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The Delayed Arrival

Updated on October 2, 2015
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So much noise,

so much chatter,

but you really couldn’t hear a sound,

and that much didn’t matter,

the body stayed on the ground,

stranded there by the delayed arrival

of the ambulance,

who was coming from another call

on the other side of town,

it was a cool week day,

the start of the Fall,

Summer was almost happy to leave,

it would stay,

if it had any sense at all,

a hysterical mother crying

at the dead’s boy’s feet,

sorrow stuck to her,

like a hot August heat,

the crowd there,

were thinking that the police didn’t care,

because it was just another black kid

out in the street,

covered up with a transparent plastic sheet,

a pity, turmoil in the city,

as out of towners drove by,

with nothing more than casual curiosity,

and not even wondering why,

it wasn’t their neighborhood,

as racial epithets

were stacked like firewood.,

and the day was begging to fade,

while the medical team was still delayed.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Eric :)

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Wow I needed a "Frank" fix, this was great!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Audrey :)

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Sad write Frank--but so well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Raci :)

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      another sad plight, and you are a master story teller Frank...as if i am there watching as the scene unfolds......

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      and thank you too Express10 for stoppin by my page..bless you

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much the lyric writer :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      I can't believe I missed this one. What the h**# is wrong with me Frank:) This is great poetry, a sad story though. The streets are not no joke, never will be. Frank, another gem on hand my friend. Hope you enjoy your weekend.

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      H C Palting 5 years ago from East Coast

      You have an excellent ability to make the reader immediately visualize the scene. I enjoyed reading this. You have done a very good job.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Ruchira for stopping by bless you

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      gosh...this is sad yet beautiful poem, Frank!

      many votes indeed!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks sueswan

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank

      "the crowd there,

      were thinking that the police didn’t care,

      because it was just another black kid

      out in the street,

      covered up with a transparent plastic sheet"

      You have done a wonderful job in portraying a sad reality.

      Take care :)

      Voted up and away.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by again Rahul :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am in awe of your skill and art my friend! Such a beautiful picture you paint with your words

      Amazing! Mesmerizing! Flawless

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Audrey bless you

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Frank--another great piece--it just flows so naturally--and you are so able to create an atmosphere and an evocative emotional context--a hallmark for you!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Gypsy48

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      Gypsy48 5 years ago

      Another awesome poem, awesome writing. Your words paint such a descriptive picture of a too often sad scene.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by Susan and Storyteller as always good to see you bless you guys :)

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      Barbara 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      Life on the street. Repeat? Repeat. Life on the street. How terribly terribly sad.

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Always enjoy what you write. This piece is so sad, but a true reality of so many places.

      Up and awesome!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      aaww thank you so much Cyndi10 bless you

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      Cynthia B Turner 5 years ago from Georgia

      Oh, this is awesome, Frank. "And sorrow stuck to her like a hot August heat..." Palpable. Wonderful poetry. Voted awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      H thank you soooo much bless you

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      Brenda Barnes 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      Frank, you are such a good writer. Your word choices seem carefully chosen and I like that quality. This sad scene you wrote happens all over the country, probably every day. You made a tragedy beautiful in its painful reality.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by Epi and I will check her out now thanks :)

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ..well as you know Frank - I so do love your writing - we have very similar styles - and tell such great stories in so few but well chosen words - great minds truly do think alike - please if you would - check out my buddy Maria - who goes by the name of Scrittobene - at the Hub - thanks for that kind sir.

      lake erie time 11:31am

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Shim-Dawn :)

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Frank, There you are back at it again.. this is so heart wrenching! Amazing as always. Have a blessed day!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Rosemay and the gang... and Alastar I know what you mean and I too have witnessed such a scene.. bless you man..peace not only in the middle east..

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      ytsenoh thank you for visiting my delayed arrival... bless you for the comment

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you incourage I feel encouraged LOL and thank you so much for visiting my Delayed Arrival

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Dfiduccia I thank you for saying just that bless you man :)

      and Pegcole as always good to see you stopping by

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Poetic Fool Bless you

      And thank you too Vincent Moore.. wonderful comment..

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Your rhyming poem is a fine companion to your prose work Frank. It brought up memories of a young teenaged youth shot mortally during a drive-by; he tried to lift himself off the ground several times as the life force slowly ebbed away. He was an African- Amer and no one comforted him in those final minutes, they were just standing around with no compassion waiting for the EMTs.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Frank this is amazing. You have that ability to place your readers there right in the middle of it. This will strike hard in the hearts of any racist.

      Awesome work my friend

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      Cathy 5 years ago from Louisiana, Idaho, Kauai, Nebraska, South Dakota, Missouri

      Frank, very good read. My favorite lines include "as racial epithets were stacked like firewood." Your language evokes the right presentation of visuals. The pain, the sadness, the disarray, you captured what you wanted to present your readers. Thumbs up.

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      InCourage 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Frank, I agree with DF... not usually a fan of rhyme but it really works for you here. Very good turn of words in places... love the description... love the mood... it does what you set out to do and that's just alright.

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      Peg Cole 5 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Beautifully sad and true. A mother's

      "sorrow stuck to her,

      like a hot August heat"

      Captures the essence of life on the street.

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      DFiduccia 5 years ago from Las Vegas

      Frank,

      I’m not a big fan of rhyming poetry because most of it seems so contrived for the purpose of the rhyme, but your poems flow with a natural feel that is not contrived, thus holding my interest and making me a fan.

      Voted up.

      DF

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      This is a very powerful piece Frank, I am blown away by how you place the seasons with the event, it was a very sad day indeed, yet as you scribed unnoticed by rippled faces passing by. Poetic Foll summed it up very well.

      I've seen it time and time again in my life, to many victims are discriminated by others as subhumans and a second notice is not taken. Powerful, very powerful, voted up and all buttons pressed except Funny. We will leave that to the politicians. Peace and blessings to you.

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      Poetic Fool 5 years ago

      Frank, what an awesome piece. Really, really great! You've captured the essence of class distinction, the haves and have nots. And what awesome lines these are:

      as out of towners drove by,

      with nothing more than casual curiosity,

      and not even wondering why,

      it wasn’t their neighborhood,

      as racial epithets

      were stacked like firewood.

      You've eloquently described the apathy and the distance. After all, it's just another black kid and it's not their neighborhood! There's no hurry. This is a thought-provoking write, Frank. Thanks for sharing it.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      VG yeah right.. a man as talented as you come up with a good comment man! LOL kidding thanks as always

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Dear Frank, I cannot find words to appreciate your works. You always leave me astounded with your brilliance.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Phoebe you're so sweet thank you

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      Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

      Another amazing piece Frank. You should compile these into a book. I would definitely buy your work.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Mr. X.. thank you so much for visiting my delayed arrival and your wonderful comment too Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Joyce, my friend always good to see you bless you.. and Kat what a nice comment but you're still all that..LOL thanks for reading my delayed arrival :)

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Great poem, great commentary as well! You are on the street as you read it. You build a great atmosphere in a few lines about a sad event. Up, all but funny! & Shared.

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      KatrineDalMonte 5 years ago

      Frank, this is so good and sad at the same time. Love the way you paint the scene with your words. There is also so much truth in your writing, sadly.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Frank, this is an amazing poem you've out done yourself with this one.

      Voted up and awesome, Joyce your friend.