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Flash Fiction: The Woman On The Mountain Top~My Response To billybuc's Challenge!

Updated on April 21, 2017
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As a writer Chitrangada likes to challenge herself by writing on different topics. That includes fiction, poetry, food, education, culture .

Honeymoon at  Shimla
Honeymoon at Shimla | Source
In the midst of the mighty mountains
In the midst of the mighty mountains | Source

My Response To Billybuc 's challenge!

This hub is in response to " A writing challenge: The woman on mountaintop", the link to which is here.

I have read some of the responses to this challenge and I must admit they are all awesome.

Billybuc is an inspiration to everyone here and a master of his trade.

Therefore this is my sincere request to him, to consider this just as a writing exercise, just a little effort from my side.

The picture in your hub is so beautiful and says so much. The proof can be seen in the hubs written by great writers here on HubPages, all interpreting it in their own beautiful way and all stories so wonderful, unique and creative.

Hope you like my interpretation too. Thanks!

Nature has music, if you can listen-- The Shimla Affair!

© Chitrangada Sharan Nov. 2014,

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Anita woke up to the sound of birds chirping and the gentle morning Sunshine reflecting on her face, from outside the large French windows of her elegant suite in the lavish hotel.

It took her sometime to figure out where she was, as she looked around in the tastefully decorated room.

And her eyes stopped at the bed beside her.

There she was--- married now and up there in the beautiful Hill station, Shimla for her honeymoon!

She was ecstatic for few moments, leisurely looking around the room at the belongings, that her husband had left behind, while leaving hurriedly for his morning jogging session.

She looked out of the window at the inviting weather, the fragrant wind, the tall green trees and the mountain top!


♥ How magical does the mountain look;

♥ Mighty yet Serene;

♥ Why I didn't look at it so lingeringly before;;

♥ How wonderful is this morning;

♥ Vivacious yet calm;

♥ Why I didn't feel the same before.

In the midst of Nature!
In the midst of Nature! | Source

The Beauty Of Nature: Sometimes you just want to do 'NOTHING.'!

There are times in our lives, when you just want to do 'Nothing.'

Anita was perhaps in that state of mind and she just wanted to enjoy 'this' moment of her life.

But was she able to do so!

The Nature's peace and the Sunshine flowing across the 'Deodar' trees and the snow clad mountain tops were so inviting that she couldn't resist the call.

♥ The Nature's freshness, flowing into her face;

♥ Sunshine flowing through the 'Deodar' trees;

♥ Angels calling out aloud from the mountain top;

♥ Come! Shed all your stress away and join us!

♥ How much solace; how so satisfying;

How necessary it is to spend sometimes in the wild;


She had to go there, out in the open.

And there she was--standing there, barefooted, in the midst of Nature. Her feet gently wet by the dew kissed green grass, were looking so soft and supple. There was a special, sweet fragrance all around, she had never sensed before.

She stood there staring endlessly at the mighty mountain------the symbol of positivism and strength.

And somehow to her amazement, it was looking back at her dew soft, innocent face!

Perhaps she was trying to treasure those beautiful moments in her memory.

In the real World, there are moments, when you need motivation and inspiration and an iron will to meet mountain like challenges of life.

''Hey Anita! Enjoying the beautiful Nature."

She turned around to follow the voice calling her name.

Now the ecstasy doubled as her husband stood there, looking lovingly at her sublime and enthusiastic face!

Keep close to Nature's heart... and break clear away, once in a while, and climb a mountain or spend a week in the woods. Wash your spirit clean.

~~~John Muir

Over every mountain there is a path, although it may not be seen from the valley.

~~~Theodore Roethke

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Hope you like it!

This is just a small piece, written spontaneously, in response to the lovely picture in billybuc's hub, the link to which is given above.

Many great writers and poets have written beautiful hubs in response to this, each one unique and creative and just wonderful.

My appreciation to all of them and thanks to billybuc for being an inspiration.

Hope you like it!

© Chitrangada Sharan 6th Nov. 2014,

All Rights Reserved.

PROTECTED: PLEASE DO NOT COPY!

