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Wounded - a poem

Updated on January 20, 2013
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Caught off guard while dwelling in comfort
Basking in the warmth of a glowing sun
Lost in feelings of safety, serenity
I let my guard down like a fool
Unsuspecting of what that might do

Fooled by a wolf in sheep’s clothing
Wielding a lethal blade
So sharp I feel no pain
Until I see the very center of me
Ripped open and exposed

Suddenly I find myself
Like a wounded beast
Guts are twisted tangled ropes
No longer tucked away inside my core
Heart beating without protection

Comfort gives way to distress
What was once hidden now visible
My insides naked, exposed
Feeling everything too intensely
Panicked yet frozen, losing control

My soul is escaping
Rising with the steam that is
Slowly rising from me
From the red liquid pools
Seeping from the core of me

I try to hold it in
To save some for myself
I cannot live without it
I am not strong enough
to let so much of it go

Rising steam, red liquid drips
Slipping through my fingertips
Through my open lips
Unable to close them shut
Speech becoming desperate gasps

My eyes wide open but do not see
Unable to blink they are forced to drink in
Light and shadows, movements
I try to focus but nothing is clear
Vision blurred by stinging tears

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Will you leave me with core exposed
My wounds will kill me if not closed
Blinded, bleeding, heart in hands
Barely able to move
Hoping you will extend a hand

Will you gently untwist the knots
Place them neatly in me, aching and bruised
My heart in your hands, then safely back in me
Will you close my wounds carefully
Barely a scar as I heal in your arms

Or will you leave me there
A tangled bleeding mess
Not worth the time to reassemble
Maybe you think you don’t know how
You give up on this beautiful creature

Leaving me to collect myself
To shove my damaged heart inside my chest
Arrange my guts as best I can
Twisted, bruised, I close the wound
All this done blind with shaking hands

Healing happens, slow and painful
Fighting infections from filth
I could not wash away
Insides slightly out of sorts
Heart weakened, walls thickened
Refusing to give up, I heal

I dare to return to that meadow
Scarred and tough, tired and rough
Basking in the warmth of a glowing sun
Lost in the feeling of safety, serenity
Oblivious to the eyes that have noticed me

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Genna East - So good of you to take the journey of my little poem. I am glad it was one you enjoyed.. Thank you so very much for taking the time to comment.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Dotti - you are always too kind. Yes, there is some anger there. How oculd there not be when somone leaves you in that state without so much as a look back, or worse a look back with no action! Like everythig else, it is somethng we get over, with the helo of another or on our own.... Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I am happy ou were able to enjoy one of my poems as much as I enjoy yours. I need to be reading more of those!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Vincent! - Oh how I love your comments! How could I not. You make me feel like a poet and even an artist. I am so delighted that you shaerd with me how this poem made you feel. That was exactly my hope. To somehow put words to those feelings... Thank you also for the sharing. A nod from you always seems to boost my readership. I am so lucky that you have taken a liking to my work. I also feel encouraged to keep feeding you with quality work.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Hello Maria! Thank you for your touching comment. I find it so beautiful of you to pull out a strong and uplifing line to focus on.It really shows your wonderful spirit... hugs to you as well. :)

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      Genna East 4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      I dare to return to that meadow

      "Scarred and tough, tired and rough

      Basking in the warmth of a glowing sun

      Lost in the feeling of safety, serenity

      Oblivious to the eyes that have noticed me..."

      So powerful...we can feel the wounds, the betrayal, the courage of healing...magnificent work, Dana!

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      D.Juris Stetser 4 years ago from South Dakota

      Girl, you are so amazing. This is incredible, visceral, and raw. What emotions you evoke, and what gut level anger at whoever put all that pain into your wounded soul. This time, Hub Pages comes up short because there are no adequate superlatives to express what we feel reading this. Awesome, many times over must do, I suppose. Brilliant and obviously so heartfelt work Dana. Kudo's and hugs.....Dotti

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      I am with Leslie aka ImKarn. You brilliantly laid out before your audicence your magnificent gift as a poet. You exposed everything and delved right to your very core. I was moved by your words, I felt every rip, tear, pulling, losing, dripping, bleeding, heart stopping words. I am in awe of your work, simply brilliant. Voted up and shared.

