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got rained on first

Updated on August 14, 2013


Bagged drugs littered the ground,

and the dealer was laying face down,

on a basketball court

at the housing project,

everything came to a halt,

his torso covering the loaded

9MM Colt,

he never had a chance to use it,

it was a gang hit,

the gun was cocked,

with a live round in the chamber,

his drug world was rocked,

someone was looking for him,

and he was looking for someone,

what’s done is done,

he couldn’t fight back or run,

it was a killing thirst,

but the drug dealer

got rained on first.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Good to see you again thelyricwriter glad you stopped by

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      Richard Ricky Hale 6 years ago from West Virginia

      Up, awesome, and interesting votes. Great poetry. Very dramatic. Sadly, I am sure this happens a lot. Perfect title pick Frank. Another awesome poem.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Evening Sue and thank you for stopping by the projects :)

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      Sueswan 6 years ago

      Hi Frank

      "it was a killing thirst,

      but the drug dealer

      got rained on first."

      I wonder how many deaths he was responsible for. Payback time.

      Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Sue that means a lot coming from you.. hey.. is that a Haiku?

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      Susan Zutautas 6 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Someone was going to die this day. Sad though. Great write Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      LOL thanks so much sofs :) as we use to say in the projects.. get your grim on LOL

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      sofs 6 years ago

      Grim tale skillfully told. Great narrative poetry here Frank.. now I want to write some too :) Have a wonderful day :)

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much time to write:) always good to see you.. and VG thank you for the continued visits you are one of the tops.. and Epi man.. when it comes to great work look at your own.. :) it is you that inspire..:)

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      epigramman 6 years ago

      ...always love your writing Frank - it inspires the epi-man greatly and I often come away from here wanting to write one of my own because of you - got rained on first is a great title and I first heard the expression in a song 'Small change got 'rained on' by his own '38' by one of my favorite songwriters Tom Waits. A big influence on my writing and another great one too - Warren Zevon.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 6 years ago from Nepal

      It is a sad reality that many young people do drugs and they fall into crime.

      Happy New Year my friend

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      time2rite 6 years ago

      Wow, Frank, you've done it again: took a story and turned it into a great poem; awesome! It's raw and gritty...I really like it!

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      Frank Atanacio 6 years ago from Shelton

      Happy New Years to all you guys.. thanks for reading Writer20, Sky, Justateacher, Ms Brooks, Senoritaa, Audrey, and Racinawa.. Poetic Fool ..bless you all!

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      Rinita Sen 6 years ago

      Well.. not going to hit a moral comment on how much the drug dealer deserved this sticky end, but the way you write it surely depicts the scene as if I am standing right there, watching his body that lies in a pool pf blood.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 6 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Mr. Frank another great poem... sad but great..always love you writing.

      I voted up and awesome

      Happy wonderful and safe New year...

      Debbie

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      raciniwa 6 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      you'll reap what you sow...if you have lived your life at gun point then you'll also die from it...this is a very wonderful poem Frank that people need to reflect upon...

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      Audrey Howitt 6 years ago from California

      I agree--gritty write--I love that about this piece!

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      Poetic Fool 6 years ago

      Frank, another awesome, gritty write. If you live by the sword, you die by the sword ...

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      LaDena Campbell 6 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      Great poem...just had some gang violence in our neighborhood and it, too, was all because of drugs...

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      Sky9106 6 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Ha hA he is toast, probably made the most of his time . No way !

      Love when you put it together that way because it's a reminder that you will reap what you sow.

      Another thriller brethren Frank.

      Great poem with your twist.

      Bless.

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      Joyce Haragsim 6 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Great sad poem.

      Happy New Year to you my friend.

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