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Do We Have the Real Killer?

Updated on June 13, 2015

This story is a continuation of Frank Atanacio's "A Different Type of Torture". He offered us a challenge, if we wanted to accept, told us the terms and asked us to write a 'Part II' of his story - after we read his beginning. Above is the link to Part I of the story.

I chose to accept this and below is the story which I wrote, "Do We have the Real Killer?".

Dedicated to Frank Atanacio

This was written for Frank to choose for his story ending.

Here is the "Part II" which I have written to accept your challenge Frank, and you wanted to see whether I could do it. :-)

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Detective Laura Kimber was a top detective who worked at a police station in the city of Bridgeport which happens to be in Connecticut. Usually she handled cases with the 2nd level Detective, Nathan Chambers. He needed to pass one more test to become the same level as her. Because of this, Chambers sat at the desk that was back-to-back with Kimber’s.

They were both working at their desks – Chambers was writing an important report and Kimbers was only looking on her PC - when the chief walked up to Laura. “Kimbers”, he inquired, “Are you still looking at the arson cases?” “You bet we are! Chief.”, she replied. “Good”, said Chief Birmingham, “This call just came in.” He handed her the address.

She got up and grabbed her purse, “Come on Chambers. We have another arson crime scene. We almost have this killer, maybe this one will bring us a lot closer to him or her. Although I think it is a him.”

“As soon as I finish this report and hand it in, I will meet you there.”, he said. Laura scribbled the address onto another piece of paper and gave it to him. “Meet me at this address ASAP. I will be waiting”, she said.

Detective Laura Kimber was the first on the scene, as always, and had already observed the scene when Detective Nathan Chambers pulled up. He walked in and they exchanged ‘Hellos’, then he asked, “What happened?”

Det. Kimber replied, “It is our friendly sadistic arsonist killer again. This one has the same M.O. as the last time. Nothing is different.”…pause…Then instinctively, she carefully unwrapped part of the tarp which the victim was wrapped in. “Wait, look at this.”

“What?” he inquired, looking at where she was pointing. “I do not get it”, he said.

She replied, “This time he used something similar to aluminum foil on the inside of the tarp, he very likely may have left fingerprints on the shiny part. I am having the fingerprint team go over the ‘mirror-like inside’ very carefully. I have a strong feeling they will find something, and I will have them tell me immediately.

After telling the print team to dust it, she said, “I will drink coffee and wait here”, Laura said. Fifteen minutes later one of them replied, “We have something.”

Det. Kimber took the prints back to her desk and told Nathan, “They found prints which could be either the killers or the victims.” She sat down and began searching on her computer to find out. About an hour later, she found a name. “Hey, Chambers, where are the victim’s name and prints from this crime scene?”…(he handed her the folder)...”Thanks”. She looked and told him that it was not a match, so they were the killer's prints – Robert Greenley. “We finally have him, at least his name. Let us go get him.”

When Greenley walked in to the police station, he asked for Sgt. Williams. He told the Sgt. about the killings in detail and said that he was not that type of guy. The Sgt. was dumbfounded because he had not heard about anything similar to them in the area. Greenley was told that he would be talking to a psychologist, Dr. Samuels. Robert noticed that he was sweating heavily and he wondered why. Then he woke and remembered the dream, and what it was about. He relaxed.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Hi Kevin,

      So glad you have joined in Frank's challenge here! What a great ending you have come up with, very interesting indeed. I love that thumbprint photo too, very appropriate.

      I hope I am able to participate too, but not sure at the moment with my time here of late being what it has been.

      Voted up +++ and away

      Blessings always

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Examiner.. you pulled it the way I would have done it.. I like the way you kept my characters on top of things and i like the Cold Case Type feel throughout the whole story.. Bravo my friend :)

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Great angle. I'm looking forward to reading all those who've taken up this challenge. Well done, Kevin.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Well done Kevin! It was only a dream, creative, I liked the ending. Funny how we went in different directions but that's what makes it so much fun. Tweeted..

