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The Pub Murder Mystery, Chapter 1

Updated on March 07, 2017
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Peg Cole is a published author who writes true and fiction stories. In her debut novel, she captures the essence of the swinging seventies.

May 1975

Joe pulled into a spot on the far edge of the parking lot and shut off the engine. She sat for a moment quietly watching the water shimmer as dawn broke over the channel. One weathered fisherman toiled in the breeze that swept along the creaking dock, bending low as he stowed away his gear. She could almost feel the wind in her hair as she remembered gliding along on the crest of the waves. The gleaming pilot house boat that belonged to her boss rocked gently beside the other boats, its pair of Mercury v8 engines ready to take on the rough sea. It had been a while since she went out on the boat. Her friendship with the owner had taken a toll in the recent financial difficulties at work. She questioned how long she’d have the job at the rate things were going.

There were only two other two cars parked in the lot. Leftovers, she thought, a term she’d heard often over the past few months. Usually people said the word with a sneer and a knowing wink. She recognized the cars as belonging to customers that shared a ride once the lounge closed last night. Actually, it was earlier this morning when the last of them left and she’d locked up. She spent another minute listening to the tick of the cooling engine before climbing out of the seat, then, slammed and locked the door. As she followed the narrow path that lead toward the building, she wondered how things could have gone wrong so fast.

Unlocking the back door of the main lounge released a pungent odor of stale whiskey and beer which followed along the stained carpet to the service counter where she started a pot of coffee. She made a mental note to call the carpet cleaners as she waited on the Bunn-o-Matic to finish, and then followed the trail of stains down the hall and into the gleaming kitchen. Her own distorted image reflected off the gleaming appliances as she passed through the quiet of the empty kitchen.

Once she reached the office, stale cigarettes added to the mix of yesterday’s food service coming from the adjacent kitchen. Turning on the air conditioner sent a cloud of tepid vapor blossoming into the room.

“Home sweet home,” she said to no one. She wrinkled her nose and pulled out the thick bank register from the top file drawer and tossed her purse in the bottom drawer. She slammed it closed harder than she intended sending a glass vase tottering near the edge. She took a sip from her mug and remembered that the restaurant paid high dollar for the best imported Colombian blends of coffee. She ought to know. She wrote the checks when the bills came due.

The delicious coffee was just one small part of liking her job. It was easy to remember the other reasons. Where she’d worked before, there’d been little chance of promotions or even a pay raise. Her bank salary left her struggling to pay the most basic bills with the mortgage payment taking most of it. It seemed like forever since she bought anything she didn’t absolutely need.

People in town waited in line for a plush office job with weekends off. But what really squashed her hopes for advancement was when the security guard was promoted to Head Teller.

He’s never even worked on the teller line! Joe fumed when the announcement was made. So, he carries a gun and stands around gawking at the customers. How does that qualify him for the job? All the tellers were stunned by the management’s decision. There was the usual undercurrent of complaints but, despite their grumbling, no one did anything about it. That was, except for Joe.

Fed up with the special treatment men seemed to receive at the bank, she started searching for a new job. What she’d found in the small town was that few places had regular eight-to-five hours. Most places required working nights and weekends, not something she’d really wanted. That would kill her plans to attend classes at the community college. For now, she needed to concentrate on solving the cash flow problem and clear any doubts about her bookkeeping abilities. She needed this job.

She bent over the ledger and soon was engrossed in running the numbers. It’s got to be something simple like a deposit recorded twice or a transposition of numbers. At the bank, she’d learned most errors divisible by nine meant there was a transposition somewhere, although the totals showed no sign of that. With a heavy sigh, she ran the long list of handwritten figures again.

