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Why Did We Start Something Like This

Updated on July 28, 2014


I felt the veins in my temples tighten,

a young hooded woman stood near,

she wasn’t at all frighten,

but there was fear in the air,

I felt a tremor passing through my limbs,

then a salty scent came in with the wind,

it was the scent of human blood,

I caught it with my breath,

and then I really understood death,

suffering was all around,

the dead littered the ground,

I turned and ignored the cries,

as the young hooded woman stood there,

staring at me with bulging, tortured eyes,

some of the dead were my men,

and they were covered with flies,

that vision stayed in my head,

as I felt God’s breath,

coming from the skies,

the young hooded woman asked me

so many questions about war,

and I offered no replies,

when war happens young men die,

death had reached its peak,

taken its toll,

and it was painful for me to speak,

looking at bodies with puncture wounds,

and holes, rips,

prayers and words of hope

evaporated from my lips,

deaths that I could not dismiss,

but why do humans start

something like this?

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      ALUR 5 years ago from USA

      Ah the power of man to give meaning and take meaning to a different level. There is no reason for war or taking of life, but our Ego justifies this in so many ways. THen we are left behind to grieve and bury the loved ones...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I agree Alur thanks for stopping by

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Good point...why do men start something so evil that causes pain and suffering? WHY?

      vivid descriptions which sent a chill down my spin!!

      Happy Friday, Frank :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Ruch.. Happy Friday to you too:)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      wow good question Why do men start things like this.. great hub very deep and soul searching Frank...and so real...

      Love your hubs.

      voted up

      Debbie

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Our Ms Brooks.. you're the best

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      This poem did feel real to me.I could see you looking in to a shop window when she appeared. Voted up, Joyce.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      You have that power in your poetry to move the readers.

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Great question , and the very best answer should always be . This man won't ! It's the difference we make that will end up making the difference first in our lives .

      So this here could be the start of something big Brethren Frank.

      There are no mistakes when God Guides your hands. No excuses , no self judging.

      Good work brethren.

      Bless.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks writer20 VG and Sky for commenting on my poem :) Frank bless you all

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Whatever they started and as I take a deeper look , my expectations are out opf this world , for this master piece and take your time and I ask for the greatest thought you ever had or plan onm having Beautiful milestone that cannot be changed.

      Bless brethren.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      bless you sky

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      Lissette 5 years ago from Central Florida

      I remember being a confused teenager in the military. Thou shalt not kill. It didn't have the clause for 'what if I am ordered to do so'. I was trained to, I was prepared to but I never had to. Thank the Lord. War started a few months after I was done with my four years.

      Another memory I may not have if not for your words...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      im so sorry to have dug these memories up.. but bless you for protecting our shores :) Frank

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      Lissette 5 years ago from Central Florida

      They are not bad memories Frank. They make up my story. There is a lot to it. For some reason I just tell you exactly where your writing took me and at what point I had the exact same question.

      Never regret what your writing brings out in me or others. It is the blessing that comes from a great writer to evoke feeling, thought, or emotion. It is this that makes me want a copy of your book. I have not ordered simply because I want your handwriting in it...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      you are too to sweet :)

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      A great hub once more Frank;as always told in your own natural style and a vote up without a doubt.

      You always have the gift of breathing life into your poems and this one as vivid as any.

      Take care my friend and have a wonderful weekend.

      Eddy.

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Voted up and awesome Frank. Very cool poem my friend. Not awesome because of the story of course, but your detail is amazing. Always looking forward to the next line excitement:) Your truly a talent Frank. Keep em coming!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much eddy and thelyricwriter

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Wars and fighting are such as waste. Wonderful poem Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Just ask Susan :) Frank

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      Jennuhlee 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      "I caught it with my breath,

      and then I really understood death"

      Beautiful.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Jenn :)

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank,

      "as I felt God’s breath,

      coming from the skies,"

      Such powerful imagery.

