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Trickling

Updated on December 26, 2011

My love was a full, calm lake.

Still, it yearned to join.

A hallow fear of stagnation settling in the rocks.

Timidly, full of excitement, it trickled towards you--

The unknown body.

The new mix felt cool and refreshing,

Whirling around me-

Creating a new thing altogether.

Your water, like mine, was impure.

Shards of minerals and chunks of dirt in us both meant conflict.

It became suddenly apparent that elements in us both must be sacrificed.

Painfully I became aware and began purification, as did you.

Each letting go meant new chemistry

And we balked,

Never knowing what any of it meant.

Surrender means sacrifice with no clear picture.

Today what started as a stream has turned to a river.

Confused, full of emotion, I ebb and flow,

Allowing myself to be transformed.

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      mamarou 5 years ago from Sherwood, OR

      Very nice! Thanks for sharing. You are very insightful. Please continue your work and allow us to be part of it!

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thanks mamarou. I have been writing poetry sense childhood and college brought times of actually performing them! Since then, it has taken a back seat but has never stopped coming! I am glad I have a place to share it and it means so much to have ANYONE comment on it!

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      Last Scribe 5 years ago

      I love metaphors. Out of all the writing conventions, they're my favorite, and you pull them off so well. Your word choice really gives the piece a calm feel, especially mixed the the sounds you provided. You have imagery in the palm of your hand, this was beautiful.

      -Quill

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you Quill. I do enjoy playing with metaphors. Your feedback was rich really showed that you understood what I was attempting to do. Thank you for taking that kind of time!

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      Indian Chef 5 years ago from New Delhi India

      Beautiful poem Krystal, loved it and voted it up.

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you Indian Chef! Not quite as yummy as your recipes but with any luck, I'll get there ;)

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      Lovely poem, I like how you sense your partner in this poem as an obstruction of sorts as the relation goes on & if reveals your senses is enhanced to not only feel pleasure, but to welcome pain as a sort of comfort of knowing ahead of time it won't be a perfect love.

      Awesome poetic expression here, and so its getting voted up as such. Keep on keeping on. @ KrystalD

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you ClouldExplorer.

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      savanahl 5 years ago

      Your poetry is inspiring. You write beautifully.

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thank you savanahl. Poetry is a beautiful form of writing :)

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Really beautifully done!

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      Victoria Lynn 5 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Nice, relaxing beautiful. Voted this one up. You seem like a great new hubber, and I look forward to following you and reading more of your work. Welcome to Hubpages!

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      Nithya Venkat 5 years ago from Dubai

      Beautifully passionate, filled with tides of emotions gushing out through words of your beautiful poem. Voted up.

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