Around nine, she planned to start calling customers with past due house accounts, something she dreaded and put it off for as long as possible. She enjoyed the duties that were more like the ones she’d had at the bank. Counting stacks of cash was like playing Monopoly. She couldn’t understand why Bob let customers run up food and bar tabs. Dick’s was among those with the largest balance. Some accounts carried over a huge debt from one month to the next. But since he owned the business, she put aside his file and concentrated on the others. With any luck, she might bring in enough to cover the overdraft, although it wouldn’t cover the orders for food and supplies needed for the week. With payroll due again in two days, there was no time to waste.

1968 Chevy Malibu, 468 cubic inches, 550 horsepower
1968 Chevy Malibu, 468 cubic inches, 550 horsepower

Bob, her manager at The Pub, always insisted on taking the deposit to the bank which was fine by her. She had no desire to see her former coworkers. He used the trip as an excuse to borrow the owner’s fancy convertible while Dick ate lunch at the restaurant.

“Gas is like fifty cents a gallon,” he complained. “I can remember when it was under thirty cents!” Bob rarely drove his own gas-guzzling car to work. When Bob needed to go anywhere, he borrowed someone’s car.”

He told women. “Yeah, the brisk walk from my waterfront apartment clears away the cobwebs.” To the men, he bragged, “Walking is how I stay in such excellent shape.” Joe had to admit, for a man in his late fifties, he was lean and muscular, not paunchy like Dick whose well-padded waistline toppled over his belt obscuring his belt buckle completely.

Eating at a fancy restaurant was something she could never have afforded on her bank salary. The free meal she got everyday was one of the best things about working there. It tipped the scales when she first considered taking the job.

“There’s no such thing as a free lunch,” Dick told her recently as they ate lunch together. It was one of his favorite and most often repeated clichés. Another one was rattling on about having a Plan B.

“Yeah, I know.” She’d learned that the hard way. In a tourist town like this one, most of the jobs were either in hotels or restaurants. The beachside community with its easy access to boating and fishing drew a seasonal clientele that ebbed and flowed like the tide. Within the circle of hospitality employment, workers seemed to drift from place to place. Joe wasn’t like that. She wanted stability. She thought she’d found that when she took the job,

Despite her constant reminders to Bob, the past three months’ bank statements were missing from the files making it impossible to review them. According to the checkbook register, there should have been plenty of cash for last week’s payroll with money left over. Over the past few weeks with checks bouncing and fingers pointing, she began to miss her old job at the bank. Employees screamed and yelled at her when the bank wouldn’t cash their paychecks. She turned her attention back to the numbers.

Another development during the past weeks was that vendors started requiring deliveries to be paid in cash no longer accepting The Pub’s checks. That complicated things.

“I need those bank statements,” she’d reminded Bob again two days ago. He blew her off so she pushed harder.

“What if Ervin shows up? The last time he was here the bank statements were the first thing he demanded to see.” Bringing up the CPA from hell turned Bob’s face a frightening dark red.

“If he shows up tell him to ask me,” he shouted, spit flying. “Like I said, I balanced them myself while you were wasting time on some other worthless crap.”

That’s a new one, even for the master of insults, she thought.

“You don’t need them to do your job,” he yelled, storming out of the room. Through the closed door, he shouted, “I need that staff schedule I told you to get done. Work on something useful for a change.” Joe’s mouth fell open. That was the last time she’d seen him the rest of the day.

She wondered if his affair with Doreen had anything to do with his foul mood or the state of the books. Bob no longer followed his standard routine since he started dating the pretty waitress. He was often seen hanging around her workstation talking in hushed tones before meal services hanging on her every word. The staff pretended not to notice, but of course, everyone knew about their affair.

Bob had begun to neglect his duties since dating the pretty waitress, always hanging around the station while she folded napkins whispering and flirting. Flings among the staff were as common as hangovers and usually as quickly forgotten. This one was different. Bob fell hard for Doreen and she took full advantage of it. The staff grumbled that she got the choice shifts and better tables than the other waiters and waitresses, although, no one dared mention it to Bob. That subject was strictly off limits.