      Voted up and away!

      Have a good weekend. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Sueswan and you have a good weekend too :)

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      A very valid question with possibly no answers. Only if everyone played their part in peace, there would be no more such scenes.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks senoritaa

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      DENMICA 5 years ago

      I don't know why, but this peom is one that could change the minds of the decision makers. I love it!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      denmica thank you so much again :)

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Powerful imagery Frank. One of my brother-in-laws did 3 tours. He was just a shell when he was discharged after the third. There was no life in his eyes. He died of a brain tumor before he was 30, I believe it was almost welcome.

      You have created a vision that pebetrates the heart and mind deeply.

      Will the powers that be never learn. Why are we still asking 'Why'

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      Your imagery is stark and the price of war is left with deep scars for who remains to bury their dead. War is hell and has been since the beginning of time. It won't end until our creator ends it. The power in your words jump off the page and leaves one with wet eyes. Voted Up awesome, beautiful, yet very sad. Peace and blessings to you my fellow scribe.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Rosemay I am so sorry for your brother... :( bless his effort to help keep this country safe....

      and Vincent Moore thank you so much for the visit bless you too Frank

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Imagery that brings the waste of war alive Frank. This can be a cruel and wicked world; but it's prose like this that will help to change it to one of peace and empathy someday.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by Alastar.. bless you man

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      time2rite 5 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

      The pictures you paint with your poems, Frank; I can see the whole scene like a movie and smell the smells as if I were there. You don't use a lot of words, but what impact they have! Bravo again, Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      time2rite you always say the write things LOL bless you too :) Frank

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ...Frank - I love this title - but then again I always love what follows all of your titles -your words - you are a born storyteller too and always have a deep profound and timely message - I think you are a grand wrier and I am glad to be in your esteemed company - lake erie time 11:04pm

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much epi..check is in the mail :) LOL

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      SanneL 5 years ago from Sweden

      A wonderful poem filled with sorrow, despair and evil interlaced with intense imagery. Beautiful work.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much sanneL

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Compelling and powerful! why did we start something like this? a question that raises more questions than answers. Have a blessed day! Peace.

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      Caroline Marie 5 years ago from Close to Heaven

      Very gothic and vivid imagery in this one. Goes well with the cemetery photo you used. Great work!

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Compelling write with great imagery Frank--really well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much shim-dawn, caoline and aufrey for reading my hub :) bless you guys

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      H C Palting 5 years ago from East Coast

      This was a great journey that ended with a question that very few people can adequately answer. Great hub.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Express10 :)

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      acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

      What a pity we don't all love one another and put paid to this unnecessary killing. A great poem Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you again AC....

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      Primpo 5 years ago from Brooklyn, New York

      I'm sitting in the Library reading this and I am crying.. no tissue. Wonderfully put together I could picture the scene in my head. I loved it.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      aaawww thanks so much Primpo

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      Secret lies 5 years ago from Redlands California

      Such a way we become the very animals we cage. Beautiful my friend. I do enjoy how you can grasp the darkness and make it lovely. Up and beautiful Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks secret lies :)

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      Kebennett1 4 years ago from San Bernardino County, California

      Frank my poetry is nothing compared to yours. You are awesome! This poem stirs up emotion which is what great poetry does. It is a beautiful tragedy and I loved it! I am so your fan!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Keb you are just fantastic :) bless you

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      D.Juris Stetser 4 years ago from South Dakota

      Amazing piece!! Robert Graves says that in the presence of the White Goddess, the muse, one's hairs stand on end, chills, etc., and going by my reaction, you've truly invoked the Goddess in your poem. Such visuals, and

      you've stirred every sense,coating each with the blood and horrors of war. Needless to say, I loved it. Awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      D-J thank you so much for visiting my page :) Frank

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      The evilness of mankind. now I'm going to have that image of the flies buzzing in my head.. Lol. voting up!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much doc for stopping by :)

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