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      Eric Boyd 2 years ago

      I read another piece just the other day and this is day and night but both well done. Kudos for the entertainment EB

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Kevin, Loved it, well done!

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you very much for your comment, Faith. I accepted his challenge because I can very rarely turn one down. I am glad that you liked it so much. I was hoping that the print was the appropriate one.

      I very much hope that you do get time to join us. :-)

      Thank you for your votes, no matter where they go.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you very much Frank. I have read mysteries, suspense, fantasy, a few sci-fi. I have watched N.C.I.S, Matlock, crime dramas, cop shows, Perry Mason... I could not resist the challenge and I wanted to make the story as mysterious as possible.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you Ann, I am glad that read it and liked it. :-)

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I thank you Ruby. I tried to leave the ending as a mysterious surprise for everyone. :-) I have to look and see how many others have entered, yesterday was one. Thank you for the tweet. Have a nice day.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you for reading and liking it Eric, and you are welcome for the entertainment. :-)

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you very much Jo! I am glad that you read it and liked it. :-)

      Kevin

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      Judy Specht 2 years ago from California

      Dog gone it,Kevin, you draw me into this and added Burn Notice to boot.

      Awesome!

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I bow to thee madam, and I thank you for what what you have said. I am very happy that you enjoyed it. :-)

      Kevin

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      I liked it Kevin. Interesting turn and to the point. ^+

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Interesting take Kevin, well done. I guess I was late taking up the challenge because I didn't receive notification but better late than never, and my ending is also up and running. Like you I can't resist a challenge, especially from Frank who's stories are perfect for these additional ending challenges.

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Well done and a tribute to the greatness of Frank. The surprise ending was just that, a surprise!

      Voted up and interesting.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you Jackie. I wanted to make it interesting and also keep it to the point.

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you John, I tried to make it as interesting as I could since it is my first fiction story. Well, my second, I wrote my first one for the "Inner Writing Study". I would have answered sooner but I was working on getting it re-featured all morning.

      Frank's stories are perfect for these challenges. We will have to pay him back someday. lol

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I am grateful for your comment Mary and the surprise was just what I wanted. Plus I was showing Frank that there are two sides for me to write from.

      I thank you for your vote and I am glad that you were interested.

      Kevin

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      Mary Stanton 2 years ago

      Detective Kimber must really be pleased that they took her character and pushed the envelope. I am amazed how the endings are taken hold. I read them all this being my last I had to comment. This one was quick, but still did its job, so yes, I have to vote up and bravismo

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you very much Mary, I really appreciate the remark and the vote. That is some comment that you made.

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      Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago from Texas

      Kevin, this is very intriguing I am glad you left the ending open for someone to continue if one wishes. I have not read Frank's yet, but I will be reading it, when I am feeling better.

      Thumbs up, UAI and shared.

      Blessings dear friend

      Shyron

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      This is just like you, the hardest punch comes at the end. I like it.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you Shyron. You are the first one to mention it as an open ending; I will have to read it again.

      I hope that you are only feeling something in the area of a cold and that you feel better soon. Let nature be at your side!

      Kevin

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you very much Deb, I tried to keep the surprise a secret as long as I could. I am glad that you liked it!

      Kevin

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      Mike Jones 2 years ago

      its so good to read real writers taking on a difficult task and you've accomplished that great stuff man

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I thank you Mike. :-) Thank you for reading this.

      Have a nice day.

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      Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

      Great work Kevin I loved this ending and I am hoping to get involved in one of these challenges myself very soon. You are a great writer.

      Eddy.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thanks Eiddwen. I think that I may be writing more of these fiction stories on my own (without challenges).

      I am grateful for the compliments. :)

      I hope that you have a nice weekend too.

      Kevin

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 2 years ago from Lagos

      Very interesting angle to the story. I love the way you ended the story. I enjoyed reading this one too.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      Thank you for reading it Alexander, I appreciate your comments. I am glad that you enjoyed it and I thank you for stopping by.

      Have a nice day. :-)

      Kevin

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