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“Thousands of tired, nerve-shaken, over-civilized people are beginning to find out that going to the mountains is going home; that wildness is a necessity”

―----- John Muir

Shimla, source: You tube

The Hill Stations of North India, source: You tube

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Wonderfully done, I could feel the peace and serenity. Thank you for sharing this writing with us.

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      Harish Mamgain 2 years ago from India

      What a magic you spread before my eyes that it felt as if Anita took me there amid the mountains and I was myself relishing the splendor and beauty there. ChitrangdaSharan , this is a wonderful stroke and a very beautiful response to Bill's challenge. You are really a very talented story weaver. Voted up and shared.

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

      This hub was so peaceful. What a great read thank you for your words. Also, I love Theordore Reothke and was very happy to see him quoted. Jamie

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      Audrey Hunt 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      "The Mighty Mountain" - I love this line along with this beautiful story. I'm glad Bill gave this challenge - just look what you have created from it. I will certainly share this. Audrey

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      Devika Primić 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      You have written such beautiful hub. Great strengths and challenges.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Ericdierker, for your encouraging comments and appreciation!

      I am pleased to know that you liked it! Thanks!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Harishprasadji, for your kind visit and wonderful comments!

      I am humbled by your kind words and I value your opinion very much. Pleased to know that you liked this small effort.

      Thanks for voting up and sharing!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you jhamann, for your kind visit and comments!

      Glad to know that you found this hub peaceful. Much appreciated!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Audrey Hunt, for your wonderful comments!

      Yes, mountains look so powerful yet serene--Whenever I have visited them, I was just speechless!

      Many thanks for appreciating and sharing this hub!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Devika, for your beautiful and valuable comments!

      I value your opinion very much. Thanks!

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      Suzette Walker suzettetaos 2 years ago from Taos, NM

      What a beautiful response to Bill's challenge. I love your story and it is so inspirational. It is so full of positive aspects. Thanks for sharing this with us.

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      Charu Bhatnagar 2 years ago from India

      Hey Chitrangada, I am so happy that I found this hub. What beautiful language, awesome vocabulary and expression. The way you described nature's beauty, of the majestic mountains of Shimla was superb. I myself live in Shimla and it felt so good to read all the more. Shimla is a combination of city-scrapers and natural beauty. Since it is the capital of Himachal Pradesh, it is very much a congested city now. But it has parts, where the nature is at its best, there are views from where one won't want to move away. Once you start moving out of town, you'll see more beautiful parts of these hills and that feeling I could actually feel in this write-up. Thanks a lot. Though I really wanted that there be some lines more in the end. Fantastic it was, superb. Loved it.

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      Nithya Venkat 2 years ago from Dubai

      A beautiful story and a great response to the writing challenge. Your tale was magical, great write.

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I think Eric said it best....you painted a verbal picture of peace and serenity. So many stories do not stand out because they are missing that special something. It is hard to define what that "something" is, but this has it.

      Thank you for taking part in the challenge and for doing such a wonderful job with it.

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      Mary Hyatt 2 years ago from Florida

      Your Hub is beautifully written. I see many people have joined Bill's challenge and I think that is great!

      Voted UP, etc.

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      Linda Bilyeu 2 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Your vision of the woman on the mountain was vividly told! Well done!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Suzette Walker, for your kind visit and positive comments!

      Glad to know that you liked this story and found it inspirational.

      Thanks!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Charu, for your kind visit and lovely comments!

      I am glad you liked this hub. I also love Shimla. Its a beautiful hill station and I have very sweet memories of this amazing place, as I myself had gone there for my honeymoon.

      I appreciate your desire for few more lines and I would try to extend this story further in future, but presently this was in response to a writing challenge given by billybuc.

      Thank you so much for your lovely appreciation!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Nithya, for your kind words of appreciation about the story!

      Much appreciated!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you billybuc, for visiting this hub!

      And I am pleased to read your appreciation of this hub. Thanks for those encouraging words. It means a lot to me.

      Have a good day!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Mary615, for your kind visit and appreciation!

      I am glad you found the story beautiful. Thanks!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Linda, for your kind visit and encouraging words!

      Your opinion is valuable and means a lot to me.

