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The Unnamed Star - a Short Poem

Updated on June 28, 2017
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Flash Fiction/Poetry Challenge

Recently a fellow hubber, GalaxyRat, issued a challenge to write a piece of flash fiction or poetry. Check out: Flash Fiction Challenge by Galaxy Rat. The rules were quite straight forward and basically, anything was allowed except profanity or sexual reference, and it had to be under 200 words.

I don't need much prompting to write a poem so I agreed to take up the challenge. This poem is my response and is somewhat inspired by her name "GalaxyRat."

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The Unnamed Star

In a galaxy light years away

Exists an unnamed star.

To us on Earth, it has no worth,

We worship our own Sun.


But within its little galaxy

The unnamed star's the star,

As important as is the Sun

In this Milky Way of ours.

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Circling this most distant star,

Unnamed planets are in orbit.

Some may even harbour life

Due to its light and warmth.


Just a tiny speck of light

Amidst the vast night sky,

Though every star should have a name.

Please tell me what to call it.

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Even when it's dead and gone,

A big black hole in space,

Its sparkling light will still shine on.

Light years to reach our eyes.


But perhaps, our star, we call the Sun

May be the first to die,

All life on Earth become extinct,

Just a twinkle in the sky.

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      Audrey Hunt 4 weeks ago from Nashville Tn.

      A great title for a breathtaking poem John. Glad you included the Galaxy Tapestry wall hanging. I'm ordering this. Stunning photos for your creative master piece!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow! Thank you, Audrey. I appreciate your kind words and also that you are ordering the tapestry. I have been here eight years and that will be my third Amazon sale in all that time. Bless you.

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      Tim Mitchell 4 weeks ago from Escondido, CA

      An eye opening poem John. I have many thoughts and emotions awakened about names, people, and life. Particularily the process parents must go through to name a child, a star. Then I thought about the process a writer goes through to name their work, a star.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Tim. They were similar thoughts that went through my head when I was writing this. It started off called "The Unknown Star" but I settled on "The Unnamed Star" instead.

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      Harish Mamgain 4 weeks ago from India

      A great response to a friendly challenge ! John, you wove a fantastic poem, taking us to the journey of another galaxy and showing that cute unnamed star.

      The last line of the poem is breathtaking ! Just a twinkle in the sky ! I think , you should name that star as " Twinkle ". I enjoyed this beautiful poem.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Harish. I am glad you liked the last line of the verse too. Isn't it funny that sometimes what we consider a simple and quickly written poem often resonates more with the readers? I guess writing "off-the-cuff" without a lot of thought and contemplation comes over more natural and pure. Thanks for the suggestion of "Twinkle."

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      rdsparrowriter 4 weeks ago

      Interesting poem with amazing pictures :) God bless you!!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you rdsparrow

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      Venkatachari M 4 weeks ago from Hyderabad, India

      Very interesting and entertaining poem on awesome marvels of the universe. The images are also very great. Enjoyed a lot.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Hello Venkat. Glad you enjoyed this, thanks for reading.

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      Mark Tulin 4 weeks ago from Santa Barbara, California

      Nice poem on an interesting subject. Don't know much about stars but I know there's a lot of them. It's cool to commemorate this one. Thanks

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Mark, thank you for the comment. Yes, all stars are special.

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      Eric Dierker 4 weeks ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      I would have to surmise that laying flat on the grass and taking in the stars is about the best thing to do. It comes with wishing on them and seeing ones that really aren't there.

      But as you have shown here a poem about them might even be better.

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      ThreeKeys 4 weeks ago from Australia

      Love this song! Love Coldplay!

      The poem's imagery was delightful.

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      Bill Holland 4 weeks ago from Olympia, WA

      I shall call it Beacon from this day forward. :)

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Eric, who can't admire the stars in one way or another. Observing them, wishing on them, or writing poems and songs about them..all good.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Yes, ThreeKeys, Cold Play are great. I appreciate your comment regarding the poem too. Cheers.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey, Bill. I love that name "Beacon" thanks for reading and coming upswing the name.

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      Clive Williams 4 weeks ago from Nibiru

      good one....poem about space

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      Linda Lum 4 weeks ago from Washington State, USA

      John, I wonder of somewhere, near that unnamed little star, is someone writing a similar poem, about another 'unnamed star'...the one we call the Sun?

      Very creative verse, and I loved the pictures.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Yes it is Clive. Thanks.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Well, that is food for thought, Linda. The paralel universe theory.. Anything is possible.

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      Tamara Yancosky 4 weeks ago from No Idea Where

      Delightful, and wondrous photos to go along!

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      mckbirdbks 4 weeks ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hi John - There must be some kid of cosmic karma going on. GalaxyRat's challenge inspired a work of art.

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      Ryan Fuller 4 weeks ago from Louisiana, USA

      What a great poem and I love the subject of astronomy. This poem different gets the thinking gears in motion. We are such a tiny speck in a infinite universe. So much out there to yet explore. I wish we had the technology to deep space travel. Great good on this. I really liked how it makes you think.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Tamara. Much appreciated"

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Mike. You are always so generous with your comments. There may be some cosmic karma, and it reminds me there was a recent carriage driver I still have to read.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Fullerman, thanks for reading. I am so glad this is more than just a short poem, and that it gets the thinkingg Ear in motion. Cheers.

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      manatita44 4 weeks ago from london

      Noble effort. Appreciated, Jodah.

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 4 weeks ago from The Caribbean

      Your poem and pictures take us into that other world. GalaxyRat must be very pleased. Great job, as usual!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      thank you, manatita. Appreciated.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      I was hoping for that MsDora. Thank you. She hasn't seen it yet, but I hope she is pleased.

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      Davorunner 4 weeks ago from Australia

      Great one John. It's quite ethereal and interesting!

