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only debris hit the ground

Updated on June 19, 2013

First,

there was an exploding sound,

everyone looked around,

then the plane was going down,

the captain heard

his co-pilot utter a curse word,

but before he could take another breath,

and prepare himself for death,

the plane exploded in a cataclysm of light and sound,

and moments later,

only debris hit the ground.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      I always think of this happening when I fly. I try not to but it always creeps into my mind.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      same here Susan.. thanks for reading :)

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      Neat! You expressed it perfectly in a few words. The image reminds me of the TV series "Lost"

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      This is awesome.. you used such few words to fill my mind with so much drama and action. Great work. Be a blessing. Shalom!

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      I knew that you will prevail and create your own style of Haiku. I tell you what the reality of a plane crash would definitely help one, keep his head on the ground.

      Love this style.

      Now I need to know whether you had a Dream!

      Up and fly away with yhis beauty.

      Bless.

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      Fullerman5000 5 years ago from Louisiana, USA

      Such a powerful poem with just a few words. Great work. I really enjoyed this. Keep up the good writing.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you for reading Senoritaa.. and thanks for coming back to another one of my writes Shimmering dawn.. Sky I keep my feet on the ground my friend thanks for your comment and welcome fullerman5000 for sharing your comment bless you all :) Frank

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Descriptions so real that I saw the plane crash just before me.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much VG for stopping by :)

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      This is a great one Frank. Voted up and awesome my friend, Joyce

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      Cynthia B Turner 5 years ago from Georgia

      This was fabulously written! Unfortunately, great visual. It just reinforces my fear of flying....(which I'm constantly working on.) Oh, well :-)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Up, awesome, and interesting. Wow Frank, powerful poetry. It makes your heart jump for sure. Best wishes.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Oh my frank...great poem...but so sad because it happens all the time..voted up...have a great evening...debbie

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      This is such a scary moment for all people traveling.

      But, i think it was good that the pilot did not get to announce to the passengers. Fright would have caused more havoc amongst them all...in other words...not knowing that I am going to die is easier to accept death than knowing.

      btw...just a week back one of the flights of British Airways, accidentally turned on the recording stating that the flight is going to crash...lol

      later on the crew apologized for the accident and handed out apology letters :))

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      This is why I'm afraid of flying! Well, that and the pit bull body searches they do now...what fun. I'm impressed at how you conveyed such with so few words. Rock on!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Writer20

      and Cyndi10 and thelyricwriter..plus the beautiful Our Ms Brooks.. thank you Ruchira.. and you Poetvix you thank you all for reading my debris..bless you Frank

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      CrazyGata 5 years ago from Puerto Rico

      My former husband is an Air Traffic Controller. He tells me that he rather take a boat than a plane. Whenever he flies, is because he has no other choice.

      He says this is because he knows what goes on while the plane is on the air. Pilots mostly focus on take-offs and landings... in the meantime is the ATC or the auto-pilot doing the flying.

      He once showed me a map of the routes they have to memorize... I could go on.

      So yes, nice poem, I certainly saw it as a movie in my head. Voted up and if there was a scary button I'd press it.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for sharing your little bit of bio Cat.. and thank you for reading my debris bless you :)

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      whew...the image leaves an imprint in my mind...you have a way of creating vivid images in your readers' mind Frank...

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      Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Wow Frank-this was quite a statement here! Powerful images in a few short lines. And, who of us have not thought of those final thoughts in that final, 'exploding', moments of our lives-be it plane or other...

      Thanks for sharing-voted up and awesome.

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      First,...and last. Another cementing of your power to tell a story in a poem Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Raci for commenting on my Debris.. and you too Denise Handlon and of course who can forget the wagon master Alastar Packer thanks for reading bless you all :)

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank,

      This one has great impact. I think most people are a little aprehensive when they fly.

      I had a dream a few years ago. I was at work and looking out the window when I saw a plane explode and vanish into thin air.

      Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      wow bad dream..but Sue thanks for reading my debris :)

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      P. Thorpe Christiansen 5 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

      Powerful as I have come to expect from you. I have never flown--this is among the reasons why! That, and I am a coward! LOL

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for the comment duffsmom LOL :) Frank

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      Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

      Wow... it reminds me of that space shuttle that came apart when it tried to return to earth.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Oh yeah nice Phoebs :) thanks for stopping by

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      H C Palting 5 years ago from East Coast

      I enjoyed this poem but vow to not think of it when I fly.

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      Frank Atanacio 12 months ago from Shelton

      Express10 flying is still the safest way to travel :)

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      Harish Mamgain 12 months ago from India

      Frank, so bold and straight ! A simple stark truth dazzles too hard, but it's life and its turns.

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      Frank Atanacio 12 months ago from Shelton

      Thank you Harish :)

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      CrisSp 12 months ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

      You know, I am an emergency specialist at 37 thousand feet right? But, even if I am, it'll be hard for me to stop this from happening, even if your script is only a metaphor.

      Awesome write.

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      Frank Atanacio 12 months ago from Shelton

      thank you for sharing CrisSp.. :)

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