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      Maria Jordan 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      "Refusing to give up, I heal."

      Powerful symbolism, Dana. Beautiful soul work.

      Voted UP and ABI. Hugs, Maria

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      blondey - i ove those kind of cries... i am so beside myself, amazed, confused, thirlled, that you connected to this like that... that is exactly what i hope for my readers! thank you!!!!

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      It was a good cry because I felt your poem, your work, and that was a good feeling/connection. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Mekenzie - I am so glad you found this. I can tell you understand the feelings I was trying to convey. That horrible physical pain of having your inner self exposed, only to be left that way. It is impossble to put into words, though I wanted to try. Your comment is comforting to me because it tells me that I did the subject justice. ...

      Thank you so very much for sharing your comment. And for voting.

      Wishing you love and sun and beautiful things.

      ~ Dana

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      blondey - I am glad you kept reading. Is it wrong that I am also a little glad I made you cry!?! Because that means that I made you feel something. Wow! I am humbled by that. I love/hate when something I read makes me cry. ... I hope you read some of my lighter work. I would love to make you smile, laugh even.... :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Poetic Ink - You got it exactly right. A horrible gutwrenching feeling for your immermost parts to be exposed, only to be left to die or put yourself back together. In an ideal world, there would be someone to help with that, so you dont end up so damaged. But this is the real world and sometimes they just walk away....

      Thank you for sharing this on the community pages. A few folks found it that way and left some amazing comments. When I wrote this, I knew the feeling I wanted to convey and the metaphor to use, but I did not think I did it justice. It seems I got it a lot closer than I thought. This is such an encouragement!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Gypsy Rose Lee - Yes. Sorry to know that you know this feeling. I am still gathering up the guts. Trying not to let them spill out again before I can sew myself up! Always nice to know there are people put there that understand... thnak you for sharing in your comment.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      teaches12345 - thankyou for commenting on the unicorn! i love them. always have. i like to joke that someday i am going to magically become a unicorn. so when i write this i figured this is as close as i'm gonna get to that.

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      Susan Ream 4 years ago from Michigan

      I saw your poetry feathered on FB poetry ink. I'm really glad I clicked over to check it out.

      Oh the palpable pain this poetry evoked. It's almost impossible to put that kind of horrendous pain into words but this work is brilliant!

      I have experienced this type of raw gut wrenching pain .. the kind you think you will never survive. Your ending brought the sun out from behind those fieresome black clouds.

      This is Poetry that reaches deep within the heart to expose the devastation of deception and abandonment.

      Blessings to you - voted up and beautiful!

      Mekenzie

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      Hi Dana, this is an incredible poem shared by Mike Pugh. this was very intense and did not know at first, then read on. So well captured is the heart here. I cried a little it was so moving.

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      Mike Pugh 4 years ago from New York, New York

      Compelling piece here Dana, wow if felt as if I was the dear, lying there on the ground all exposed to the environment, to the filth as you called it, and un-mended awaiting for my heart to be either ripped out or sewn.

      Yikes such a graphical style poem at that, and it seems like someone was in distress for the love lost of another, whom maybe didn't care to love at all, but to somehow play a trick like evil game of lust, and false love.

      Great way of expressing such an emotions in poetic for with a massive simile if I indeed got it right "You know the idea of a love lost", powerful stuff! thumbs up and getting share onto our community pages.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Powerfully strong and emotionally raw. From experience a really great hurt to the time it heals can take practically a lifetime and a good deal of the time many scars remain.

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      Dianna Mendez 4 years ago

      I like the way you tied the unicorn into your poem. It is a thing of beauty, something that once was and could have been! Very passionate words, sad echo to them, but yet very touching.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      xstatic - thank you, friend, for commenting. painful yes. also beautiful. and i am glad to see that you appreciated it.