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      FlourishAnyway 4 weeks ago from USA

      I don't get how scientists can name stars something like B2467 (I made that up, but you get the point). I mean, it's a freaking star! I'd name it something exciting or perhaps name it after my child but not after some letter and number combination. Maybe there's a rhyme and reason to it. Anyway I enjoyed the poem.

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      Ram Di Mitr 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Love the Poem and the selection of the pics are amazing. I particularly like this line very much "Even when it's dead and gone,

      A big black hole in space,

      Its sparkling light will still shine on.

      Light years to reach our eyes."

      What an eye opener... I aspire to be that star that shines on light years to come

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      Randi Benlulu 4 weeks ago from Mesa, AZ

      One of my favorite topics and so nicely put. Love the addition of Coldplay. Another favorite. Thank you for this brief twinkle

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Davo. Yes, I guess "ethereal" is a good word to describe it.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      I totally agree, Flourish. Why give stars and planets boring names made up of numbers and letters like an Internet password? What happened to names like Andromeda for instance? Glad you enjoyed the poem.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for the kind words, Princess Khalsa. I hope your light does shine on.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Randi. Looks like I covered a few bases as far as you were concerned.

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      Pooja Rani 4 weeks ago from India

      A simple yet elegant title for an unusual writing. Very creative!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Pooja. Good to see a new name reading my writing. Your kind comment is much appreciated.

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      Glenis Rix 4 weeks ago from UK

      A lovely gentle reminder of our relative insignificance seen from a cosmis perspective. Puts things into perspective.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Glenis. That was my intention for this poem.. to highlight our insignificance in the universe.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 weeks ago from Riga, Latvia

      A most amazing poem taking me on a poetic journey through the constellations.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      That is a big compliment coming from you, Rasma. Thanks so much.

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      GalaxyRat 4 weeks ago from The Crazy Rat Lady's House

      I loved it John. I wonder why I didn't see it sooner? This is a great response!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      So glad you liked this, Galaxy. I don't know why you missed it earlier, maybe the notification went astray. That happens sometimes. I couldn't wait until you published your amended challenge, sorry. Hope you get lots of responses. You should now you opened it to flash fiction as well.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Audrey, thank you so much for purchasing the galaxy wall tapestry. That really boosted my earnings this month. Much appreciated.

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      Larry Rankin 4 weeks ago from Oklahoma

      Great response!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Larry.

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      Shaloo Walia 4 weeks ago

      Beautifully penned!

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Shaloo.

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      Tamara Yancosky 4 weeks ago from No Idea Where

      I wanted to reiterate that I Really Like This Poem! And, the images are so fitting. Yes, I know it's my second comment, but that's because I wanted to reiterate how much I like this poem. I understand that I am rather Topsy-Turvy in the weird things I do, but... ya.

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Tamara, you are welcome to visit this poem as many times as you want. I love your "topsy-turviness" and the fact that you enjoyed this poem enough to read it more than once.

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      Devika Primić 3 weeks ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Your idea of this poem is great and so special!

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      John Hansen 3 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      I really appreciate you stopping by to read this, Devika. Thank you.

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      John Hansen 3 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you again, Devika.

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      Genna East 3 weeks ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Hi John…

      Your poem captures the beautiful yet uncertain unknowns of the universe; and how they could diminish or transform in the blink of an eye. Nicely done.

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      John Hansen 3 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Genna, I always look forward to your visits to my hubs. Yes, the Universe is full of unknowns and our earth is but one tiny speck.

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      Paula 3 weeks ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Jodah.....Always wonderful, always inspiring, your poetry is some of the very best written. I don't enjoy all poetry but I truly do, yours. Wishing you luck with the challenge....I'm cheering for you.

      Peace, Paula

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      Shannon 3 weeks ago from Texas

      Oh, what imagery. I always enjoy reading your work. This one could have ended after the second stanza and I would have liked it and felt it complete simply because I found those stanzas intriguing. But I did scroll on and read the rest and it is thought-provoking.

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      John Hansen 3 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Shanmarie. I really appreciate that comment. I am glad you found it thought provoking.

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      John Hansen 3 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Hello Paula. I am glad that you enjoy my poetry.mone of my aims is to try and write poetry that will appeal to everyone, even those who say they don't like or understand poetry. Thanks for cheering for me.

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      Kamalesh050 3 weeks ago from Sahaganj, Dist. Hooghly, West Bengal, India

      Simply Wonderful!

      Best Wishes, Kamalesh

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      John Hansen 3 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for those kind words Kamalesh. Glad you enjoyed this poem.

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      Eiddwen 2 weeks ago from Wales

      a truly wonderful poem John. Thoroughly enjoyed and thank you so much for sharing.

      Eddy.

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      John Hansen 2 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      My pleasure, Eddy. Thank you for reading and enjoying.

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      Missy Smith 2 weeks ago from Florida

      Love the poem, pictures, and the Coldplay song. To me that little unnamed star is a representation of all who aspire to reach their dreams, but so far have gone unnoticed. Auras in life; mystics, creatives, and spiritualists who float around this earth. I like the name AURA! It's just a thought. :)

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      John Hansen 2 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Missy. I am glad you enjoyed this. You could be right about what the little unnamed star represents too :)

      Aura is a great name for a star as well. I thought the Coldplay song would appeal to you.

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      Lawrence Hebb 10 days ago from Hamilton, New Zealand

      John

      A wonderful little poem, full of beauty, yet so true.

      I read yesterday that some astronomers think the reason we haven't found Alien life might be that civilizations die out before they can reach into the stars.

      Enjoyed the poem.

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      John Hansen 10 days ago from Queensland Australia

      Yes, Lawrence. I have heard that theory too. It could be the case. I am glad you enjoyed this little poem. Thanks mate.

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