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Under The Brooklyn Bridge

Updated on February 13, 2015

It was darkness that filled the air,

As silence fell between

The investigating pair,

Murder and darkness was a perfect fit,

The silence settled

Until the lead detective broke it,

As the body washed up

Under the BrooklynBridge,

On the left side of the ridge,

Beneath a broken light,

The water controlled the body,

Without putting up a fight,

No eyes in the sockets,

Murder like that was hell,

And as far as the detectives could tell,

Her hands and feet were missing as well,

The woman was nude,

And the water stream was rude,

Exposing every part of her body,

But thankful for the darkness,

It concealed all the stares,

The whispers and the fears,

As her spirit shot toward the sky,

Casting a shadow over the crime scene,

And knowing it was a dreary place to die.

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton

      what?

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      Bagas 2 years ago

      The clear sleeves I use in my vodeis or what? I'll add those to toygamingemporium(dot)com one of these days but due to the weight of the packs, shipping will be pricey especially internationally. If buying just 1 pack shipping may be 2/3rds of the total cost

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Janice for visiting the brooklyn bridgr

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      JanieceTobey 2 years ago

      Interesting. Darkness and silence were what were felt by the others nearby. But I wonder what she herself noticed as she left her body, as Soul. Did she see a light? Or hear a sound? As she returned to heaven... Or was it all darkness and silence for her as well. Thanks for the very interesting poem!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Marlene, Senorittaa, Wayne, Torrilyn, Our Ms Brooks, wowsite, phyllis.. thank you for visiting my Brooklyn Bridge :)

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      Good work as always! votes up!

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      Senoritaa 4 years ago

      Oh what a brutal death! And stuff like this happens for real. That's what is sad. Brilliant write Frank, as usual.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Poetically dark and mysterious. Very good work.

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      torrilynn 4 years ago

      Hi Frank,

      thanks for this really great hub

      and poem that showcases off soo much pain

      and mystery. thank again. Voted up.

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 4 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      You put a lot of tense mystery into a short poem, Frank. Very well done! Easy to read and explicit detail, and the scene is very vivid. Voted Up

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      wowsite1234 4 years ago from Moncks Corner, SC

      Great Poem!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Anytime Sweetie2

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      sweetie2 4 years ago from Delhi

      Frank thank for the new year wishes...happy new year to you too.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much tobusiness and Jackie for visiting my Brooklyn Bridge

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      Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Very scary for us weak of heart. lol It takes brave people to become investigators and law enforcement, indeed. All the grisly scenes they must see. I wonder if their minds ever empty of these?

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, I'll never think of Brooklyn Bridge in quite the same way again. :). You still manages to grab us and take us along. Willing or not, after the first line, we are committed to the very end.

      Brilliant!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Vin Gypsy and Rosemay50 for visiting my bridge :)

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      An excellent write, you expertly set the scene. gave me the shivers.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up. Fantastic and tragic. Know the Brooklyn Bridge well and beneath it are dark and dismal places. Loved this.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Terribly dark, but this gives adrenaline rush.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Mhatter and Faith bless you both :)

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Very creepy - no eyes!!! I would hate to run across such. When my mother was very young, she and her brother were walking along the shoreline of Lake Eerie, and they came upon a dead male body. Talk about eerie! She remembers the dead person having red hair.

      Now, I am sure to have lovely dreams.

      Voted up +++ and sharing

      God bless. In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Thank you for this. I think you did a reak good job setting the scene.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      im sorry to have given you the creeps Ruch..LOL thanks for stopping by...

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      Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

      Frank, are you a detective by profession cause you relate your incidents so well that they give creeps...lol

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for reading my Brooklyn Bridge :)

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      acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

      Oh good grief!!! Brilliantly written though as always!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Valleypoet for your comment and your compliment bless you bro :)

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      A grim discovery.... it must be very upsetting for someone to make a discovery of this nature...the detectives, I guess,have unfortunately seen it all before...another brilliant descriptive piece...thanks Frank:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks X-man for stopping by :)

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      A bleak and difficult day, with an investigation that could lead nowhere, given the state of the body, yet someone morned the vicim, someone else hid the truth. Good one Frank!