Joe reran the numbers and came up with same ending balance again. Two hours flew by as she poured over the register totals looking for errors. The clatter of pans and dishes signaled the arrival of the kitchen workers. Her eyes had grown bleary by the time the door squeaked open. Dick stood in the doorway wearing a grim expression which could only mean something was wrong. He never came in this early.

“Bob’s gone,” he said frowning. His eyes took in the tangle of adding machine tapes that snaked across the desk. Joe removed the chewed stub of a pencil from her mouth. It left a black smear across her lips.

“What do you mean gone?”

“He’s disappeared.”

Cover design by Mckbirdbks, Mockingbird Books and Publishing
Cover design by Mckbirdbks, Mockingbird Books and Publishing

For a review of this novel, see Mckbirdbks' article right here on HubPages. The Pub, A Murder Mystery is available on Amazon in paperback and eBook.

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Awesome start to this series Peg. It sounds as though it is going to have a bit of everything. Can't wait to read the next part.

      You have my votes

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Rosemay. It's only a rough beginning that I hope to refine a little more as the story goes along. Glad to get it out there so I'll be more inclined work on it. Thank you for the votes and for stopping by.

      Cheers!

      Peg

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      James W. Nelson 4 years ago from eastern North Dakota

      Interesting story, Peg, and that office sounds like it took a bit of courage even to enter. Looking forward to your next installment.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Thanks SubRon. It's a work in progress and I'm already editing in the morning's light. Added a couple more photos and as I run across new ones will add more. So nice to see you today and I hope all is going well on your home improvement project and the book sales.

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      drbj and sherry 4 years ago from south Florida

      Well, I am already hooked, Peg, and looking forward to the next installment. Hope you and the Pub survive.

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      Linda Rogers 4 years ago from Minnesota

      Can't wait for more chapters on this series Peg. Great beginning that has me excited for more. I hit many buttons.

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      You have painted a nice picture here. You have a unique style that will lead your readers along with you.

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      snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

      Wow Peg, the heroine is stuck in a windowless garret counting piles of cash! Thank goodness she gets a free lunch. Setting is vivid, great detail. How does the main character just up and disappear? Where is Bob? What is going on with these people all being let go from their jobs? Why are new employees so eager to join up? Why did the narrator leave her good job at the bank for this? I want answers!!! Now I have to wait for Chapter two. This must be a novel. Peg, you've been holding out on us, awesome! Regards, snakeslane

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello there Drbj. Thanks for the visit. I really appreciate the encouragement on this one. It's been in the making for a very long time with multiple versions over the years. I'm hoping that seeing it in the light will keep me motivated, chapter 2 to be released once I stop "fixing" this one.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Sweet Minne Twin, Thank you for reading this first plunge into the story. As it evolves I hope it will be entertaining. I like button pushers. :)

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Mr. Mckbirdbks, so nice to see the real you (speaking of pictures). I was right about the self portrait but was mistaken about where I saw the illustration. It was on Snakeslane's hub, the garden lawnmower guy that you drew. Ah ha! Good one. And I like the suit pic too.

      Thanks for the encouragement on this new venture. I'll have to pep it up with some songs and poetry as the story evolves. First I must decide on the era. These pics are just place holders for the moment. Decisions...

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Snakeslane, I should be paying you to write summaries for all my hubs. You nailed every detail and made me take a look at a couple of things as well. Watch out for rewrites. Things change on my hubs. I noticed you do that too! I love finding a good picture of something and adding to old hubs. Anyhow, thanks for the really great summation of the story and I hope over the next few chapters to answer a few of your questions. "Only the shadow knows..." heeheehoooohhaaa. See you for coffee?

