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The Wagon Train Diaries...5

Updated on September 7, 2013

The Renegade Indian

The Wagon Train Diaries... 5

The Renegade Indian...

 

Audrey Brooks had to get something off her chest. She wanted the Wagon Master to understand her brother and why she didn’t blame the hangman for killing him.

"My brother is what the doctors back East called damaged."

Alastar Brown looked confused.

"Oh sure, doctors could heal broken legs, pull out bullets, tend to the sick," she continued as she looked away toward the wagons. "But they cannot heal a mind. My brother killed people back East. He was what one doctor called a serial killer."

"Serial killer?"

She nodded somberly. "My sister in law thought if we took the trip West, maybe the change of place could have helped him."

"So now children died because of her stupidity, and the people traveling this train would have been put in harm’s way."

"She wanted to tell you..."

"Alastar!" White Deer called as he raced towards them.

"What is it White Deer?"

He pointed to a renegade Indian approaching on a white horse. The Indian had a message for the Wagon Master.

"I’m wondering why they haven’t attacked, we are only hours away from Dead Crow’s Valley?" whispered the Wagon Master.

"Greetings," said the renegade.

The Wagon Master waved his hand dismissively. "I know your plans," he breathed in an almost conspiratorial way. "And let me tell you that my wagon train will put up a fight. A good fight!"

The renegade Indian smiled a thin, grudging smile. "I am called Water Streams."

"I’m the Wagon Master here," said Alastar Brown.

"Chief Red Scar would like to talk to you," he continued.

"Talk? Why doesn’t he just attack?"

"Meet the chief under the three dead trees a mile from your camp," said the renegade as he turned the white horse and slowly kicked away.

Alastar Brown frowned, somewhat disappointed. What would be the purpose of a charade that merely postponed the inevitable. Unless the key was in the postponing. Does the chief of those renegade Indians have something up his sleeve, or could he not afford another battle?

"That red hooligan is up to no good," whispered the Wagon Master while rubbing his chin with his thumb and index finger. "What’s running through that drip’s mind?"

White Deer’s mouth twisted. He didn’t understand the reference. But he understood from the Wagon Master’s tone that it was meant as an insult.

"What do we do?" asked White Deer.

"We meet him," Alastar replied. "Well, you will meet him and take someone with you."

"Who?"

"Take Eric Skye."

The Indian scout looked at Audrey for a moment and then back to the Wagon Master.

"Are you sure?"

"Yeah, lets take a devil to meet a devil..."

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    • Marlin 55 profile image

      Marlin 55 5 years ago from USA

      Frank, what can I say? It's more great writing! Your words flow well and the character development is great.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      A serial killer.. That was new to them. Guess serial killers have been around for all eternity I am sure.. . Great story..always love your story's ..

      I voted up and awesome

      debbie

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Who Me ? better take this brooks person . I ain't going to meet no Indian under no tree. just came out of one mass murder and a hangman. "TAKE SOMEONE ELSE" I am scared.

      So I brace for the disciplinary committee. Great work Frank, these are your true calling ,I look forward.

      Bless.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Marlin.. and Our Ms Brooks and you too Sky for following the wagon train diaries bless you all!

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      Frank, this has the makings of a stellar western/occult classic and I'm not sure many, if any, have mixed the two genres before. I can't wait to see what happens next. The characters you are creating are strong, yet human and relatable. They have pulled me into their lives as if real.

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      Marlin 55 5 years ago from USA

      I agree with poetvix. You really have something unique here!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Poetvix that was such a wonderful comment bless you and Marlin thanks for joining the wagon train :)

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      Marlin 55 5 years ago from USA

      Okay Frank, but just don't kill me off in like the 10th chapter.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Its not me. it's the Indians LOL

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Still enjoying your good story,

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      and I am enjoying your wonderful comments

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Great story Frank.

      Love the name "Water Streams"

      Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Sue.. was kind of surprised that this little quick flash fiction min-series would be well received I tried many and they failed here.. did well on the other sites..like Triond and Wiki-nut.. but failed here.. this one the only one that was well received here I'm glad that people like you has looked favorably upon it :) Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Oh and I will finish up this mini-series thanks again all of you for reading the first one thru five that last parts will come soon late Jan early feb :)

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      My true reason for not finishing those I start is for future assignments, and since it's so easy to copy a hole idea if you give it.

      From Da Block you said, then you should be aware of a thing or two.See how easy you get back to the score.

      Bless.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I held up on this sky for people on myspace and facebook to catch according to those emails I got from them.. but thank you for checking back here on my wagon train :)

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