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The Narrowing Darkness

Updated on August 10, 2013

The night was still and cold,

her curly locks were as yellow as gold,

hearing faint calls, once bold,

a campfire died very slow,

behind an oak tree a century old,

then a thin laughter filled the air,

as it filled her with fear,

a thin spirit smiling from a far,

a bit of white still visible

narrowing the dark’s dawn,

then gone,

giving her just enough room,

as she turned towards the moon,

a shadow stood next to her,

in a dark drape,

almost like a devil’s cape,

with a monstrous shape,

carrying a slightly nauseating smell,

standing near the dark gates of hell,

her thoughts streaming,

her inner mind screaming,

her features delicately chiseled

and gleaming,

she then fell to her knees,

and started praying,

her blood and flesh began decaying,

then the shadow put his hands

on her tappered hips,

and blood began foaming on her lips,

the narrow darkness had something to teach,

as the angels above started to preach,

then the shadow started receding,

like water leaving the clean swept beach.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio


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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      aaawww that was sweet :)

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      Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

      Frank, you surely have been blessed with a rare gift... never stop writing. The world would be less beautiful without your work.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you acaetnna for reading my narrowing darkness...:)

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      acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

      Gosh such a scary read before I go to bed! Great write though as always.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      lol oh yeah? LOL thanks Cara

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      Cara.R 5 years ago from New York

      Hi Frank,

      You always amaze me! I couldn't help but read this with a tune in my head, I think it would make for a great heavy metal song!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks my fellow poet bless you for stopping by :)

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      I think I won't be lighting campfires near any old oak trees, especially if they are close to a cemetary. This was chilling and melting as I felt her disolve into the nether world of Hell. The grim reaper was reaping by the looks of it under the moonlight, watch out for those shadows and keep looking over our shoulder and run like the blazes if we feel him close. Well done my poet, bravo. Voted up and shared.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much doc.. :)

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      I like the imagery of the shadow putting his hands on her hips. that is original. voted up! Fantastic Frank:)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for reading Seeker7 sunshine, tobyz, Vin, and seboritaa bless you all :) September, Lord

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      Helen Murphy Howell 6 years ago from Fife, Scotland

      This is one of the best supernatural poems I have read. You create a wonderuful tension and anticipation that was awesome! But it also has beauty within it's depths. A truly remarkable poem.

      I really loved this piece of work and have bookmarked as a favourite! Voted up + awesome!

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      Linda Bilyeu 6 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Eerie and excellent! Good luck with the contest!

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      tobzyjen81 6 years ago from lafayette , alabama

      This poem had me on the edge of my seat. It's really good.

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      september girl 6 years ago

      Good but scary. : ) Not sure what to make of it, as it is haunting and dauntingly well done!

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      Joseph De Cross 6 years ago

      nice one Frankie! Hope you get something from the contest. Angels and beaches, preachers and BIT...noo i meant say over the rainbow and bridges! Glad to know Frank is a great poet too. keep writing my friend!


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      Vinaya Ghimire 6 years ago from Nepal

      Its a dark night in Kathmandu, I'm listening to Pink Floyd and I have just read your poetry.