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      snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

      Hi Peg, it's left over from creative writing workshops I participated in. No stone was left unturned, the crtiques were tough, and then it was back to rewriting, I don't think anyone is ever satisfied (the writer especially), But at some point you just have to go with what you've got. I love the editing after publishing mode here on Hub Pages, it is really handy. A good way to work on the rough drafts, as long as readers are ok with it. If they're not they will probably let you know. I was hoping you would be ok with this kind of feedback. Thanks for letting me know it's ok. :) Coffee sure!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      I like the well paced wording and the crisp clearity now I have to follow because it is a good start..but please if I miss an entry nudge me.... so I don't lose my place okay? Great share

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      Randy Godwin 4 years ago from Southern Georgia

      A good beginning to an interesting plot this seems to be heading for, Peg. Will be looking for the next episode. Well written with great descriptions so far!

      Randy SSSSS

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Frank my detective style friend, I'm glad you took a look at this one. There are some dastardly deeds on the horizon and I hope I can do it the justice it deserves. I shall have to read more of your crime scene prose when the chapter arrives to pump myself up. Thanks again for your kindness. Peg

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Randy, It is such a pleasure to see you here. I am an amateur compared to your style and expertise and truly do appreciate your remarks. Thanks so much. Really.

      Peg

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      Randy Godwin 4 years ago from Southern Georgia

      Ha Peg, I'm merely a beginner at writing fiction but I do indeed enjoy it compared to the info type hubs I usually write here. As long as writing creatively is enjoyable for us, it is worth pursuing. Good luck and thanks for your kind encouragement! :)

      SSSSS

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Thank you Randy. I love it too. And you should keep on going. You are definitely a great writer.

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      Girish puri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      Peg, a very interesting story and i do indeed enjoy it, voted interesting

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      Interesting beginning. I'll look forward to the next instalment.

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      Cogerson 4 years ago from Virginia

      You have done a fantastic job of painting a wonderful picture at the Pub. A great start and I look forward to future installments. In one paragraph you have me interested in Jason....and if he is someone capable of fixing a problem or making the problem worse...voted up and interesting.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Girishpuri and thanks for stopping in to read and vote. Much appreciated and hope you will return for Chapter 2.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Thank you BlossomSB. I see that 'a' accolade on your avatar and will be checking you out as well. Nice to meet you.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Cogerson. What a keen eye you have for detail. You have hit on a key to the story that will be revealed as things unfold. Thanks so much for the kind encouragement on this work in progress and for the votes! Cheers. Peg

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow Peg, Interesting story. It has it all, a pub, booze, a bank, a good looking Dude, food. Ha, What more could we ask for? Looking forward to the next chapter..

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      Maria Jordan 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Sista, I am SERIOUSLY SPELLBOUND...! You immediately caught my attention, the pace is perfect and "dastardly" sounds divine... Oh those blue eyes are treacherous when you least expect...

      I am eager to follow this one. I know it's only SIMMERING...

      Voted UP and UABI. Love, Maria

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello my friend Always,

      Indeed, what more could we ask for? Thanks for your visit and for your encouragement on this story. I will try to get the next chapter ready quickly. I do appreciate you so much.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Maria my sista,

      I will try to keep the dastardly doings to a maximum as the story moves forward in hopes to keep you "spellbound". What a nice thing to say! Old blue eyes is one bad actor that's for sure. Please stay tuned as the heat goes up in the kitchen. (I couldn't resist...)

      Thanks for the visit and votes.

      Love

      Peg

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      Maria Jordan 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      I am boiling over with excitement... Sista, bring it on!

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      snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

      Peg I like the changes, you did rewrite didn't you? Or do I need new glasses? This is good! I keep hearing overtones of sinister undertones. Wicked! Cannot wait for next installment!

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Maria dahling, Thank you so much sista. You are such a gem.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Ms. Lane! Thanks for rereading this and yes I did rewrite (again). I am my own worst enemy on the editing part. Sinister? Hopefully... And yes I truly do appreciate your candid remarks and helpful encouragement. It is quite welcome. You are great!

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello Peg. Having taken the hint that a re-read was in order, I find the story even more compelling. I personally would name the protaganist. This has a ring of truth to it, which is very important for the success of a story.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Naming the protagonist is a good idea, Mck. I guess people want to know who is spilling the beans or at least have a name for all the characters. Some say to write in 3rd person though some of the modern writers tell it from the first person.

