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When the Night Came

Updated on June 15, 2012


I slipped off the right path when,

I tried to make love to you.

Was it.. when I promised for eternity

My love would be so true.


Finally.. when the night came

so unprepared was I,

You wanted me so badly

it almost made me cry.


Together.. we slowly melted

into a burning pile,

We ended up so tired

like we just ran a mile.


Your love was overwhelming

I was swept away

A love so strong and tender

I hated to see the next day


When the night came and went

the pleasure it was done

although it seemed so very short

all I remember is the fun.





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      cleaner3 5 years ago

      raci, thank you for the comments.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      uh, uh...this blows me off...great write...

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      thank you max. at least you have some class.

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      BeyondMax 5 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      Michael, this is a beautiful poem, gorgeous images of the night coming from the heart, thank you for sharing this sweetness.

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      Matthew, I am a capitalist but that has nothing to do with my poetry, if you had any brains you might be able to see that. your fan mail will be noted . sounds like you have somee issues, possibly envy?

      Whats the matter your momma never let you breast feed. . you have taken on the wrong poet my friend. for some one who hides behind smoke screens and is afraid of his own feminity Are you too embarrassed about your "perfect writing", i will find you and dig up your dead dog and kill him again, you ass h....!!!!!! Get a life for you have no talent on hubs , thats why you have no followers!!!!!!!

      I don't intend to mean either.

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      secondimage 5 years ago from From a place lost in time and space

      God bless you Mathew

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      Matthew Weese 5 years ago from Auburn

      Poetry does not come from the soul, it comes out of the world. TTFN. I'm not intending on being mean. sorry for the misconception.

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      secondimage 5 years ago from From a place lost in time and space

      Oh Matthew, must you be so mean to someone who clearly writes from his heart and soul?

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      Matthew Weese 5 years ago from Auburn

      Not in love with my self, I love the world that provides me subjects my friend.

      Sounds like you are critical? are you a Capitalist?

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      yeah whatever, just use your words like that on your own hub.

      Mr perfect. LOL

      I see that you are in love with yourself, huh?

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      Matthew Weese 5 years ago from Auburn

      My written word is perfected, my spoken word is epic.

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      Matthew Weese 5 years ago from Auburn

      It's all just exaggerated expression. yup, yup.

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      lisa, thank you lisa. glad to have you as a fan.

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      matthew, i don't mind your poetry. but when it is to graphic like yours , please just put it on your own hub. You really should just make it a hub and publish it on your site. your rhyme is good but your words are to graphic for mine. Thanks anyway

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      Lisa Williams 5 years ago

      This poem is beautiful and flows nicely, voted up!

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      secondimage 5 years ago from From a place lost in time and space

      Just amazing cleaner x

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      My little sweet angel, thank you for your read, my loyal follower. Just up late and this poem wanted me to write it. My next one is tommorow . It might be good.

      michael

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      Angelme566 5 years ago

      Awwee this melted me also !

      Love this line -Together.. we slowly melted

      into a burning pile,

      We ended up so tired

      like we just ran a mile.

      Powerful piece ..voted up !