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Poem - Dancing Leaves

Updated on April 28, 2012

Dancing Leaves



dancing leaves in a grand waltz wind

little vortices of symmetry

sway my way

as I escape the mundane world

along an October path of yellows and browns

I am lost in the hypnotic swirl of colour

the green of the leaf sacrificed

to the march of autumn gold


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I am getting the too short message with this poem, jeez it's a short poem folks..


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      Paul Edmondson 10 years ago from Burlingame, CA

      Beautiful and Well said.

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      des donnelly 10 years ago from NYC....

      ...now would be good time to talk Official.. grin...

      Drax

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      Olivia 10 years ago

      Beautiful picture and really nice!

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      des donnelly 10 years ago from NYC....

      thank you Olivia...

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      TiffanyK 8 years ago

      That was so buituful and i am writeing a poem to hope you like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

      Fall Leaves Fall Flowers away

      Do you think you could help me with the rest? Please help cell phone 7123108073

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      des donnelly 8 years ago from NYC....

      Hey Tiffany thanks, I have very poor connectivity right now but when I'm back in civilisation I will...

      Thanks again Drax

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      EYES CHAMbERS 7 years ago

      Love love love the last two lines. Very nice. I liked it. Sometimes short and simple can be so much more enjoyable.

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      des donnelly 7 years ago from NYC....

      thanks very much Eyes... I like short poems to try and capture events that are self contained and anyone reading it can just get it without having to spend half a day wondering what was it about... Drax...

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      broteem 7 years ago from KHARAGOUR

      Beautifully composed.

      I, too, love to get lost 'in the hypnotic swirl of colour'

      when the green of the leaf is sacrificed to the march of autumn gold.

      Congrats!

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      des donnelly 7 years ago from NYC....

      Hi Broteem, thanks very much for the nice comment.. :-)

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      Vicki 6 years ago

      Hi Drax :)

      love your poems, they really do talk to you.

      well done, fan dabby dozey work ;)

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      des donnelly 6 years ago from NYC....

      Hi Vicki

      thanks very much lovely of you to say... :-)

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      Great imagery and gun-toting women. What's not to like?

      Green sacrificed for gold on a white altar cloth -sounds like a nice design for a flag to me. Cheers.

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      des donnelly 6 years ago from NYC....

      sligobay... that design did not work so well, better to have went with the Starry Plough..

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      lafamillia 5 years ago from Soutcentral Europe

      Beautifully, vote up and keep it writing like this. You surely have it.

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      des donnelly 5 years ago from NYC....

      Hi lafamillia... thank you, it is kind of you to say so... and it is great to receive a positive comment such as this... :-)

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Awesome poem. I am not sure I understand the picture even though the pic is definitely provocative. Also, I can relate to the "too short" message, but a poem has a life-the ultimate goal is to say a lot in as few a words as possible-and yet one does seem to get the HP warning if the piece does not meet the HP word count rule-which I am still trying to decipher. Voted UP!

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      des donnelly 3 years ago from NYC....

      @ocfireflies... thanks for vote up.. the photo - if you watch leaves blowing in the wind inevitably gravity brings them back to the ground so they tend to swirl and twirl down low... this photo made me think of leaves as almost an enemy invading, hence the 'reception committee' :-)

      ..this is from 6 years ago and now HB tends more towards complete articles that have a particular word count, this is the evolution of the medium and I guess poetry perhaps needs special consideration..

      Thanks Drax

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Now I get it. Very cool. Are you aware of any other sites where poetry is still loved?

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      des donnelly 3 years ago from NYC....

      @ocfireflies... I think over the longer term it is good to build awareness of a site that the writer owns since social networks can be used to generate direct traffic and interest, poetry is loved everywhere :-)

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