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      A reader wants to identify with the narrator, so a naming them helps with that. It could be as simple introduction like Bob calling her by name at the teller.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Excellent suggestion and I will implement that one, Mck. Great idea. I was trying to squeeze it into Chapter 2 which is in the slow cooker now simmering. I'll be by the cafe later to visit and have dessert. Thanks so much for the help!

      Peg

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      snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

      Hi Peg, evesdropping on conversation here, telling it in first person is great. Narrator could easily introduce herself by telling a little of her background (which would be good) if she is to be a big part of the story we would like to know more about her and her special investigative mind set. Maybe she grew up reading Trixie Beldon or Nancy drew? Maybe her name is Nancy lolol.

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Back for a second read and enjoyed it even more the second time around. The new and improved version, awesome. I can see that this is going to take us on a rollercoaster of a trip.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hey there S. Lane, I like your ideas about Nancy (for the time being she's now Joe) and I will add some of her background in the next chapter or two. Loved bothTrixie Beldon and Ms. Drew and I can only hope to incorporate a degree of that mystery and intrigue we found in those books. V, thank you so much for the ongoing support on this one.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Rosemay, I hope the volcanic ash has stopped falling on your area. I've been worried about you. Thanks for coming back for another read of this and for your thoughtful and uplifting remarks. Funny. Jim is wearing one of his favorite Tshirts with Star Wars Stormtroopers on a roller coaster ride, arms up in the air. Wheeeeeeeee!

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello Peg. I see people are lining up for your story and to ride the roller coaster with the Star Wars stormtroppers.

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      Mr Love Doctor 4 years ago from Puerto Rico

      Hey! Just got back from spending a week with family in Sebastian. We had dinner down at Squid Lips, a place for all the world like the Pub in your story. And I could swear, those pelicans look just like the one on the old fish-house piers sticking out here and there from the Indian River. (It's actually a freshwater bay, but the Spanish weren't so bright.) You don't happen to be anywhere near Sebastian, would you?

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hi Mck. Thanks for all the help with talking it up at the cafe. I've been working on the second part hoping for some inspiration, putting some beach pictures in and editing etc.. Even Star Wars stormtroopers like roller coasters. I'm grateful for the positive response so far.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Squid Lips! What a great name for a place. Maybe they were the same pelicans. This pic was from the other side of the Florida around Clearwater. Thanks for the drop in Mr. Love. That area around the Indian River and Sebastian is beautiful.

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      Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      I am hooked on this story now. I hope you are not going to edit it to death. It is wonderful now. I will be heading to part 2 now.

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      IntegrityYes 4 years ago

      I definitely voted up.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Becky, Thanks for the advice. I am truly guilty of backtracking too much. Will try to move in a forward direction. I really do appreciate your input and your readership. Thank you so much for the encouragement and compliment. That means a great deal to me.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Integrity. Thank you for the visit and for the encouraging vote! Nice to see you today.

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      50 Caliber 4 years ago from Arizona

      Ms. Peg, a most inviting beginning that I had to drop back to catch after having my notifications on vacation and relying on the RSS Feed that has been lost on the new page format for some reason. (I've not changed and hope we are allowed to keep the old as I don't care much for the layout, I'm one of many though so before it is done I may be forced, but that's OK after all it is a free site that is in business and I understand changes to draw more in)

      Back to you and this writing, I love good fiction and the wait of a sharp hanging end to one chapter to the next and you did a fine job. Ms.Snake did a good job with her reply and I must mail her and Mike as well to get their opinion of a re-write to a piece I started but didn't seem to catch the fire to drive me onward with it, Maybe too long and needs broken up, or maybe it just plane sucked! LOL

      I get to go straight to part two now as it was in my mail.

      May the Blessings Be,

      dust

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      Donna Brown 4 years ago from Alton, Missouri

      I'm enjoying the story, I can't wait to see chapter 2! (which I am going to read now!)

