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Love Poems; We Are Naked Under the Duvet

Updated on December 23, 2015

We Are Naked Under the Duvet

We are naked under the duvet
The night is hot
The window, uncurtained
A galaxy of stars wink and twinkle on a blue, velvet canopy
Beams of moonlight gently
Tease shapes from the shadows

Limbs entwined - he sleeps
As I lay contemplating the silence
His breathing comes in little sighs
My song is sung
Our passion spent, the early hours embrace us
Washed on the shores of heady oblivion

Whispers and kisses shared,
Melted like snowflakes on the glow of our union
Love-making is like new bread
Best enjoyed warm and moist
I smile as I contemplate
Baking a fresh batch in the morning


Your Scent Still Lingers

Your scent still lingers on my pillow
You have slipped away
Into the bright, fresh morning
Leaving debris in your wake
Yesterday's coffee, half drunk, on the table
The toothpaste lid, left off
The toilet seat, upright
Laundry scattered on the floor
Delicious, domestic crimes for me to savour later
Your careless, casual, household misdemeanours
My bliss
Inhaling your scent
I close my eyes, for a few moments more

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    Amanda Severn 6 years ago from UK

    Thank you spirit whisperer. I only have a few of my poems on here, and they don't see too much traffic. It's lovely to have an appreciative visitor!

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    Xavier Nathan 6 years ago from Isle of Man

    Wow! This is beautiful, raw and so real. Your words describe the female appreciation of something a man never gets to feel in quite the same way. I have heard it expressed in different ways down through the years but this poem hides nothing of the female psyche and her expression of love.It is how I imagine my wife feels and as a man I envy this appreciation that only a woman can truly have. Voted up awesome, and beautiful.

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    Amanda Severn 6 years ago from UK

    Thanks for stopping by and commenting agaglia.

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    agaglia 6 years ago

    Nice imagery. Keep writing. It is fun.

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    Amanda Severn 7 years ago from UK

    Hi China Man, thank you for your thoughtful comments. I will have a look at your poetry shortly.

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    china man 7 years ago

    Nicely put for those special small hours thoughts ! I would welcome your comment on any of my poetry on here as Alternate poet

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    Amanda Severn 7 years ago from UK

    Hi Moulik,

    I'm not generally a romantic, but I obviously felt inspired that day!

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    Moulik Mistry 7 years ago from Burdwan, West Bengal, India

    Very sensual, loved the passion...

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    Amanda Severn 7 years ago from UK

    Especially when they're freshly baked! Cheers Bob. It's always lovely to see you here. x

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    diogenes 7 years ago from UK and Mexico

    Lovely poem, Amanda: Nothing like one good roll after another! Bob x

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Hi Andrew, thanks for the compliment. I'm glad you're enjoying hubpages!

    Brenda - Qui, moi?

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    \Brenda Scully 8 years ago

    well well well i don't believe it..... are you still stalking me

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    L. Andrew Marr 8 years ago

    They say great verse enacts the sense, this certainly does that. I would also like to thank you for your kind words on my poems. Thanks.

    L.

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    LOL! Diogenes, only a Brit would make that quip! Thanks for your comment.

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    diogenes 8 years ago from UK and Mexico

    Bake the bread and have another roll, eh, Amanda. Excellent poem.

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Thanks BP. I was pleased with this one. Glad you like it too.

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    blondepoet 8 years ago from australia

    I love poetry with passion great job x0

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Thanks WhiskeyChick. I wrote this in a rare mushy moment. I've been with my guy 18 years now, but I some things stay special.

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    WhiskeyChick 8 years ago from North of Somewhere

    Really liked this much. Thinkin' it's a nice idea to contemplate makig some more bread in the mornin'. Beautiful ending.

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Hi Russ

    Thank you for the compliment! I'm not overly wordy in real-life either which is why I love poetry. You can express so much in just a few words.

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    Russ Baleson 8 years ago from Sandhurst, United Kingdom

    Hi, I really like the way you write. Simple and direct yet projecting emotion that paints pictures. Thank you

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Thanks Ag, for giving me the correct word there. Doonas, duvets, blankets, what the heck! It's the bread-making that counts!

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Hi Shalini

    Thank you for directing me to the forum thread. I hadn't seen it, and I really appreciate all the kind words!

    I'm glad you like the poem. The association with warm bread seems to be going down well, there must be a lot of keen bakers on Hubpages! LOL!

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    Peter 8 years ago from Australia

    Yes Amanda we do have some very nice things for making love on or under, down under. A nice cuddly Doona or a lambs wool blanket does the job very nicely. Just makes you want to bake bread every day don't it ?

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    Shalini Kagal 8 years ago from India

    How did I miss this? ....like new bread warm and moist - warms the cockles of my heart!

    btw, Congrats on the 10,000 views :)

    http://hubpages.com/forum/topic/13744

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    I think you might call them Doulas Down Under. But use your imagination Hairy. A blanket would do just as nicely!

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    hairy A.S.S. 8 years ago

    Crikey Amanda , my missus as bin bakin bread all day , now ya got me all hot n bothered with ya poetry, reel purty it is. Wat doya think I should do, cos I ain't got onea them Duvet things. ?

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Hi rimsflorida

    Thank you for stopping by and commenting.

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Hi Cris, I'm very partial to new bread! In retrospect I should maybe have said that love-making is like new bread, best enjoyed warm and moist. Maybe I'll go back and change it!

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    rimsflorida 8 years ago

    Expressive Poem, Good job :)

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    Cris A 8 years ago from Manila, Philippines

    Love is like new bread... hmm i haven't thought of that. Thanks for sharing, short and sweet! :D

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Thanks CWB. I'm not sure whether Hubpages is getting more erotic, or whether we're all just testing out the theory that nothing sells like sex! LOL! As to my poem, no cynical ploys here (except maybe the title) this just came to me in a rare mushy moment!

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    ColdWarBaby 8 years ago

    Seems Hub Pages has been getting rather erotic lately. That's OK.

    Very well composed and quite emotive. Nice work.

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Guess you found me out, but sshhh! Don't tell the others!

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    pgrundy 8 years ago

    That explains it then--cynics are always the softest touches. They have to have that hard exterior to protect that soft heart!

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Hi Pam, I must have had a head rush today. I'm normally such a cynic when it comes to matters of the heart!

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    pgrundy 8 years ago

    This is so sweet and sensual. I love the line, "Love is like new bread..."

    Thank you for sharing it with your HP friends. :)

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    Gracias Elena. I don't really know what inspired it, but I just felt the urge to write something about that still, quiet moment of languid appreciation. The sleepy wakefulness before dawn.

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    Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

    ...then wanting bed partners to perform, as opposed to looking at the ceiling and thinking of England... REALLY!

    Amanda, I apologize for my balloney comment -- this poem calls for more serious and thoughtful commentary, I guess I can say I couldn't help myself, but here's another thumbs up, I really liked it.

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    Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

    You know how it is. First the Vote, then equal pay......

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    Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

    Sweet aftermath and already thinking of more... women these days :-)