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pals (full stop, comma, space)

Updated on December 11, 2015

when we deliberate full stops among ourselves
won't let commas to mediate us
and not give ourselves, the following spaces
we thus go down at destructive pace

Left with mouthful of signs
guilt ridden relations
widened spaces
we live likes strangers

sharing commas
that follow spaces
is what it takes to be pals.

say no to full stops

do you listen or speak more?

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Pals

© 2015 Hari Prasad S

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      Hari Prasad S 11 months ago from Bangalore

      Thank you north for appreciating. You comments are valuable to all.

      - hari

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      north 11 months ago

      A wonderful theme based on caring n cosy relation with a sense of maturity to nurture the importance of everyone with whom we share any attachment. Thought provoking msg conveyed by you hari ji for the entire society. Thanks

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      Hari Prasad S 14 months ago from Bangalore

      Listening and understanding nature in any person is an asset. Thank you sir for you comments.

      - Hari

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      Vishnu 14 months ago

      Ganesha has two big ears and one mouth.Listening and that too supportive listening is best commn skill.

      Great subject of this poetry,Hari

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thank you so much genna. Enjoy.

      - hari

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      Genna East 17 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

      This poem is unique, powerful and quite clever. Well done. :-)

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thanks sakshi. Happy you liked it and enjoyed the hidden meaning. I wanted to write something about giving space but ended up writing on it in a cryptic form.

      I had fun too in writing it. wondered if it will be ever read and understood. Not any-more now, that i have so many feedbacks.

      Thanks for your comments.

      - Hari

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thanks DDE for visiting.

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      Sakshi Davessar 17 months ago from Punjab, India

      Wow! amazing poem with a true hidden meaning

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      Devika Primić 17 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      I do listen to conversations. I like this poem.

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Nice lovely reply friend. :-)

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      Surabhi Kaura 17 months ago

      Hari bhai,

      I loved this poem. Our friendship is like Jai and Verru too (chuckle). Yes, let’s say no to full stops. Wonderful poem! Thumbs up!

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thanks shaloo for visiting and appreciating.

      - Hari

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      Shaloo Walia 17 months ago

      Interesting!

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thanks ruby. You are right. It has to be like that mutual and non exclusive. :-)

      - hari

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 17 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Yes, pals listen, that's what pals do. Cheers..

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thank you eric for your encouragement. I was afraid if it will be understood or not. I am happy this made its mark.

      - hari

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      Eric Dierker 17 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      You hit something very remarkable here. Well done.

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      Hari Prasad S 17 months ago from Bangalore

      Thanks manatita for visiting and encouraging comments.

      - hari

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      manatita44 17 months ago from london

      I can't play this interesting-looking video. It's too late. The message of the poem is exquisite and awesome. Great piece!

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