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You just sunk my Battleship

Updated on June 2, 2013
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This Battleship stands posted
Shooting its projectiles
Sinking each mental synopsis
Not synapses


terms

Collapsing

the Ceil of a shadowed will
Blind to the termites
chewing

On its wooded interior
posterior exposed to temptations
The burning sensation

of wounded Sea creatures
Ripping holes through inner gravity
Deteriorating blockades to be no more



Them gems and diamonds
all bowing down
to radiation
to vibration


At the stern of this retched ship

this oh so rustic nature
of mental glow
that aluminum alloyed mow


no metals no bricks

so carefree

like chanced opportunities grow
like Naked pogo stick partnered twins
Just Babies looking
yearning to be in the know
Just hoping to Win!

The Battle

These words I deployed are my Battleship
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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Now that was a serious departure from your normal writing and I loved it. Someday I'll give poetry a try but until that day I'll leave it to the rest of you who do it so much better than I would ever be able to.

      Well done my friend. Keep the faith and have a great evening in N.Y.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Hey Billybuc, I do my best to stand guard of these shining digital seas here. For I am a true sailor who knows no boundaries, and keeps Watch 24-7 even if my ship catches fire, even if there seems to be no hope in sight of victory.

      For I am a true Naval Aviator too, and I will defend our beautiful countries soil till my last dieing day.

      Words for all the drunken sailors, still out there floating, & drifting out to sea, Fair winds & following seas. Shipmates......

      Thanks for the visit Billybuc, your definitely going to love that day, when its your turn to set these words free.

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      ScottHough 5 years ago

      Nice one CloudEx. Thanks. Keep up the great work, as always!

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      A departure for sure, and well done!

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      flashmakeit 5 years ago from usa

      Very colorful and amazing use of words. I could almost visualize every phrase you wrote. Vote up!!

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      @ScottHough, thanks for the visit, its tough to create at times, so I just had take my best shot at it.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Thanks @xstatic, This one has set sail for the top spot I hope, lol. All engines go, & full steam ahead!

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Hello @flashmakeit thanks for the vote, yes I tried my best to find cool imagery to compliment the poem, I was impressed myself after pushing that infamous publish button. These are by far the best wiki images I've found yet.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and interesting. Creatively done. Never imagined a poem about a battleship. Great pics

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Thanks for the vote @Gypsy Rose Lee, I'm happy you enjoyed it, it just came to me out the blue, hehe.

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      Roberta Kyle 5 years ago from Central New Jersey

      HI Cloudex-- say the word " battleship" and I am there like the military brat that I am:-) Glad I stopped by too to savor all the layers of meaning in the words and have a look at the powerful pix. Voting up up up.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Yes indeed @robie2, the words are deep like the deep blue sea, and an ocean of words is what I have to bear. Or something like that, I just tried to get fancy LOL.

      Thanks for sharing with me here, and until we meet up here in comment heaven once again, see you soon.

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      You should write more poetry. Well done.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      @Just Ask Susan, Thanks Susan I'll keep it in mind, I love poetry, I just wish the search engines did.

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      Victoria Lynn 5 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Wow, that was interesting! Powerful words. Well done!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      I enjoyed reading this interesting piece. Wonderful choice of expressions.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      @Victoria Lynn, Thanks for your kind words as well.

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Thanks @Vinaya Ghimire for reading and sharing, I'm over joyed that the Battleship poem here, has landed its worded assault properly as us poets do, and you enjoyed it as so many others as well & it makes me know I did something right.

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      Rhonda Musch 5 years ago from The Emerald Coast

      Great poetry and a well done deaparture for sure. Different but enjoyable!

      Sweet Wishes Rhonda

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Thank you @Rhonda Waits, for the kind words I'm happy you liked it.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      the poetry is awesome I love your hub

      Blessings

      debbie

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Thanks @Deborah for sharing with me and for the kind words.

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      molometer 4 years ago

      Hi Mike, just came across this on Digg. I dugg it big time.

      Great and powerful poem from someone on the inside. Great photo's too.

      Voted up and awesome, sharing.

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      Mike Pugh 4 years ago from New York City

      @molometer, Thanks ole chap the funny thing is I never made it out to sea, I guess god never wanted me on a boat, I was a electronics tech who worked on Naval aircraft, but I been on two aircraft carriers though doing a few work up projects.

      That would have been a tough experience going out to sea for me, because I'm in love with the great outdoors, which naval aviation, and aircraft squadrons are all about pretty much. I do miss the being in the Navy though, that's one thing for sure.

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      ThoughtSandwiches 4 years ago from Reno, Nevada

      Mike,

      Your closing stanza is evocative of the fact that everyone is a team on those big beasts and being in the bowels of the ship and not having a clue but certainly hoping they win that battle.

      Very nice job. I'm inferring from the previous posts that this is something of a departure for you...it doesn't show. You appear a natural.

      Thomas

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      Mike Pugh 4 years ago from New York City

      I really had no clue what to write about @ThoughtSandwiches, I just knew I had a memory of being in the Navy I figured I could get out of my mind, and to somewhat create a poem to fit the movie battleship coming out, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the cool comment and for sharing.

      The whole boat part was always something I actually thought up and has been a dreamy part of my mind I guess, since I worked on shore and on military bases as a aviator.

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      raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      While reading the poem i had the movie battleship in mind, and you surprised me for this poem is all about it...a very great movie indeed...

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      Mike Pugh 4 years ago from New York City

      Hi Raciniwa, hey thanks for checking out my Battleship poem, it didn't start out about the movie though, but I figured why not connect the two after I was done, since the movie is out, you know.

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