      Thanks and have a good day!

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      Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

      Hi Chitrangada, that was a beautiful story, and yes we all need to stop, and look out at nature and those beautiful mountains because they certainly clear our spirits, wonderful!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Hi Nell!

      Thanks for visiting this hub and your comments are much appreciated. Like many others, I am a Nature lover and I feel nothing can be more inspiring than the beauty of Nature.

      Thanks again!

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      Chitrangada, your piece is short, sweet and beauty. Thanks for a refreshing read.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you MsDora, for your kind visit and encouraging words of appreciation!

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      Dianna Mendez 2 years ago

      What a beautiful way to meet the challenge. I lived in the mountains for almost a decade and the experience was breathtaking when you climbed to the top of them. I felt this as I read your story.

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      Dave 2 years ago from Lancashire north west England

      You certainly met the challenge beautifully , I became emerged in the story so wonderfully presented I could almost feel the cool mountain air. Well done !. Voted up interesting and beautiful.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Dianna, for your lovely comments!

      I am glad you liked this little effort of meeting the challenge. Thanks and have a good day!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you D.A.L., for your kind visit and comments!

      How beautiful for a writer, if the reader gets engrossed in the story! Thanks for your encouraging words. Glad you liked my response to the challenge.

      Thank for your votes!

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      Shannon 2 years ago from Texas

      Sometimes it is indeed refreshing just to do nothing but spend time enjoying nature and life's beauty through it.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you shanmarie, for your kind visit and comments!

      I agree with you that we must spend sometime along with Nature and listen to its beautiful sounds.

      Thanks and have an enjoyable day!

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Very nicely done. We see beauty in so many ways, and I find it wonderful to see everyone's visions of it.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you aviannovice, for your kind visit and appreciation!

      I am glad you liked this hub. This was my first attempt to write a hub in response to a HP challenge and I totally enjoyed it. And you are right everyone has written wonderful hubs in response to this.

      Thanks for your support!

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      Michael Higgins 2 years ago from Michigan

      What a great piece! All of us need to pay attention to the beauty around us. This couldn't have been said better than your hub. Thank you for sharing your thoughts! This is refreshing!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you MHiggins, for your lovely comments!

      Glad you liked the hub. I am a Nature lover and I believe nothing can refresh and rejuvenate you as best as our beautiful Nature.

      Your comments are also very pleasing and refreshing. Thanks!

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      Venkatachari M 2 years ago from Hyderabad, India

      Chitrangada, it is so wonderful! You have done it so well. I missed this great hub till now, and now, I am happy to find it out when I was viewing your "Old is Gold" poem. You are a great writer and I appreciate your works. This hub took me closer to the nature's beauty and refreshed my visit to Nainital many years back.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Venkatachari ji, for your wonderful comments!

      It means a lot to me coming from you. I am glad you liked the response to billybuc's challenge.

      I am pleased to learn that it brought back memories of your Nainital visit.

      Your support and kind words are greatly appreciated. Thank you!

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      Audrey Hunt 23 months ago from Nashville Tn.

      This is my second visit to your beautiful, inspiring challenge to bill's "The Woman On The Mountain Top." Again I am happy to share this with others. I enjoy this so much. Votes up and thank you.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 23 months ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Audrey Hunt, for revisiting this hub and appreciating it!

      So nice of you to vote it up and share it once again.

      Thank you!

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      Neil Sperling 23 months ago from Port Dover Ontario Canada

      Chitrangada - Music is everywhere.... and so true - Nature is fill of it. ♫♫♫♫♫

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      Chitrangada Sharan 23 months ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you Neil Sperling, for stopping by!

      Appreciate your positive comments!

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      Marlene Bertrand 21 months ago from Northern California, USA

      You showed a very vulnerable side of yourself with this one. I'm glad. It is beautiful and so wonderful to read.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 21 months ago from New Delhi, India

      Thank you MarleneB, for your appreciation of the hub!

      Bill's challenge was interesting and I thought of refreshing some of my sweet memories with my husband , when we visited Shimla (A hill station in North India) for our honeymoon.

      Glad you liked it! Thanks for your support and comments!

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