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The Shoes - A Will Starr Flash Fiction Response

Updated on March 20, 2016

The Shoes



Spring and balmy weather were a splendid combination for a street sale, so they brought out all the shoes and boots which were neatly tied together of course so there would be no confusion. It was their way to be tidy and organized.

The price was the same for any pair, and they stretched down the street and out of sight, because there were so many. The greedy buyers happily brought their new treasures to the sales stand where they paid a pittance.

Across the street and behind the electrified fences, the crematoriums quietly dispensed with the former owners.

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      WillStarr 3 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      I was wondering about 'detention'. A literary term with which I am not familiar?

      LOL!

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      GalaxyRat 3 months ago from The Crazy Rat Lady's House

      Thanks, Will. Sorry, I did not mean 'detention', I meant 'definition'. Sorry!

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      WillStarr 3 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Flash fiction is very brief, typically just a few hundred words. This one is exactly 100 words,

      You can write flash fiction on most any topic.

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      GalaxyRat 3 months ago from The Crazy Rat Lady's House

      WillStarr,

      Wow, wow, wow, loved it. Can you explain Flash Fiction to me? I am fairly new to this type of writing, and in need of information. I know you put a detention up above, but, does it need to comply with a certain topic?

      As always, good work, friend.

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      WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Peg!

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      Peg Cole 8 months ago from Dallas, Texas

      As usual, you've addressed an interesting subject with tact and style. The last line was, of course, a surprise and a real moment of introspection. I hope you will collect your stories and publish them in a paperback soon. I know just the person who can assist you in the process and in preparing a cover, if you haven't done so already. (Smiles)

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      WillStarr 15 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you Faith Reaper! HubPages said it was too short!

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      WillStarr 15 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Nell Rose! I tried to keep it at 100 words or less and still tell the story.

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      Faith Reaper 15 months ago from southern USA

      Wow, Will, a micro-flash fiction and so well done!

      This is impressive.

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      Nell Rose 16 months ago from England

      Well don Will, done in less than, well however many words. and so powerful too, and sadly true.

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      WillStarr 16 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you Stella!

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      stella vadakin 16 months ago from 3460NW 50 St Bell, Fl32619

      Very interesting work.

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      WillStarr 17 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Shauna!

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      Shauna L Bowling 17 months ago from Central Florida

      Wow, Will! Now that's what I call Flash Fiction! Your punchline slapped upside the head.

      Way to go, Will!

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      John Hansen 17 months ago from Queensland Australia

      creativeexiles.com

      We are just waiting for your email address on the Facebook group so you can be given access. Alternatively go to the site via the link and fill out the "join us" form.

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      WillStarr 17 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      What's the link, please? I can't find it.

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      John Hansen 17 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Yes, generally 300 to 1000,(but it can be slightly less or more). Yes, come join us.

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      Jackie Lynnley 17 months ago from The Beautiful South

      John has the site up Will and a few of us have published a couple things. Better come join us! Just google creative exiles. See you there!

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Becky, John, and Ruby Jean

      This is the definition of flash fiction:

      flash fic·tion

      noun

      fiction that is extremely brief, typically only a few hundred words or fewer in its entirety.

      I tried to comply with that definition.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 18 months ago from Southern Illinois

      I agree Jodah. Will's piece told the story so well in a few words, after all, that's the whole idea with flash fiction.

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      John Hansen 18 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Fortunately my version must have enough words to satisfy management, Will. It is featured. It is a pity they have trouble appreciating good creative writing and that size doesn't always constitute a good hub.

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      Becky Katz 18 months ago from Hereford, AZ

      I am a fan of flash fiction, and management is not too aware of what is really desired.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      It's flash fiction, Becky.

      However, management agrees with you because this is the first Hub I ever published that they did not feature because it is 'not up to their high standards'.

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      Becky Katz 18 months ago from Hereford, AZ

      This was unexpected, and really gruesome. It was fantastic though. It is the shortest story I have ever seen from you.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Meg.

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      DreamerMeg 18 months ago from Northern Ireland

      Very powerful piece of writing, telling a story in so few words.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Most people are unaware that Middle Eastern Islamic leaders enthusiastically supported Hitler and the Nazi Party, Ruby Jean. The Jews have always was been persecuted and that is a fulfillment of prophesy.

      The European/US antisemitism in the the last century was the reason Hitler chose the Jews to portray as the enemy of Germans and the cause of the Depression. After the war was over and people learned of the holocaust, the antisemitic behavior plummeted in shame, but now it's back again in full force. Our own president has demonstrated an obvious dislike of Israel (he sat in the pews of Jeremiah Wright's church for twenty years, listening to him demonize Jews!) and it is once again a political force in both Europe and the US.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 18 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Oh my Lord! When is the hate going to stop? Why do people hate the Jewish people? I have read a lot about Hitler and his hate, but it still goes on today.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      It is vital that we remember, Patti, but millions now deny that it ever happened as Iran and other Muslim states prepare to annihilate the Jews in Israel.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      You are correct, Ruby Jean. It is also chilling that many of our young people either do not know this happened or deny that it happened.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Eric.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Shyron.

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      breakfastpop 18 months ago

      It is important to remember. Thank you......

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 18 months ago from Southern Illinois

      When I first read this I didn't get it, now I see the piece is about the extermination of the Jews. So powerful! Am I correct?

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      Eric Dierker 18 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Plenty to think about in so few words. Scary.

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      Shyron E Shenko 18 months ago from Texas

      Will,

      Wow, walking without shoes

      Shoes now on sale although they are used

      No longer needed

      By those abused

      Traded for halos and wings all new

      *

      Will, this is gruesomely great.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Ronnie!

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      Ronnie Sowell 18 months ago from South Carolina

      Mighty fine!

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Mandy.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      And it's a true story at that, Mike. They actually did sell shoes and other articles they stole from their victims.

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      Mandy Avery 18 months ago

      amazing as always

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      Old Poolman 18 months ago

      Short but delivers a very powerful message. This is proof you don't need to use 500 words to paint a picture that readers can see.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      It's the shortest story I've ever written Mike!

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      Old Poolman 18 months ago

      Interesting and unusual WillStarr. As always my mental pictures came to life when reading your work.

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      WillStarr 18 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, John!

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      John Hansen 18 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow, Will you nailed it in less than a 100 words. Grim, but well done.