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The Fallout

Updated on February 13, 2015


It took place over on the West Side,

the city’s 30th homicide,

the detective unit was dealing

with the fallout from a triple shooting,

chaos on the streets,

people breaking into stores and looting,

one guy shot in the head,

nothing could be done for him,

he was already pronounced dead,

a streetwalker with blood on her feet,

whose customer was shot on River Street,

she said she was taking him for a ride,

until he became another homicide,

the city needed a reality check,

there was a young girl

who was a nervous wreck,

she killed her boyfriend

as she compensated for the end

of their relationship by shooting

him in the chest,

she fired three times,

and she did her best,

he wouldn’t survive as he bleeds,

soon he’ll be planted in a cemetery,

pushing up weeds,

the detective unit scans the bustling activity,

and the crime around them just grows,

a city with so many wonderful people,

but only the ugly shows.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks senoritaa :) for reading

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      I read this just after I read about the shootout near Empire State building. Oh man!!

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      Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

      You're welcome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Phoebe :)

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      Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

      Another amazing piece. Dark and powerful piece.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Rosemay and VG thank you so much for visiting my Fallout bless you both Frank

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Frank, you choose powerful expressions to depict gruesome events.

      You have composed this dramatic poem wonderfully.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Another awesome piece Frank. This could be any city in the world.

      It is awful when the bad hides all the good. Read the newspapers, it is always the crimes that hit the front pages not the good news.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      LOL thanks so much Alastar for your colorful comments bless you :)

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      A reality tour through the mean streets by the master recorder. Important point how the bad deeds of the minority always seem to obscure those of the good folk in peoples perceptions. Wickedness sells and good deeds often go unreported. "Sherlock Poems', do believe Mr Mike has something there!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      again thanks MCKbirds for stopping by bless you :) Frank

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      I am thinking the book title will be 'Sherlock Poems"

      by Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much pegcole17

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      Peg Cole 5 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      "Pushing up weeds." I haven't heard that in a long while, Frank. Love the detail and the succinct way you put all this into this short prose about the ugly side.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Joyce thank you soo much I have nothing but love and respect for you :) Frank Patty thank you so much for your kind words and the X-man always good to see you on my pages... and thank you thelyricwriter and Gypsy good to see you too bless you all :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much TTombs my dear friend and Gypsy48 for visiting my crime spree? LOL.. and thank you too awesome Josh and blossom for your comments :) Frank

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      As much as I hate to think about it this reminds me of my hometown N.Y.C. where you have to know where you are going, keep your nose out of other people's business and be so very careful. Well done.

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Frank, another awesome job pal!

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Great crime stuff here Frank, you can almost here the deadpan delivery of the detective in it! Up!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      AWESOME JOB!!!!!! Your detail to the crime scenes you build is soooo AMAZING!!!! I am always captivated from the beginning and eager to see how it ends!!! Lots of Votes!!!

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Wonderful great poem which never fails. You are the best writer of these crime poems.

      Soon we'll see another book of poems out.

      Vote up awesome and over the moon, Joyce.

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 5 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      How true! Why do we always concentrate on the bad when there is so much good happening in the world? A great poem.

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      Joshua Zerbini 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Frank,

      WOW, this awesome! I wonder if any who have commented even know about the video game you have posted here?!

      Great poem, this is my favorite so far! I love you ability to write crime poetry!! :)

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      Gypsy48 5 years ago

      Love the last two lines-

      "a city with so many wonderful people,

      but only the ugly shows."

      How true those words are, another amazing poem from you Frank!

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      Terrye Toombs 5 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

      Frank, this could describe just about any big city these days. Heck, even some of the smaller towns around here these days. We just had a murder and attempted murder in one of the oil boom towns. Crime is getting crazy around here. This was a great read, as always! :) My most talented friend, keep up the great crime wave !:)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Jackie :)

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      Jackie Lynnley 5 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Sad but true and you tell it really well. Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Valleypoet for your wonderful comment

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      Valleypoet 5 years ago

      Only the ugly shows...quite poignant I think Frank. Even the most violent of places have a vast majority of wonderful people, but it is the cases of extreme violence that will always, sadly, stand out..and be representative of a city or community...another great snapshot of the work of the hapless detective, in fine poetic form.