Fragility - A Poem By S.
Fragility
Trapped in a world
the product of my own bad decisions
judges laugh at me in derision
if life is a stage and we all play our part
I guess my life is a study in tragic art
but though I've stumbled and I've fell
I've picked my self up again
so you judges can all go straight to hell
sometimes I feel everyones out to try and break me
and God and my dog are the only ones who won't forsake me
I feel this life is a study in learning humility
a little delicate thing full of fragility
only fools think tommorow is forever
even though that can change any moment just like the weather
so those of you who deign to judge me
shove those judgments up your ass
because humans are as breakable as any glass.
Comments
Voted this up for passion, not content...A rant-poem passionately expressed but poetically deficient...
I know, I know, I can shove my judgement up my ass...But if you put it out there, you have to be ready for criticism, good and bad... Tighten up the dialogue, use metaphor, and stay away from the contrived rhyming...But keep the passion...Larry
I think i know how you must feel, thank goodness bad day's pass.
Cheers
Christopher, the passion and angst in your poem is palpable and you did well expressing it. I think many of us have been there and can relate. Could be better? Sure, but so can mine and every other poem here on HubPages. Keep writing from you heart and your passion and you will do well. Voted up and interesting.
This is another great poem by S. Tell S. I say hi! I had a good laugh at this because I have been there and I know how it feel. It just make me think back at my own experience. I vote up, beautiful and awesome! ^_^
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i do these poems to express not to impress anyone but thanks critics anyway ha ha ha - S.
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@Chanroth - Thank you for your encouragement! -S.
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