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      Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      Perfect prelude to a mesmerizing story line, Peg. I love your original photographs, as they add so much visual interest to your story. I found the top photo so interesting I couldn't help but wonder who the attractive people in it are. Of course, I put Joe's name to the beautiful blonde. You write like a dream and I feel like I'm in the little joint watching the story unfold like a film. I'm looking forward to reading what's to come. Thank you

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Dusty my friend, I do thank you for your gracious visit and kind compliments on this story. You are such a master story spinner that I am not in the same league. I certainly hope that you will pursue the review of our esteemed collegues, Mckbirdbks and Snakeslane for the help they will give on your work. Thanks so much for the visit and I hope things straighten out on the RSS feed and such. I just keep on plodding through it best I can. I loved your comment.

      Peg

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Cygnet, What a pleasure it is to see you here. How is the book writing going? Hope all is well with you. Thanks for the encouragement on this. It almost feels like your NaMoWriMo challenge to crank out this volume of words. It has been like a flood after several decades of drought.

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      Donna Brown 4 years ago from Alton, Missouri

      Hi Peg, I am still working with my editor friend--Megan. She's finishing the chapter by chapter, and I'm assessing her changes. I should be done in a couple of weeks, then she goes over a final edit. I've got a cover designed, so it's just all about the editing process. I look forward to sharing the finished product with you.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Amy. So sorry for the delay in responding. My internet blew a tire and I was off line for most of the day yesterday. I must tell you how much your comment means to me and what a fantastic lift to my day it was to read your words. The lady in the picture is my Aunt Inez who was much like this character, Joe. She was ahead of her time and quite a pistol. I spent a couple of summers with her in my teens.

      You are the reigning Queen of words and get to wear the tiera all day and sit in the owner's booth with Dick watching the drama! Later a placque will be hung in your honor on the wall with the stuffed marlin. lol. Thanks, Amy.

      Peg

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      That sounds great, Cygnet. Good to hear you have a professional editor! Cover design? Wow. Terrific. Way to go!

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      Okay, you have an audience hooked on your writing and your story. Just enough information to have us wondering, and enough detail to make us want more. Well written and intriguing. As soon as I get time I'm reading chapter two!

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Mary, Congrats on winning "best avatar" award. You deserve it! That is a good one. Thanks for the follow. Your new profile design displayed a few hubs of yours that are calling to me as well. I appreciate your visit and the kind words. Thank you so much and hope you will have time to follow along!

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      vespawoolf 4 years ago from Peru, South America

      I'm left wondering what havoc Jason will wreak on the characters in the little pub! This is very descriptive and I can imagine both the characters and the scene you've set. Voted up!

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Vespawoolf. Thanks for the visit today and for reading chapter one of this story under development. I do appreciate your comments and your time. All the best to you.

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      Sheila Brown 4 years ago from Southern Oklahoma

      Well, you have me hooked! Great job with "Chapter 1". I will be back to read more right away! Voting up and more! :)

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello SG. Thanks! So glad to see you here. I'm still working on publishing Chapter 8 so it is a slow go from my end. Hope you'll stick around! :)

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Intriguing beginning to this story, and I am ready to get caught up with the 11 chapters to go! Watch out, Jason has arrived from Jamaica. It's going to be good. Love your photos.

      Excellent write here.

      In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hello Faith and welcome to The Pub series. Thank you for stopping in here and I hope you will find the next chapters as "intriguing". I very much appreciate your thoughtful comments and kind words.

      Peg

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      Sheila Brown 4 years ago from Southern Oklahoma

      I started reading this series a while back and then got distracted. I am back and going to get caught up. Thank you for the link! On to chapter 2! Up and more, again. :)

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hi Sgbrown. Thanks for returning to pick this series up again. It gives me a reason to review and make improvements when I read it over after new comments arrive. I saw your hub on "The New Pub" this morning and it was so perfect to add here. Maybe I'll have to make a trip to OK and get some pics for The Pub. Smiling at your comment and thanks again.

