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Kevin’s version of “The Woman on the Mountaintop”

Updated on March 11, 2015
The Woman on the Moutaintop
The Woman on the Moutaintop | Source

This is in response to a challenge offer from Bill Holland (billybuc). He pasted a photo of a woman at a mountaintop (see above) and told us to write our own "thoughts" of the photo. Well, here are mine.

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The cabin from the rear.The porch at front.
The cabin from the rear.
The cabin from the rear. | Source
The porch at front.
The porch at front. | Source

Brief introduction:

There was a woman with dark wavy hair and to her husband had a face of love. There was a mountain - a tall green mountain - and the mountain had a path which led to the top. The woman could see the tall mountain, and the path, from her white cabin every time that she sat on her porch swing on the warm front porch. One day she decided that she was going to walk up that path as high as she could go. If she did not reach the top on the first day then would try again each day until she did. She would call it a dream of thoughts and actions.








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Outdoor backpackHiking boots drying after cleaning.
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Hiking boots drying after cleaning.
Hiking boots drying after cleaning. | Source

Preparing for the trek:

The day after she had decided that she would take on the challenge, she began to prepare herself for the hike up the trail. For instance, she opened the bedroom closet for her backpack to carry the healthy snacks and the water in. She also brought out her brown hiking boots which she forgot to clean the mud off the soles from last year. The mud was dried on now.

She had the backpack, the boots and she thought about what else she would need. She had to buy the snacks and water, throw the long socks in the washer, clean out the pack and scrape the mud from the boots. That was about it but while she was doing all of that she would still think what else there was, just in case there was anything.

First she emptied the backpack. It was all just trash so that was simple. Next were the hiking boots. She sat on the porch with them. It was a warm and sunny day so she did not mind sitting on the swing for two while she scraped the dried mud off of the soles. Since that would take most of the afternoon, she had decided to leave the wash while she went the grocers for the food until tomorrow .

The following day after she had risen, made the bed and had breakfast as normal, she returned to the bedroom and gathered up the clothes to be cleaned so that they could be cleaning while she went to the grocers. Then went to the laundry room and started the washer - which her husband had just repaired - and she added the detergent. After it had filled the clothes went in and she shut the lid and then she returned to the kitchen to quickly write the list of what she would need on her hike.

She scribbled a few things down on the food list then checked it over to make sure that she had not missed anything. Then she left for the grocers. When she got there she looked for the natural water – in the glass bottles – and the organic snack bars. Next it was to the produce section. In that area she picked up some organic fruit – a couple each of apples, pears and bananas. What she did not eat on her trips could be eaten at home.

As soon as she came home she threw the wash in the dryer and then made up her snacks for the first hike. When she finished, the rest of the food went in the fridge. The minute the dryer stopped she grabbed her clothes and changed, anxious for her first adventure.

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Fruit stall in a market.
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Fruit stall in a market.
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The New Experience Begins

Right after she donned her clothes and grabbed the backpack full of snacks and water she was off for the mountain. Lunch had been in between her tasks and the walk towards the trail had started at 1 PM. It took her 5 minutes to get to the mountain trail and she began the hike up the pathway. The first time on it she had to choose which way to go various times. At least she would know next time – if she remembered, or wrote it down.

After walking along for a ways and choosing several times which way to go – luckily she had chosen the correct ways it seems – she stopped for her snack and drink about 3 PM. She had been so close to halfway up. After she finished the snack and drink she put the trash and empty bottle back in the backpack to take care of later when she returned home. She stood up, stretched her legs, and did a few exercises before moving on.

Instead of going up she went back home since she it was 3:30 and she had to be home for dinner. Walking down was easier than going up although she had had no problem going up. She made it home by 10 after 5:00 and decided to leave earlier tomorrow. The backpack was emptied and refilled and put in the fridge for tomorrow. She began supper.



Poisonous Plants

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Up close and personal look at a poison ivy plant.Pieris japonica
Up close and personal look at a poison ivy plant.
Up close and personal look at a poison ivy plant. | Source
Pieris japonica
Pieris japonica | Source
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Do you think she will make it next time?

