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The Went Field Park Woods

Updated on February 14, 2015



The Went Field Park Woods,

oh the grounds covered

in a darkest shade,

it was nothing like the bayou

or Florida’s Everglades,

but it was a dumping ground

for those who depart

by bullet or blade,

a city’s wilderness

that clenched its thirst

by a small stream,

there, shadows walk, ghosts scream,

it was like a cemetery,

where no one gets buried,

all the bodies remain on top,

when looking for a missing person,

it’s one place to stop,

and it would certainly seem,

that the park has been the scene

of so many unlicensed interments,

who just get away clean.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Civil War Bob 4 years ago from Glenside, Pennsylvania

      Well done, Frank...voted up, beautiful, and interesting. It brought a picture of the Dead Marshes from Lord of the Rings to mind. Enjoy your day!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks civil war bob for your comment

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      Joyce Haragsim 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Your story/poem keep getting better and better.

      Voted up and awesome, Joyce.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      another great poem!! it reads like a story.. Love your work Frank

      Debbie

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much for reading Joyce and Our Dear Ms Brooks

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      Hubert Williams 4 years ago

      Such is the quality of life in the eyes of law enforcement.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Hubert for visiting Went Field Park.. bless you man :) Frank

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      WD Curry 111 4 years ago from Space Coast

      Under the bridge, across to the park, the bottom of the river is littered with weapons used in the crimes.

      Sorry, Frank. I got caught up in the moment.

      Is there a river?

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Wow you tell a scary tale Frank. Sure would hate to get lost in those woods.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      LOL @ WD Curry.. there is a stream and thank you too Gypsy hate for you to get lost in those woods too :) Great comment guys :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 4 years ago from West Virginia

      Frank, what can I say, but "another classic". Sure hope I don't depart that way. Well, I tried to leave a clever comment:) Genius Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      LOL thanks thelyricwriter :)

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Great sense of what I think of as internal rhyme in this piece--great job!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Audrey will miss you once you go vacay..:) Bless you and have fun

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      This poem reminds me of my relative's garden where men were shot and slain during the armed struggle in Nepal.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      wow VG that's too bad :(

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      Pollyannalana 4 years ago from US

      Sounds like one of my true crimes...very good.

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      time2rite 4 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

      Frank, your description of the park was so beautiful and eerie that I got a case of "the creeps" just reading it. Awesome yet again!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks pollyanna for stopping by and again time2rite thank you for your continued support bless you :) Frank

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      raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      now, i am scared to go out in the woods alone...

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for reading Raci bless you :)

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      Joanna Chandler 3 years ago from On planet Earth

      Hey Frank this is beautiful a wonderful excerpt thanks for sharing.

      ~~Good Night~~

      God bless U

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      say what???? LOL goodnight

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      pochinuk 3 years ago

      Frank,

      Your poem does not play games.

      Very serious.

      "… a city's wilderness that clenched its thirst

      by a small stream…"

      "...a cemetery,

      where no one gets buried…"

      Noose-like eeriness. High strung.

      In 101 words you appear suspect

      in this crime scene.

      GO TO JAIL GO DIRECTLY TO

      JAIL DO NOT COLLECT $200.

      -pochinuk

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      LOL thanks pochinuk

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      Cynthia B Turner 3 years ago from Georgia

      Hi Frank, Is this a real place? Nasty business there. I don't think it would be high on my tourist list. A particularly uninviting haunt. I wouldn't like to end up there, but then I guess no one would.

      Your work never disappoints.

      Take care.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Cyndi10 good to see you and thank you for stopping by :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      Oh the power of words! They can paint a gruesome scene and still keep an admirable form; but that depends on the writer. Exceptional!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you MsDora Bless you

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      A grisly portrayal, Frank. I can picture it. Creepy.

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      So macabre, Frank -- you are so good at this! :)

      Master of the Macabre is what we should call you -- yes!

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      Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

      flourish and Phyllis.. bless you both :)

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 23 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

      Bless you, Frank. Hope you are having a great day.

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      Mary Craig 23 months ago from New York

      I like that you've hidden away all these poems and I'm just finding them popping up now, kind of like the bodies at the Went Field Park Woods! Your words certainly paint a picture for us.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Ijeoma Peter 23 months ago from Lagos, Nigeria

      "when looking for a missing person, its a first place to stop"

      Hmm, that's one scary place, there are lots of woods like that, where crimes are commited on a daily basis and covered. The dead are crying for justice but got none. May we never encounter such a 'wood'.

      Frank, I always admire your 'peotic' skill. Meanwhile I 've written quite some as well but haven't gotten the courage to publishing them.

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      Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

      thanks again Phyllis, and Tillsontitan and Benny for checking out the woods, and Benny you won't know what you've got until you publish them so lets see them :)

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      DW Davis 23 months ago from Eastern NC

      Morbidly fascinating. You create an atmosphere of desolation and fear in an innocent place like the woods. The specter of unsolved crimes, CSI teams combing the decaying leaves for clues, hangs in the air above your lines. Very well done, sir.

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      Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

      thank you dwdavis for visiting the woods

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