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naked and crying

Updated on May 5, 2012

Her knees on the forest floor, she clutches her arms gasping for breath. Abandoned and alone, she searches the floor randomly for bits and pieces. Anything that he may have left behind. It wasnt his decision to leave but he had no choice. And almost as soon as he was there, he was gone again. She cries out desperately for anyone, anything to hear her. Digging her hands deep into the earth looking for...for what? Only she knew. Only the severly alone could know. Nothing. Nothing was there. Crying out again, she grabs the first sharp thing she sees, a broken stone. Like a mad hatter she starts slicing at her legs and arms. As soon as the blood starts to surface her skin, she breathes a sigh of relief. You know your alone when your doing anything to feel anything again. Out of the corner of her eye, she sees a soft glowing ball of light. Something inside her tells her to move towards it, but she is frozen. Wondering what would be worse, the hell she is in, or the extacy she chances to loose if indeed she does catch the light. Overwhelmed by fear, and risking loss again, she stands on shaken limbs and begins to run. The closer she becomes to the light, the more it dances and teases her, almost as if to say that she would never catch it. Never hold it in her hands. Never find out what made her long to be close to it. She falls down and scraps an already self inflicted wound on a fallen branch. She looks up fearing that the light is gone, but it remains. She is closer. Steadying herself, she begins again to move towards it. Breathing heavily, and half limping half running, she makes it. The ball of light floats like a feather down onto the soft moss at her feet. Once again she kneels down onto the forrest floor. She nervously reaches out her arms and picks up the ball of light, cradleing it in her hands. She screams without breath. Every feeling that could possibly be felt shoots through her soul. She cries, she laughs, she feels anger, fear, resentment and finally love. Love like no one else has ever allowed themseles to feel for anyone or anything. Not in this lifetime. The feelings slowly leave her almost in a trance. And thats when she hears it. She is not alone. She doesnt think that he might have returned, she doesnt think that maybe its someone that sould help her. She doesnt even worry that she is naked and alone with nothing to protect her. The one thought, the only thought she has it that she needs to hide the light.


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    • CM Sullivan profile image

      CM Sullivan 5 years ago from California

      This is something so wonderfully personal and a part of your inside brought outside. That makes it even better. It makes me feel something about myself too, that is another reason I like it so much.

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      Nikki John 5 years ago from USA

      Interesting post, Nicely written and the pictures which you have added in it, is awesome.

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      Nikki Wicked 5 years ago from Louisiana

      Interesting read... kinda all botched together but I liked the story. Its that feeling of almost giving up, feeling that it is hopeless, but somewhere deep within your soul screams at you to keep going. You have plenty of heart and soul my girl, and that light is yours for the taking.

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      the pink umbrella 5 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      I kind of like the idea of these standing alone. Theres a self assured romance to the mystery of it all. The frustration of not knowing what happens next for me is so much better than the finality of an ending.

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      BeyondMax 5 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      Cool, really captivating and you always great at painting pictures with your words, very expressive, passionate like your poems, love it! Do you think you will write the sequel or leave it a mysterious stand alone? It's a high definition dream, impressive!

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      sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

      Hi Pink'Um: You had me from the title on the notification list and held my rapt attention throughout. I love your depyh and ability to express it. My mind is filled with questions which demand a sequel. I want to know this character and her story. Great work.

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      the pink umbrella 5 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      Thank you tiny noise. It was fighting to get out of me

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      tiny noise 5 years ago

      I felt this story in this pit of my stomach, which I love. Powerful!

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Really suspenseful wrting, had me caught up as well. Sounds as if it could be continued? Up!

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      Leaderofmany 5 years ago from Back Home in Indiana

      I was very caught up from the first few words and could not stop reading. I was drawn into and right there in the woods. Awesome and great work.

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      the pink umbrella 5 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      I dont expect this to get amazing reviews, but it came from the deepest part of me.