, New York

      Good morning Jodah wow what an awe-inspiring hub, this was fantastic. So heart-felt and stirred so many different emotions as you read it. Terrific, absolutely loved it. Take care Jodah.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Hari. In the original shorter version I wasn't able to add the twist at the end successfully. Glad it worked well with this longer version.

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      Hari Prasad S 21 months ago from Bangalore

      Reading stories about dreams are always very intriguing, they usually have some suspense. Your story has a very great twist of reality connected to the dream you have dreamt. (Though Fictional) :-)

      - hari

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Mike. I found it an interesting challenge.

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      mckbirdbks 21 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello John. I also remember this challenge. You addressed it well here in this flash fiction fury.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      I'll take any compliment I can get..scary, funny...hilarious is good. Thanks YouGet1Shot. Much appreciated.

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      Chris Desatoff 21 months ago from USA

      Well...maybe it's just me, but I thought your story was hilarious. Not sure if that's what you were going for though. =)

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Bill, as always. Glad this brought back memories of your friend's radio commercials. They obviously worked well if they increased shoe sales.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      So true Dana, dreams do often appear random and unconnected to anything, but a deeper meaning can usually be found. Not sure what that meaning is in this story though.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Carolyn. Don't forget to check your garden too :)

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Mary, in a forum I suggested creative writers and poets start their own niche site, as those genres are not in the immediate plans for HubPages new niches. Well the idea has taken off with a lot of people wanting to join. At the moment we have set up a Facebook group "The Creative Exiles" to plan it. If you have a Facebook profile you can apply to join the group. If not just state your interest and your application will be considered by the selection committee for when the new web site is launched.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Jackie, the original 100 word story sure was a challenge and left even more questions than this one. Thanks for reading. The idea of the new site seems to be a popular one I'd say.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Good to see you Venkat. Thank you for such a generous comment. Glad you enjoyed both the story and ending.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Bill, I hope you enjoyed your dessert :) I thought the title sounded catchy..glad it worked.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you so much Swalia.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Buildreps, than you for the great comment. Sometimes a writer just has to leave the readers wondering. Who knows, maybe further down the track I may add a further ending.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Haha Faith. I think he may have done just that.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Ruby. I went through all the forums for the last two years and couldn't find reference to it. I got an honourable mention too if I remember rightly. Glad you liked the ending.

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      Bill Russo 21 months ago from Cape Cod

      As always John, well done. I love everything from the title to the prose and especially the enigmatic ending. This one brought back memories of a friend of mine who wrote a series of radio commercials about shoes. His shoes talked and were named "Left Shoe" and "Right Shoe". I don't remember the dialogue but I recall that it was funny and did generate a goodly number of shoe sales.

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      Dana Tate 21 months ago from LOS ANGELES

      Very creative Jodah. Just the way some dreams appear to be crazy with no meaning, yet, there is a meaning behind it.

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      Carolyn Fields 21 months ago from South Dakota, USA

      Very thought-provoking for such a quick read. Thank you. I will be looking at my shoes in a different light . . .

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 21 months ago from Southern Illinois

      What site have you got going? I missed seeing it...

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      Jackie Lynnley 21 months ago from The Beautiful South

      You said so much in 350 words...I cannot even imagine it being done in 100 or less!

      How is your site going? Looks like you got plenty of volunteers. Popular guy I would say.

      May it all go like magic!

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      Venkatachari M 21 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Amazing story! It seems you actually experienced that dream and put into words. But, the ending is even more stupendous. What a great crafting of the story! Enjoyed a lot. Thanks for the treat.

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      Bill Holland 21 months ago from Olympia, WA

      You had me with the title...from there on it was all dessert, and very tasty dessert at that. Great ending!

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      Shaloo Walia 21 months ago

      Beautifully written with a very intriguing end!

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      Buildreps 21 months ago from Europe

      Great story and so brilliantly short! I guess we are all very curious what actually happened. To be continued maybe...? :)

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      Faith Reaper 21 months ago from southern USA

      Oh, cool one, John. I do remember some sort of challenge here on HubPages, as Ruby does, involving shoes. I know he wet his pants after looking out that window! Peace and blessings

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 21 months ago from Southern Illinois

      This is so strange. I wrote a story on this picture of shoes. I don't remember the name of the contest, I didn't win but received an honorable mention. I think it was connected to Hub Pages somehow. It was a long time ago. Anyhow, I liked your story and the surprise ending.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Eric, hmm I guess it does. Just keep an eye on those lovely roses of yours.

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      Eric Dierker 21 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Wonderful. Makes me just pause and wonder.

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      John Hansen 21 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Manatita, an "awesome" from you means a lot. Glad you thought the ending worked too. You are right that is not easy to get right. Cheers bro.

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      manatita44 21 months ago from london

      Yes, bro. Awesome! You've mastered it. Even the ending which not all can do. That bit of magic! That unexpected twist!

      So sorry that you can't find this challenge. I believe I read something of it, but this was a long time ago. Well done!