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When They Go

Updated on August 21, 2011
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I wonder does the apple tree mind

when her fruit is plucked from her

a season she spent nurturing

from bud, to blossom to Gala

does she feel naked without them


does the river miss the trout

that turn their backs to her

determined to find grander waters

when she is swollen with tears

they return but they are not the same


and when the tufted seedlings

of the dandelion take flight

does she weep to watch her wishes

disappear on the fated wind

Is she at once proud and stripped bare like me?


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      .josh. 5 years ago

      Wow, Randy. Absolutely phenomenal, I love this.

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      ahorseback 5 years ago

      Awesome Randy , beautiful too .......:-}

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      Tom Rubenoff 5 years ago from United States

      A pretty emptiness anticipating saplings, fish, dandelions in the next yard over.

      What's really great is watching the grown offspring return, so much wiser, yet regressing in the presence of their siblings. Sure, they'll be mature for mom, but leave them alone for a bit and the horseplay and silliness returns as if they were eleven again. :) Very entertaining.

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      I think they absolutely do Randy.

      When my baby goat died a couple of weeks ago, it's mother cried for days. Not real tears but a heart rending bleat.

      I think all life forms whether plants or animals experience loss or happiness.

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      **Forgot the SoundCloud link, its up now.**

      Hi Josh. Thanks for coming by for a read.

      Hey ahorseback! I like the new avatar :)

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Tom I know I turn 12 again when I'm with my siblings!

      Cardisa- When we separate the cows from the calves the bellowing cries goes on for days. I've always hated it.

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      I do adore you metaphor

      and ask for more and more

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      Hmrjmr1 5 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Awesome RB!

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Anyone else have trouble with the link?

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      ah, something to do with AOL. the link works fine from explorer

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      Jeffrey Penn May 5 years ago from St. Louis

      It's always a pleasure to drop in on your work. This is beautiful.

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      BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Lovely...I haven't visited your poems in a while...

      I loved every part of this. It was short, which I like, and it said so much. Very elegantly written as well

      :]

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      Claudia Schönfeld 5 years ago

      proud and stripped bare...reminds me of my growing up kids when they're about to leave the nest...some days one, some days the other feeling is stronger

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      Tony DeLorger 5 years ago from Adelaide, South Australia

      Beautiful Rb, well done.

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      A great poem,well done and I vote this one up.

      Take care

      Eiddwen.

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      Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

      i loved this! it was beautiful. "does she weep to watch her wishes disappear on the fated wind" very poetic and good use of alliteration there. voted up awesom and beautiful. :)

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      attemptedhumour 5 years ago from Australia

      A beautiful poem, as thought provoking as ever. Cheers

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Hi mckbirdbks! These were hard won metaphors; I'm glad you appreciated them.

      And I'm always delighted when you do Jeff.

      No Ben you haven't! Especially nice that you did.

      Claudia - Mine are still little but the feelings are very similar I think.

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Thank you Tony. :)

      Thank you for the comment Eiddwen.

      Thank you Nikki your a sweetie!

      Hi AH, thank for popping in. I'm flying home from Vegas today. I think I'll be taking a little time off from "cheers". :D

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Sometimes the Gala wonders back toward the tree and the trout swim back up stream the first storm they encounter, and we just have to face the fact that the wishes conflicted.

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Insightful Mckb!

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      Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

      I would start drawing parallels between this and human mothers who watch their young grow up and leave home, but I'm afraid you'd chide me for being over-analytical. I'll simply call this short, sweet, and full of meloncholy images -- and leave it at that. Nicely done.

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Doug you of all people should know when I write about an apple tree it is never about an apple tree! My children leave me weekly and its a mirror of what will happen when they leave the nest all together. Which is also a mirror of so many things in nature that seem to deal with them so much more gracefully than I.

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      snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

      This is sooo sweet. Thank you Randy Behavior.

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Hi snakeslane! I'm glad you liked it.

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      Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

      Melancholic, I agree, Doug. But it brought a smile to my face. Certainly nicely written, and endearing (Please note, I can't find the exact word, so "endearing" will have to do)

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      I'll take "endearing" TL; thank you.

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      bingskee 5 years ago from Quezon City, Philippines

      life is always full of uncertainties...

      you have an incredible talent in weaving words for your poems... reminds me of Cris.

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      Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

      I don't think anyone has ever compared me to Cris. I'm gonna get teary over here.

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      Nellieanna Hay 4 years ago from TEXAS

      Randy - Where are you, gal? Haven't seen you lately!!

      This poetry is - poetry. And the Sound Cloud version brings it all the more into focus. Lovely.

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      Randy Behavior 4 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Hi Nellieanna! I have reinvented myself again and blog else where. Still writing up a storm though. xxoo

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