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Beautiful and passionate, from nearly mortal wound to healing, a painful journey.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Hi Martie! - Happy to see you... Yes, there is a lot of truth in here.... Hope you are far from agony and filled with beauty now and forever.... hugs.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      jhamann - Emotion is one thing I try my hardest to infuse into my poems... Glad you like this one. I was a little undire if I could tackle it.... See you around.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Rolly A Chabot - I appreciate your input. I am gonna be a writer yet! Thanks for the Canadian hugs! Your glowing personality warmed them nicely. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Hello Gus! nice to see you here! "well accompished"! Well, now I am delighted be that comment. If I am not careful all of this upspeak is gonna start going to my head! :oP

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      FyrFytr234 - thank you! i am so glad you liked this enough to share it. that is a great compliment

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Bobboshpere - So glad you took the time to comment. Thank you. Nice to meet you!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      ImKarn23 - WOW! What a comment! I am so beyond thrilled that I was able to connect with you so completely. THAT is what I truly believe poetry is.... Yes, she/me/we always seem to heal. It would be nice to do it in the comfy arms of another, but sometines we just bite the bullet and do it on our own....

      Thank you for your prefect comment. You have be believing I can be a poet!... thank you for sharing too. You are the besest.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Ken - Wow. Thank you for your comment. I am always so greatful to know what works, or doesn't. The way you pull out these stanzas is terrific.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Vellur - Thank you so much for sharing this one..... Pain is right. These words were inspired from my experiences as well as those of a good friend... I am so pleased to know that you felt what we did. That is what I love about poetry, the feelings it conveys. Each time I write I hope to share those feelings with my readers.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Faith Reaper - It think it is safe to say you liked this one! I hope you don't have any first hand experince with this kind of torment. You are too sweet... Thank you so much for the vote and share.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Mhatter99 - Savagery! What a meaty word. I love it. To expose ones most vital parts and leave them bleeding. Yes. Savage seems to cover it.... "poetic skill"- now that has me positively tickled . I have learned form the very best, poets such as yourself.... Thank you for the great comment.

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      Martie Coetser 4 years ago from South Africa

      Truly beautiful! Every phrase so true!

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

      Such a great and emotional read. Thank you for sharing. Jamie

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      Rolly A Chabot 4 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Hi Dana... well done, very well done... from the heart where a writer is born...

      Hugs from Canada

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      Gustave Kilthau 4 years ago from USA

      Hi Dana (DanaTeresa) -

      Metaphorical and so very well accomplished. Thanks.

      Gus :-)))

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      FyrFytr234 4 years ago

      VERY powerful and strong. Voted up and shared.

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      Bobbosphere 4 years ago from Oak Park, Illinois

      Whoa! This one grabs you by the heart and won't let go.

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      absolutely BRILLIANT poetry - raw, bleeding emotion...incredible strength....

      i am awe-struck, my friend - i physically felt the impact of your words and sooo wanted to make it all better..

      i LOVE that 'she' was able to begin healing herself...from the inside out - literally...

      sharing everywhere...

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      Ken Taub 4 years ago from Long Island, NY

      two very strong stanzas; all raw...

      Fooled by a wolf in sheep’s clothing

      Wielding a lethal blade

      So sharp I feel no pain

      Until I see the very center of me

      Ripped open and exposed

      Suddenly I find myself

      Like a wounded beast

      Guts are twisted tangled ropes

      No longer tucked away inside my core

      Heart beating without protection good stuff. Ken

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      Nithya Venkat 4 years ago from Dubai

      Pain, emotions expressed so well, in your poem. I could feel the hurt and the pain, as I read your poem. Great poem.

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      My goodness, Dana! This is stunning and amazing writing here. Wow, wow, wow, very gripping of a tormented heart.

      Voted up +++ and sharing

      God bless. In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Perhaps it's me. I sense some savagery in this piece. If anything it proves your poetic skill. Thank you

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      And You Dana a wonderful friend.. thank you

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Debbie - Sometimes love hurts, esopecially when you are caught off guard and found bearing your heart and soul.... thank you for sharing. you have become such a dear friend... hugs.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Oh girlfriend.. I feel your pain. with every word.. every feeling every word...hits me like bricks.

      bless you so much

      Love you Dana

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      Debbie