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      Martie Coetser 3 years ago from South Africa

      Peggy, I have postponing reading your novel because I prefer reading novels when all chapters are published, but curiosity got me this time. I like your background and characters, writing style and the way you hook your readers.

      Absolutely excellent. I'll be back soon to read on.....

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      Peg Cole 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hi MartieCoetser. Thank you for starting into this novel in progress. I understand your reluctance to read an unfinished work. Somehow it keeps me moving forward to complete this as I publish my ongoing chapters. I hope you will come back when it gets nearer to a finished work. Thank you for the wonderful comment and for the kind visit.

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      Linda Crampton 3 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      This looks like it's going to be a very interesting series, Peg. I have so much reading to catch up on! I'm looking forward to reading all the other chapters in your novel.

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      Peg Cole 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Hi AliciaC. Thank you for coming by. Welcome and I hope you will have the time available to read the rest of the story.

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      epigramman 3 years ago

      Well my precious Peg I really must start reading your Pub 'book' series - the titles intrigue me and you are what I often call Mike , a writer's writer with an evocative narrative style which immediately transports me to a time and a place with finely etched characters.

      I will madly and gladly share this on my FB wall for all to see and read and I am sincerely sending to you my warmest wishes and good energy from Colin and his cats Little Miss Tiffy and Mister Gabriel at lake erie time ontario canada 2:09pm on a beautiful summer's day with a lovely southwest breeze off the water.

      And thank you so much for your support of my 2 books - and coming from someone special like you really means a lot to me.

      And I couldn't have done it without Mike and Vicki

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      Peg Cole 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Darling Epigramman. Oh what a thrill to find you opening Chapter 1 of this novella that I finally concluded. And for you to share it on FB for all to see is more than generous. I've been over on Amazon just this moment trying to decide on the download for PC Kindle or if I should just bite the bullet and buy one. I am such a techno phobe. But if I ever get there my first purchase will be your new e-book, Funny Thirty. You are so special and I'm thrilled for you to get published. Congratulations on your 1st, 2nd and many many more books.

      So long to you for the moment and I hope to see you for coffee after the next few chapters of The Pub.

      Love

      Peg, Tony, Cookie and Brian Williams (my feral cat who used to be known as Ms. Kitty)

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      Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago

      Peg, this is so interesting, is there a follow up, will we find out what happened to Bob?

      I love Eagles video.

      Voted up,UABI and shared.

      Shyron

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      Peg Cole 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Shyron, So nice of you to find this one and leave such a fine comment. Yes, there are several more chapters still published. I have unpublished the others for rewrites, but the story is now completed with 20 something chapters. Waiting for motivation to publish as an eBook.

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      mckbirdbks 2 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Motivation - I saved up my allowance to buy a copy.

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      Peg Cole 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Mike, you are such an inspiration. I will try to finish my edits soon. I keep finding stuff that I want to change. Guess I'll never finish at this rate.

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      mckbirdbks 2 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello Peg - Get the story the way you want it. You are getting to be a pro at this writing trade and are honing your craft.

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      Maria Jordan 7 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

      "I am eager to follow this one. I know it's only SIMMERING..."

      From four years ago, dear Peg. And your meticulous efforts are most obvious in your 'finished' product... :) I love "The Pub"!

      So wonderful to see your supportive comments from friends of our past...drbj, Dusty, Rosemay and epi, to name a few...

      Now you can't go wrong with a QUEEN backdrop - thanks for my morning jam! Love you, mar

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      Peg Cole 7 months ago from Dallas, Texas

      Thank you, Mar, for all your supportive efforts in the production and release of the book. I will ever be grateful for your wonderful foreword and positive comments. Love You friend. I'm glad you stopped in again today! I'm about 1700 words into a sequel! Aftermath - The Pub Crew. I hope the mood strikes to keep going and that it doesn't take four more years. LOL

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