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Updated on October 12, 2014
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Dancing on the head of a pin.

Dire warnings from within.


A Thanksgiving

weekend

rain,

dark,

needing

fire.

The heat

has

vanished.


Got this

cold

wet

rainy

business

looming,

glooming,

zooming in.

na na na

zooming in.


Precipice.

abyss

abruptly

looming,

booming,

dooming,

rooming,

zooming

in!


As is, amen.

October 10 2014







© 2014 snakeslane

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Hi anglnwu, a fan, how cool is that. You made my day. The first two lines kind of establish the mood which was pretty bleak. I'm happy to see you. Thank you for staying in touch :)

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      anglnwu 2 years ago

      I'm a great fan of your poetry. Love the first two lines.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Thank you Wayne, doom and gloom seems to be my niche these days. It's a November thing with me.

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      Wayne Barrett 2 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Well done. Poetry I can get into.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Hi Audrey, thank you. I had experienced poetry almost exclusively in written form until online writing and online resources completely opened up that world for me. I am so amazed what poetry is available to actually 'listen to' online from Sound Cloud to You Tube Twitter and a myriad of other publications. I have to tell you it has changed my writing life, although (and here in lies the catch) I do not like my voice when I hear it recorded, although the poems are definitely written for voice, it is not my spoken voice, (it is an inner voice if that makes any sense).

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Well this was just gorgeous! It begs to be spoken!!

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Hey Jodah, I know I shouldn't complain about a little rain, it is water after all. I hope you get some!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Um, yes Summer's on it's way here. The days are warming but we need rain badly. Wait, I see a few clouds building and a wind arising, let's cross fingers. Just don't want storm damage like in Nellieanna's neck of the woods...just the rain.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Genna! I'm so flattered and happy that you love this, sweet...

      Yes, the Dylan song, and their amazing Traveling Wilbury's collaboration. I wonder which came first. I know I used to love If Not for You when Dylan sang it too.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Jamie, there was a whole bunch of 'fat' in this piece that I cut and just left the bones. I am not sure if I chickened out, or lost my nerve, but I felt like I wanted the poem to read really fast. Thanks for getting that. I saved the pieces that got left on the cutting room floor, maybe they are a different poem, I don't know.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      MsDora, You make me smile, thanks for your good wishes...

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Hello Faith, what a treat to read your comments. Thank you!

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Rhythmic, rolling, reflective, momentary profound…I love this! And I love George’s rendition of Dylan’s “If Not for You” … it compliments, complements and more. You are such a unique talent. :-)

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

      I love how you ended this poem, and sped the narrative like a speeding freight train to the "Amen." Well done. Jamie

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      Beautiful and unique. Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Creative and oh so interesting your ... zooming. Love it. You are certainly a gifted writer, Amen.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Hi Mike, you are so kind. The song says it all. I am thankful for your encouragement.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Oh Nellieanna, you warm my heart, thank you my dear lady. Your words, as always so full of wisdom and lovely newsy bits. I see you've been through some of mother nature's wrath, wow, stern warnings indeed! Glad to hear you are safe and well. Just got back video streaming yesterday after weeks of interruptions, I think it's fixed, had to celebrate by making a Hub.

      Running away now to work (yes!) back later.

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      mckbirdbks 2 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello snakeslane. You tap your writing baton and the orchastra sits up straight and waits for the first wave. This piece certainly has rip tides for waves as it rushes in and then pulls, tumbling the reader along. You certainly set the bar high for writing sytle, writing grace and na na na.

      We all here are so thankful that you decided to hang out with us.

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Mar, If not for you! Thanks for being there, you and Andy give me pause, or was that paws lololol

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      snakeslane 2 years ago from Canada

      Hey Jodah thanks, your visit most appreciated. Must be summer where you are, sigh...

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      Nellieanna Hay 2 years ago from TEXAS

      What a beautiful hub, Snakes. The poem is viscerally real. Your photo is wonderful and the choice of music is perfect. I so miss you when you're away for awhile. There's no one else like you and that is because you're so dear and real.

      As I sit here in my house enjoying the second day of break in the heat, the relatively 'cold' feels so penetrating, though it's only 61F outside and my house, with no heat turned on is 70F. Even so, I donned a sweatshirt and pants and they feel really good. We've had a bit of rain with it, which is also a welcome break from the driest September on record. Last week we had a storm which brought rain but only a slight break in the heat, which returned quickly. But even that much was a blessing because we were without power for 5 days which would have been cruel without A/C if not. Lots of storm damage all over but my yard suffered only one broken tree limb. Just as the power was restored, a week ago today, we (I and my dear helper) headed for the ranch 500 miles away to take care of business there. It was a relief knowing that my fridges would be on in my absence. I'd lost almost everything frozen and perishable in them and it was the second time in several months. So it's a chance to 'start over' in that department and possibly rethink my eating habits, such as less longer-term storing and more immediate acquisition, cooking and eating stuff.

      I become more philosophical about this inevitabilites of the days and seasons. Your closing line says it well: ". . . As is, amen.. . . . "

      All things do work together, if one gives them time; - which, of course, is mandatory, but we often fight it or fail to make changes which provide results more to our liking.

      Please keep writing. I love it. I'm visiting here only out of the list of new hubs, because I just can't miss an opportunity to read you. Gets my votes, too.

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      Maria Jordan 2 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Whenever I read your work, I am convinced I knew you in a former life...

      In any event, I sure am glad I know you now, girlfriend.

      Starting a morning with you, George...well, it just doesn't get any better...

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Unique and interesting. Like the George Harrison clip too.