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Up on Roofs:Poem

Updated on June 25, 2013
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Justin W. Price, AKA PDXKaraokeGuy, is a freelance writer, blogger, and award-nominated author based out of Juneau, Alaska.

I don't generally write rhyming poetry, but this piece is a rhyming experiment. Hope you enjoy it!



Do you like this poem?

Then check out my poetry book,Digging to China, released by Sweatshoppe Publications. This poem is in it, along with fifty others. Signed copies are available throughSweatshoppe Publications. It's also available on Barnes and Noble andAmazon.com.

Up on Roofs



Up on roofs

the city lights

break up the night

skyscrapers piercing the moon

bathing us tonight


Up on roofs

towers blinking

kids spray stinking

paint across concrete walls

young artists sneaking



Up on roofs

wine filled cups

and cigarette butts

emit nicotine clouds

and solace to us


Up on roofs

moonlight ascends

and dawn pretends,

with pinkish purple light,

to send us to bed.






copyright 2011 Justin W Price


Thanks for Reading.

A FREELANCE WRITER, HONORS STUDENT AND GOVER PRIZE FINALIST, JUSTIN W. PRICE (AKA, PDXKARAOKEGUY)IS A POET, SHORT STORY, BIOGRAPHY AND HUMOR WRITER. HIS POETRY COLLECTION, DIGGING TO CHINA, WAS RELEASED FEBRUARY 2ND, 2013 BY SWEATSHOPPE PUBLICATIONS AND IS AVAILABLE ON AMAZON.COM, BARNES AND NOBLE AND THROUGH YOUR LOCAL BOOKSELLER.

HIS WORK WILL ALSO BE FEATURED IN BEST NEW FICTION (2014 EDITION), AND HAS APPEARED PREVIOUSLY IN THE RUSTY NAIL, EFICTION, THE CRISIS CHRONICLES, THE HELLROARING REVIEW, BURNINGWORD, THE WHISTLING FIRE, SEE SPOT RUN ANDTHE BELLWETHER REVIEW.

HE WORKS AS A FREELANCE WRITER, EDITOR, AND GHOST WRITER, AND IS WORKING TOWARDS HIS PH.D. HE LIVES IN A SUBURB OF PORTLAND, OREGON WITH HIS WIFE, ANDREA, THEIR LABRADOODLE, BELLA, SCHNOODLE, SAUVEE AND BLACK MOOR GOLDFISH, HOWARD WOLOWITZ.

PLEASE VISIT HIS PROFILE PAGE FOR MORE INFORMATION. THANKS!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Vellur, thank you so much!

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      Nithya Venkat 

      6 years ago from Dubai

      This is so beautifully enchanting. Voted up.

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Oh, thank you Audrey. I'm always pleased when I can evoke memories :-)

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      Audrey Howitt 

      6 years ago from California

      I used to spend a goodly amount of time lollygagging on a rooftop--this brought it back for me! Lovely write!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      oh, wow. Thanks Susan. I'm glad you enjoyed this!

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      Susan Holland 

      6 years ago from Southwest Missouri

      I felt like I was on a roof in a NYC neighborhood. Loved all the senses you put into this poem! Thanks for SHARING!

      Votes and shared! :-)

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, Kim. beautiful response!

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      Sunnie Day 

      6 years ago

      All I can say is Awesome Justin...such creative words dancing on the night sky.

      Sunnie

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Granna. Just did a google search and it popped up. I thought it was perfect!

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      Poohgranma 

      6 years ago from On the edge

      Love this poem and the photo is outstanding!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      I'll add it to my netflix queue!

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      Linda Bilyeu 

      6 years ago from Orlando, FL

      I highly recommend Man On A Ledge! I give the movie 4 outta 5 stars!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, CIndy. I'm glad you enjoyed this!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thomas, those were certainly good times. Thanks for reading. I may be in Chicago for a minute next month. Thanks a bunch for the share!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Never seen it, Linda. Do you recommend it?

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Cyndi. I like how that flows. Thanks for reading!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Oh, Thanks Rebecca. That's what i was trying to accomplish here. I was trying to use strong and specific images

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      Cynthia Calhoun 

      6 years ago from Western NC

      Ah, yes, the big city. I enjoyed this poem...and you captured the city-roof-night-scene perfectly! :)

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      ThoughtSandwiches 

      6 years ago from Reno, Nevada

      Justin...

      This is most certainly a piece for the big city. When I lived in Chicago we spent the majority of our time on errant rooftops...drinking purloined wine and smoking stolen ciggies...yeah...I was just a teenager...still good times to found on roofs!

      Thanks,

      Thomas

      PS...Voted Up and Sharing!

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      Linda Bilyeu 

      6 years ago from Orlando, FL

      I just saw the movie Man On A Ledge and I couldn't help but think of the movie while reading this piece. As long as no one is jumping off the roof, hanging out on the roof could be fun! UP!!

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      Cynthia B Turner 

      6 years ago from Georgia

      Hello, you have some really great lines in this poem: "Skyscraper piercing the moon..." A nice read that feels like New York. Enjoyed it.

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      Rebecca Mealey 

      6 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

      I like this poem, it is a great sample of descriptive writing and I can see sights and smell aromas in my mind!

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      yts, thanks so much! This is one of my wife's favorites and she likes it when I read it to her with her eyes closed all the time.

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      Cathy 

      6 years ago from Louisiana, Idaho, Kauai, Nebraska, South Dakota, Missouri

      "...and dawn pretends" -- my favorite part of your poem, although I liked reading all of it. The reader can visualize and even sense and smell what you were creating; it's one of those poems you want someone to read back to you when you're listening with your eyes closed. Thanks much.

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Tammy, that is a fun thought. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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      Tammy 

      6 years ago from North Carolina

      I love this piece. I like to think all of the poets like us in this world are hiding on the roof tops observing the rest of the world, just watching. This is beautifully lucid.

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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Stessily, Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment. This is one of my personal favorite poems. I usually don't liek my rhyming poems, but this one, the rhymeks roll off the tongue. And it's ambiguous without being vague. Appreciate your comment very much!

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      stessily 

      6 years ago

      PDX: Nicely opened and closed with the alluring beauty of night on the outside which is wrapped around the dark, inside lines of night's inner menace.

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