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Tuesdays' Trip

On Tuesday, after finishing breakfast and cleaning everything up, out she went for the days venture. Luckily she was prepared since yesterdays’ ways to go had been marked. She began at 9:00 AM and what she brought today would be enough to fill in for lunch and a snack after. Judging by Mondays’ trip, she might reach that point about 11:00-11:30 AM continuing onward after eating she did not know how far it would take her today. She would have to wait and find out.

Heading for the mountain she could not wait to begin today's’ hike. Reaching the bottom she took a large breath of the fresh air and began upward. Tall trees, short trees, red flowers, yellow flowers, she did not miss any as she passed them on her right and left. Careful to avoid things like poison ivy though and she also watched for creatures such as snakes. At 11:09 she reached the point of yesterday so she stopped to rest and have the lunch/snack. Half an hour later after eating, digesting and exercising a little she started again.




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 This photo is a mountain sweet pitcher plant, a bog species listed as endangered under the Endangered Species Act.Mixed wildflowers. A mountain squirrel.Wild horses.
 This photo is a mountain sweet pitcher plant, a bog species listed as endangered under the Endangered Species Act.
This photo is a mountain sweet pitcher plant, a bog species listed as endangered under the Endangered Species Act. | Source
Mixed wildflowers.
Mixed wildflowers. | Source
 A mountain squirrel.
A mountain squirrel. | Source
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Wild horses. | Source

Victory!

By about 11:45 she was on her way again. Since it was halfway she wondered if she would reach the top today, so she pushed on. She stopped enjoying plants and scenery at every step she took even though she still watched for the dangers. By 3:00 she saw the top getting near and by 3:29 it was reached. When she stood on the top, the scenery plus what had been accomplished were taken in and enjoyed including the fresh air. She realized though that the air was thin on the top so she could not take many deep breaths. Her dream had come true!

How could she prove to her husband that she had made it to the top? He may not believe that she had done it. If she posted a sign or made some type of mark then he would have to come up here to see it. No, that would not work. She looked around her for something that she could bring home to prove the fact, “Let me think, a rock, some grass, a leaf? A photo! I do not have my camera but I have my cell.”

She took a few photos of animals and plants which were only on the top of that mountain.

When she got home her husband asked, “Where were you? I was beginning to worry.”

“Making my dream come true, I was at the top of the mountain”, she replied.

“Dreams”, he said, “I wish some of mine would come true.”

“If you do not believe me honey, then I have proof.”

“How can you prove something like that? Are you on TV?”

“No, I took photos of plants and animals from the top of the mountain”, she answered.

“Let me see them”, he said.

So she pulled out the phone and brought up the photos to show him. She even had one of a sign which was hanging on a tree. He believed and congratulated her.

She then told him that she would make his all-time favorite for dinner, went out to the kitchen and smiled and hummed while she made it. After dinner, they went out on the porch to sit on the swing and watch the sun disappear behind her victory mountain.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you for the comments. I am glad that you liked it so much.

      Kevin

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      Suhail Zubaid aka Clark Kent 2 years ago from Mississauga, ON

      Wow! That was my kind of adventure. You described her adventure very well indeed. Lots of details right there.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I will have to look at your blog to see whether I read yours Chris. I can see that you have survived your hike and I hope that it was satisfactory.

      Thank you for reading the story and I am glad that you enjoyed it. :-)

      Tomorrow is Friday, you have a nice weekend.

      Kevin

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Missoula, Montana at least until March 2018

      It was great to see that you had responded to this challenge, too. Mine was a comedy, but I've moved it to my blog. Your story reminded me of a hike I took in Montana to the top of St. Mary Peak in the Bitterroots a couple of years ago. Great job on the challenge. I enjoyed your story.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I take that you are saying that you do not Peachy. Have you ever tried? Before I began writing here I always said to myself I wanted to but I never attempted to. Take a callenge, test the waters and see what comes up - you may be surprised.

      Thank you for the comment. :-)

      Have a nice weekend.

      Kevin

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      peachy 2 years ago from Home Sweet Home

      awesome story, i noticed that many writers are good at creating stories, voted up

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you Shyron for your precious comments. I am also grateful for the vote and share.

      Hugs to you to. :-)

      Kevin

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      Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago from Texas

      Kevin! I am so proud of you, This was just beautiful, I was so glad she followed her dream and made it to the top.

