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/Ha-le-ween/

Updated on September 18, 2015

The table rocked and rocked, with one side of it dipping so low Sonia thought it was going to topple over. The table suddenly came to a stop, giving the six girls sitting at it a moment's rest. Glancing at each other, Sonia saw that all concerned looked worried and terrified.

“I don't like this,” said Abby. “I think we should stop.”

“No,” Jaime chimed in. “We made contact with the dead, we can't just cut it off now.”

“I don't like this either,” said Clair to no one in particular.”I think we should just stop.”

“Lets go around the table and vote,” said Sonia.

They voted and four said continue, and two said stop. So they continued.

The girls started again and during the middle of their chanting Abby's heart was in her throat, beating so quickly it made her cough. Everything had changed suddenly, the room, the tone, the chants, the girls. She found herself in a dark long corridor with so many doors. Then came the high pitched screams, and the walls started to come closer together. Then she heard a distinct sound of buzzing coming from behind the doors.

Abby was allergic to bee stings so she started running away from the buzzing. The doors flew open and white faced hornets filled the hallway like smoke. The buzzing was so loud it drowned out her screaming and everything just went dark.

The table rocked and rocked, with one side of it dipping so low Sonia thought it was going to topple over. The table suddenly came to a stop, giving the five girls sitting at it a moment's rest.

“Something came through this time, I swear it grabbed my arm,” said Clair. “Damn, we got to stop.”

“No,” said Sonia. “Lets find out what it wants.”

“I think we can get it to tell us who he or she is,” said Jamie.

Curiosity burrowed into their conscience as the five girls started the chanting again, holding hands and swaying from side to side.

How did you die? Where you murdered? Was it violent?

Clair was free falling into a dark abyss. She couldn't catch her breath as she picked up speed, and everything around her was disappearing upwards. Then the darkness deliberately punished her body as she continued falling into nothingness. Finally death carved its mark on the young girl's body and she just vanished into the waiting arms of darkness.

The table rocked and rocked, with one side of it dipping so low Sonia thought it was going to topple over. The table suddenly came to a stop, giving the four girls sitting at it a moment's rest.

“I saw a shadow!” Jamie screamed.

“Friendly?” Sonia asked.

“I think so,” she replied excitedly. “Lets do it again, I want to ask it to reveal itself!”

“Okay,” Sonia smiled. “Lets do it.”

Jamie was showing patience as she smiled brightly as the seance began. Mid-night was near and October 31st was coming to an end. Jamie was tied to a metal chair. Her mouth was gagged and the heat was turned way up. It was indeed the Fall, but it felt like an August heat in the desert. Ghosts were curious in a morbid way. One of them pointed to a coagulated red pool of blood on the wooden floor.

The heat was too much for Jamie to take. She ripped through the restraints screaming with her forearms extended both palms covered in blood. Her head was spinning and the heat increased as she fell to the floor. She slowly looked up and saw the devil standing over her. He was the heat, and he had a hold of her. It was such a tight hold that she couldn't do anything but give in to his darkness.

The table rocked and rocked, with one side of it dipping so low Sonia thought it was going to topple over. The table suddenly came to a stop, giving the three girls sitting at it a moment's rest.......

© 2015 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

      okay sujaya.. don't know what you're trying to say, but thanks for popping by

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      sujaya venkatesh 23 months ago

      a season though

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      Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

      LOL, funny tillsontitan and thanks for giving this a read bless you:)

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      Mary Craig 23 months ago from New York

      This one is simply put, great! One by one these naive girls messed with the supernatural. Did they continue till they were all gone or did they get the picture?

      Perfect for Halloween or any time you want to be scared.

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      Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton

      LOL thank you so much Missy :)

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      Missy Smith 24 months ago from Florida

      Well, this was so intriguing. Were all these girls in a trance? My goodness, never realizing that one by one they were disappearing, or either too enthralled they couldn't stop. That damn devil!! lol... Great story to read right near Halloween!!

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      Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by aviannovice

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      Deb Hirt 24 months ago from Stillwater, OK

      And one by one they go to their ends. What a game of Russian roulette!

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      Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton

      thanks B Brian for visiting, Ill be sure to stop over and return the favor :) Frank

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      B Brian Hill 24 months ago

      That devil be everywhere! Very engaging piece!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      well annart, thank you for visiting anyways.. bless you

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Brilliant, Frank! Creepy version of 'ten green bottles'!

      I don't like Halloween at all; it's a gift from the US that I don't appreciate. Sorry to be a kill-joy but going round knocking on lone people's houses just doesn't do it for me. I don't believe in stirring up spirits either; dangerous thing.

      Having said all that, there's nothing wrong with writing a superb story about it and this is certainly one of those! I liked the rhythm of the 'refrain'. Well done, Frank!

      Ann

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Dana Tate, MsDora and Always exploring... thank you so much for reading my Halloween bless you guys :) Frank

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Then there was three! Chilling to the bone. This line rocked, " Vanished into the waiting arms of darkness. " BOO.

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      Frank, you scare me. "I don't like this. I think [they] should stop." Hope the three who are left can move.

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      Dana Tate 2 years ago from LOS ANGELES

      Wow! It leaves me wondering what's going to happen next. Messing around with spirits is no joke- Thanks for sharing.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Eric, Billybuc and Chris for stopping by and visiting my Halloween :)

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      Christos Antonaros 2 years ago from Athens, Greece

      As always a very good job! One more lovely hub frank! I enjoyed reading it!

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I see dead people.......oh, wait, I am dead people....oooooohhhhh!

      One constant in life....your stories will always entertain.

      bill

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Fear of bees, fear of fire, fear of falling. Ghosts within us all. You are a devious and treacherous writer my friend. I don't need no stinking seance I get scared like that just brushing my teeth. Thank you for a truly excellent read.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Good morning. and thank you pstraubie bless you

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      Patricia Scott 2 years ago from sunny Florida

      O my...shivers up my spine....been here, done this...making ourselves believe in the mystery and marveling at all we could 'conjur' up!!!

      You made me get lost in that time once again :D

      Angels are headed your way this morning ps

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      500.. wow I know. Faith ... I don't think Sonia remembers which girl came to the séance dear one..:O

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Flourish and Jodah for stopping by this page bless you

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Congrats on 500 Hubs! Wow, dear Frank, that is awesome.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Ah ...how creative and clever of you, Frank ...with the repeated lines and then the girls dropping off one by one. Seems Sonia was enjoying it a bit too much, even after the disappearances : )

      There is a lesson to be learned here in not inviting the spirits, as they will surely come!

      Thank you for getting us in the mood for this spooky time of year.

      Again, creative, clever and perfect writing.

      Sharing everywhere

      Blessings

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Scary stuff Frank..those girls shouldn't play around with spirits, especially not on Halloween. I enjoyed this tale.

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Very creepy and just in time for my favorite time of year,

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      I believe you Clive :) thanks for visiting

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      frank...i must admit ....i am a ghost too.........ok just kidding. Nice and creepy frank, nice and creepy

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Genna east for reading my Halloween :)

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Ooooh...and Halloween (which I love), is just around the corner. First there were 6; then 4; then.... Talk about playing with fire. Timely, chilling, frightening, and terrific, Frank.