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There Was That Flaw

Updated on February 8, 2015



She was sick,

she needed a fix,

and she couldn’t trick,

she wanted to snatch and run,

but instead,

she ended the negotiations

with a long burst from a gun,

it was impulsive,

somewhat compulsive,

an awkward performance,

the sort of thing expected from a drug addict,

the dealer put up no fight,

as she ran in panic,

but as the sunlight,

and sounds of the morning rush hour

would seep,

she would weep,

because she knew,

her future would be shattered,

a drug addicted life, scattered,

all the thoughts in her mind just popped,

and when the cops came, she stopped,

they glared,

she stared,

but with silent comprehension,

and a great amount of fear,

there was that flaw,

as she lifted the gun in the air,

hoping for the luck of the draw.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Intense poem Frank! Made me sad for the addict... Voted UP among others!

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 5 years ago from Lagos

      Sad though but full of meaning. To be an addict is not a proud deal but the hardest of it all is to turn a new leaf. But determination always conquer all. Great poem. Lovely. Bless you

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      I loved the woman in your poem.

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      The RV Guy 5 years ago from Somewhere In America

      You captured my interest quickly, painted a vivid picture and elicited an emotional, "Wow!" Well done.

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      Marlin 55 5 years ago from USA

      I voted this poem up and awesome Frank. I can definitely see the evolution in your writing starting to show.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Wow! Frank this poem is amazing.

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      september girl 5 years ago

      Well, I never felt such emotion for one who was addicted before now. Great, but very moving poem. Voted up!! :)

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ...superior writing skills you have and always for me - the cinema of the mind ...... you have the DNA of a great writer in your blood ... lake erie time ontario canada 3:09pm

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      Terishere 5 years ago

      Strong poem...and sadly, I think you captured the heart of many drug addicts...

      Terri

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      Jennifer Vasconcelos 5 years ago from Cyberspace and My Own World

      You are one talented poet, you bring the words to life so brilliantly.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much for reading Jlave, terishere epi September girl, Joyce aka as the writer20 Marlin, VG, the RV guy, sunshine, ubani bless you all for checking this poem out :) Frank

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