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Where We Belong
I’m so awake, and depressed,
an open eye, I watch in awe
beautifully unaware
you shine, when you're stressed.
You never knew I always saw
How can you live in a forest fire and not be burned?
Your eyes reflect the flames
a lesson never learned.
You’re the moon,
unaware you create tides below
they recede too soon
leaving empty foam.
Stereo on, lights off, open window racket,
this noisy dark can't blanket the liar.
Your arms surround me like a straight jacket.
Let’s dig up the past, burn it in a funeral pyre.
I only cry when you don’t hear
the deep of night
opened beers.
The stars below us, the universe above,
We grasp for one another,
we grope for love.
but fall we must,
burning through the atmosphere
a thousand miles of lust.
Back where we belong.
My first attempt at writing poetry with any kind of rhyming scheme.
When I write poetry that has rhyming in it, I always feel like I am writing song
lyrics because I have been in a couple bands and wrote most of the songs
while never writing poetry back then. So I would sit and write these words to music in my head.
Comments
Voted up and beautiful. Very profound and full of emotion...You write from your inner self... LOVE the pictures, hope the deer were okay in the top one, I SO love animals. Thank you for this unique, original creation. Blessings, Sparklea :)
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Thank you from the heart Sparklea. I know it wasn't the greatest but it did come from deep down and written in the lonely night. I think the deer were okay, animals instinctually jump in the water and follow it away from fires. :)
I'd say it's a totally cool poem, very expressive and deep on a personal level. Brings out inner images perfectly, I'll probably sound like a complete nutcase but I do hear the music when I read it. I can relate to this poem hundred and ten percent LOL Great choice of pictures, have you ever played bowling with the cans (kind of funny pathetic attempt to switch from despair of drowning by grasping the tiny straw =)). Love your poems as well as prose, it's really impressive.
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Thank you Max! I don't know how much I like this one really yet. To be honest I wrote it completely smashed, lol. Decided to put it on the next morning anyway. Stuff does come out emotionally in that state that's for sure! My friend and I did put a can pyramid on the pool table with cans at the pockets and rolled balls to knock them in. haha. They were full cans though and one popped open....I'm so glad you like my prose and this poem though you have inspired me to try some light hearted and/or funny poems, thinking about writing one soon. :)
What can I say, pool table killer LOL You should definitely try to write funny stuff, it's much easier than tough ones. I'm telling ya, when I did the grotesque piece (really nothing major from my point of view) the folks around here got seriously spooked LOL I had to lighten up the bizarre disaster just to straighten up the rocked boat LOL
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A grotesque piece you did and it slipped past me? What the hell? I am going over to look at it right now.
I am so saddened by the deer and the majestic forest fire behind them. I was thinking of the animals all of a sudden.
Beyond the photos is your beautiful "first piece" and you can put a tune into that too and turn it together into a poetic song! Good one, CM!
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Coffeegginmyrice: Thank you for your nice comment. :) I can't imagine all the horrible animal deaths that occur in the many forest fires that happen. Hopefully that pic is just a close call for them.
Wow, u wrote this drunk?! Achingly impressive. Theres so much inside of this that i felt.
CM, it's a beauty. No matter how many times I read it - I feel it deep! Great poem, and I'll be back again. =)
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Thank you Pink, that is an amazing comment. I love it when someone else can relate and feel a connection to something I write.
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Max! Thank you, I am so stoked that I have someone who loves my stuff like you do, you are awesome!!
Lovely. :)
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