      Voted up, AI and shared

      Blessings and hugs

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Maybe they could go together Faith, I would have to check with Billy whether I could write another one. Having a picnic at the top sounds like a good idea. Thank you for reading it. :-)

      Take care.

      Kevin

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Wonderful step-by-step process of following one's dream to make it a reality. I enjoyed following her along up the mountain and seeing the sights. Maybe next time her husband will go with her and they can have a picnic at the top.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I thank you a lot Deb. I was unaware that you climbed mountains. :-)

      Kevin

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Such a nice piece of work! Sounds like the trek that I would have envisioned.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      You surprise me and I thank you highly Peachy. I thank you for the thumbs up.

      I hope that you are having a nice weekend.

      Kevin

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      peachy 2 years ago from Home Sweet Home

      i wish i could write as good as you did, thumbs up

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Her husband probably just thought that since he could not do it, neither could she. lol I am glad that you liked the photos. Thank you for reading this.

      I was going to read yours the other day (email) but it was a comment that you were going to write it.

      Kevin

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      Debra Allen 2 years ago from West By God

      With persistence things do pay off. She was persistent to get to that mountain top. Too bad her husband had to have "proof" that she made it. I did like your photos.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you Susie. I am happy that you enjoyed reading it. :-)

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you deeply Frank. That compliment really meant a lot to me. I am glad that you loved and enjoyed the story so much.

      Kevin

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      Susie Lehto 2 years ago from Minnesota

      Victory Mountain, I like that. Well done, Kevin.

      I enjoyed reading your story about the woman in the pic.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Examiner you know the passage through the creative mind.. love the story.. love the written word.. and you gave the woman on the mountain-top purpose and meaning through your words...

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I am glad that you liked it Audrey.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      She did not bring enough food for supper and after that hike she was pretty hungry! I thank you for your compliment, vote 'and all that jazz' (lol) Kim.

      Kevin.

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Glad that I found this one today! And glad she made it to the top!

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      A woman's work is never done and yet...she will walk to the top of the mountains and still be back in time to cook supper. Great Job Kevin! V+ and all that jazz!

      Blessings,

      ~Kim

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I greatly thank you for the compliment Rachael, you really made my day. I am happy that you enjoyed it. :-)

      Kevin

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      Rachael O'Halloran 2 years ago from United States

      Kevin, this is one of the better entries I have read to Bill's "mountaintop" challenge. You completed this challenge well as did your subject in attaining the mountaintop.

      I love the homespun way you told this story and your ending gives a perfect picture to the reader. Well done :)

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you very much for the compliment Billy because when I looked at my creative writing myself I could not seem to see it. I did not know about a positive message because one was not intended, so I did not pick up on it. Thank you again for the compliment.

      Last I looked this is still pending but as soon as it is featured I am starting on "Door to Nowhere".

      Kevin

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Kevin, I think you've got some talent with creative writing. I loved this...I love the positive message, something we need more of in society today...thank you for taking on this challenge. Well done!

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I am pleased that you liked it Ruby. :-) Yes, when we decide and aim for it anything can be accomplished, especially if we plan ahead for it. A healthy diet is good for many things.

      I thank you for your vote and Tweet too.

      Have a nice week.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Yes, it is a good feeling Ann. Sometimes I achieve goals immediately but some take a little longer. I am glad that you loved it, :-), I did my best on it. For the two attempts - some do better than others.

      I like porch swings too. We had one in previous house.

      When I took on Bill's challenge, I read several others first. I told him last night in a comment that I was starting another of his challenges after this was published.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I appreciate the congrats John. It took me a while to complete because I was slowly piecing it together, in between other things - HP, taxes, and more.

      Kevin

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I liked your story Kevin. It teaches us that anything can be accomplished if we plan ahead and keep trying. Her healthy diet was a plus which enabled her to reach the top. Voted up, Tweeted...

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      It does give us a good feeling when we achieve a goal, doesn't it? Love the story including the sensible advice about preparation. She did well to do it in two attempts; it would've taken me days!

      I love porch swings - such a gentle way to relax in the evening.

      Great response to Bill's challenge, Kevin.

      Ann

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Congratulations on completing this challenge Kevin. Glad she made it to the top and took photos so her husband would believe her.