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The Pinnacle of Violence

Updated on October 12, 2016





Detective Nathan Chambers found he was panting as though he had run several miles non-stop, and his heart pounded, so that he could feel it jump and slap against his rib cage. It almost felt like fish out of water. However, he had not been running at all. The only source of exercise he got was the long walk from his unmarked cruiser to the basement of a two story shit pile over on East Main Street near the 24 hour bodega owned by Indians.
A voice of despair rang out from the basement's darkness. That voice shrilled and echoed through Chambers' subconscious mind. His brain was rattling like a ping pong ball being shot across the table by two professionals in a win take all tournament.
There were over two hundred dead pit-bulls covering most of the basement floor. Some of the dogs were still fresh while most had already dried. It was such an ugly, horrific scene. The smell was rancid, but it was the visual that made Chambers throw up. He had never seen such cruelty in his entire time as lead detective. The crime of violence to these animals was so appalling he couldn't think at all. No words entered his mind, and no words exited. His mouth just stayed opened.
Two uniforms came down the stairs and when one of them turned on the lights, her scream flooded the air. In that heart stopping ululation of a good old fashion scare her body convulsed. She had to be helped by her partner who too wanted to fall flat on his face.
"Goddamn it!" Chambers growled. "Get her out of here if she can't stand the freaking heat!"
The uniforms understood the tone, but not the words. They knew that the scene was also troubling for the lead detective. He barked out those words to slow down his racing heart. They knew Chambers too well, as they turned and left the scene.
Chambers closed his eyes and he heard movement coming from the pile of rotting flesh. Fear streamed out of every pore on his skin and floated around the basement like smoke. He moved through the mass and came across one of the fresh dogs. It was a a black and white mid size pit-bull with half of his insides spilling on top of another dead dog. The dog was actually half dead clinging on to instincts alone. A nervous Chambers pulled out his service revolver and fired a shot into the suffering animal. He bowed his head and dropped the gun, all in one motion.
Detective Peter O'Brien didn't want to go into the basement. He didn't have the heart to see the inhumanity, the cruelty, the heartless results in which humans treat animals. Instead he wanted to find out who was responsible as he took the long walk up the rotting wooded stairs and down a hallway of cluttered human failures.
No one saw anything, and no one knew how the dogs ended up in their basement. The residences of the two story shit pile fell silent, staring as O'Brien passed them slowly.
"Over two hundred dead dogs!" he screamed.
He was heard, but they didn't bother to listen.
Several hours after a meat truck cleared the scene Chambers gathered all the people living in the two story down in the basement. He wanted them to smell the death in the air. He wanted them to see the blood stained floor. He wanted them to feel the anguish he felt when he came down into the basement. But it did nothing to them, but agitate as he wasted their time. There was no feelings, no remorse, nothing.
Nothing...
"Fuck you!" Chambers screamed and just walked out.




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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      The cold, hard, ugly truth. This is fiction that carries a whollop, an important message in today's world, perfectly delivered.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Mail Man...LOL for reading my short..:)

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      Becky Katz 2 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      Seen much too often anymore, and still revolting and heartbreaking. Beautifully written.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Becky Katz

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      How horrible; a special hell for devils that do this, to be sure.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for checking my short Jackie... :)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I know it's fiction but it could happen anywhere. Someone surely hated pit-bulls. Tha last picture made me tear up, who could do this? Very gripping story Frank. I hope you write more on this. I want to see whoever did this FRY...Great story..Shared on Twitter..

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you always for always being there for my shorts..bless you

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      Frank, I'm working for the time being in Philadelphia. Last spring I had an ooccasion to visit the humane society. While there, I asked to see the dogs available for adoption. Cage after cage after cage of pit-bulls were all I saw. Almost no other breeds were present. Dozens in all. I can't help but believe that this industry is behind the abundance of pit-bulls in Philadelphia. Sad story and based fully on fact. Thanks for the enlightening story so fully dramatized.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you for sharing your story Cam...:)

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      A fiction story that is all too horribly true. Very well-written, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you dear Phyllis :)

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Ohhh, how horrible! I almost could not make it through it after that sickening first photo there .... Unfortunately, this seems to be an ever-increasing reality in this sick world and your words have vividly painted the picture gruesomely, and then coupled with the actual photos : (

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      My dear Faith the truth can be troubling... sicker than this fiction..thank you

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      Diana L Pierce 2 years ago from Potter County, Pa.

      Thank God this is fiction, but we all see things go on around us much like it. Too bad society has gotten so crazy that innocent animals suffer from what humans have done.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Diana Lee and I agree

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      We may not see them in a pile of 200 high, but the cruelty to animal is still staggering. Thank God, there are more good people than bad. I can feel the anger rising as I glanced at the first image. Another powerful write.

      Well done.

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      good writing frank

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Certain names come to mind when I read this.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you tobusiness, clive and flourishanyway...:)

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      Peg Cole 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      I had to read this one with my eyes closed, Frank. It is such a travesty to hear about animal abuse and to experience it first hand must be unimaginably tough. In these cases, the punishment should fit the crime.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      it is indeed unimaginably tough.. had photos on here and hub pages deemed it too violent and I agreed so I took them down..but thank you so much for reading

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      The title is so fitting. The crime is heinous enough, but to show no remorse? You portray emotions and lack of it so well. Another good job!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you for reading my violence MsDora :)

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Spot on Frank! When are you going to write a novel?? You should!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Audrey.. just waiting for yours LOL bless you

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      With twisted stomach filled with pain I read this story that smacks so much of truth. That twisted part of society that breeds dogs to kill each other and sadly the one who usually pays the price is the pit bull.

      Voted up, useful, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Till fo checking out my violence :)

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      Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

      Hi Frank, I must admit it did turn the old stomach, i am afraid the bullet would have hit the person accidently! powerful stuff, and if I saw anyone hurt a dog, well, I won't say what I would do! gruesome stuff.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      so would I... Nell... i had photos up but hubpages made me take them down too much reality for them..LOL

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      ubrish ali 2 years ago from Pakistan(Asia)

      awesome attempt....keep it up Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks ubrish :)

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Your powerful imagery pulls us in right from the start. The bodies of the pit bulls is such an unspeakable, horrific scene; at first, I couldn’t believe what I was reading. “Fear streamed out of every pore on his skin and floated around the basement like smoke.” “…down a hallway of cluttered human failures.” You always are so unique with your descriptions and metaphors, Frank. Those last two words Chambers screamed said it all to those two-legged “things” he took down to the basement. I only wish there was some way he and the authorities could have forced them to stay there under house arrest. Great writing, as always, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Genna for always visiting ..bless you

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      Tijani Achamlal 2 years ago from Morocco

      What a crime ! Thank God,it was just a fiction.Anyway,very descriptive and fascinating.Voted up

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks James-wolve

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      sujaya venkatesh 2 years ago

      grt work

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you sujaya

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      Smilealot 2 years ago

      Your stories really do take us to the darkest of places, but that is often the job of fiction...telling it like it is. 'Nicely' done Frank:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

      thanks smilealot for reading my short fictions bless you bro and thanks so much for being here for the long haul.. name changes.. but still the same

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      Audrey Howitt 13 months ago from California

      Clean, clear writing with a great edge to it Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton

      Audrey thanks for stopping by :)

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