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Poetry: The Sorceress Is Mean

Updated on April 28, 2014

The Sorceress Is Mean

My poem is a narrative of the tale “Rapunzel” as originally written by Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm in the 1812 edition of Children’s and Household Tales.

Section 1

There once was a man and a woman,

Not Adam and Eve, but instead nosy neighbors, you see,

Who stared at the beautiful garden kept beyond their back fence.

It was the mean Sorceress who owned the garden patch,

And the woman moaned that rapunzel she did want to catch

As her longing to eat the plant grew immense.

The woman became ill,

Wanting to eat the rapunzel and more than her fill,

So her husband jumped fence, as would many gents,

To nab the plants for his hungry lady.

She ate and she ate,

And another night as it grew late,

The man snuck back into the garden as the sky grew shady.

Not a gardener around, it was the Sorceress who found

Him there the second time around.

Quite angry was she, as well she should be,

And the Sorceress explained the terms in which he would be bound.

Pick more rapunzel, she explained, as much as you want,

But in return she will take the first child they will make.

Beautiful garden.
Beautiful garden. | Source

Section 2

Agreed, said the man, no document at hand,

And so when the child was born the Sorceress did take her away.

The baby was named Rapunzel, and when the age of twelve came,

Placed into a tall tower was the young dame.

A small window on top the tower, meant very little power,

Though Rapunzel let down her golden hair

For the Sorceress to climb up and visit her there.

One day a king’s son heard Rapunzel’s sweet voice

As she sang a melody of her own special choice.

He could not reach her there, for lack of a door he was aware,

Until he learned the line for Rapunzel to let down her fine hair.

Up there he did climb, the strands much like a vine, to see

Poor Rapunzel who was scared, as she felt unprepared.

He said he liked her voice, and her husband he did want to be,

But she had no way down, now didn’t he see?

Each night, she decided, he will bring her one strand of silk

Which she will use to weave a ladder once all this she has gathered.

Long golden hair.
Long golden hair. | Source

Section 3

One day she mentioned the prince to the Sorceress, a serious mistake,

As the Sorceress did severely tremble and shake.

So furious was she that she cut off Rapunzel’s hair,

And sent her to the wilderness without even a care.

The poor prince, none the wiser, soon did appear,

The Sorceress tying Rapunzel’s cut strands and hung them down the rear.

He climbed up by his hands and once at the top,

Was told he will never see Rapunzel again, oh boy did he pop!

Oh his happiness did wane and heard were his cries

As he threw himself from the tower

And survived, but landed on thorns which blinded his eyes.

And so he wandered the forest for many years,

Before stumbling across Rapunzel who shed many tears.

As the two embraced, Rapunzel’s tears fell into each of his eyes,

His eyes they did clear like a bright summer sky.

Bravo, he could see again,

What a fairy-tale treat, indeed for the prince it had been no easy feat.

The two then went to his castle, where they were joyfully received,

And lived happily together with their hearts worn on their sleeves.

© 2012 Christy Birmingham

Castle. | Source

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    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      @Audrey, thank-you. I have read some of your poetry and enjoy your work as well!

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      Audrey Howitt 

      6 years ago from California

      What an entertaining piece--loved this!

    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      @tsmog, thank-you so much! I really did put such an effort into this poem. You are right that it would suit all age groups. I appreciate the kind comment.

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      Tim Mitchell 

      6 years ago from Escondido, CA

      What a fantastic read, Christy. I can't wait for the next one. If I was still reading at Barnes & Noble to the little ones, I think this is a very fine choice, indeed. Highly recommended and shared . . .


    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      @Olde Cashmere, Awe, thank-you! From a poet such as yourself the praise is great!

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      Olde Cashmere 

      6 years ago

      This was a wonderful read and you did a remarkable job with the poetry. Entertaining and engaging story, great work Christy. Voted up, shared, awesome, beautiful, and interesting :)

    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      @Rolly, thank-you. It was a fun poem to write!

    • Rolly A Chabot profile image

      Rolly A Chabot 

      6 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Hi Christy... great poem and well done like all you write...

      Hugs from Alberta

    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      How nice Vinaya to see you today. Thank-you for your kindness!

    • Vinaya Ghimire profile image

      Vinaya Ghimire 

      6 years ago from Nepal

      Old wine is a new bottle. I so much loved your narrative poem. Your choice of expressions, metaphors, similes, imagery all are wonderful.

    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I like poetry Lee so I am glad to hear this one was well received. I have not watched the series but I hear it is a good one. Thanks for your positivity!

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      6 years ago from Harlingen, Texas

      Very creative and imaginative Christy. Love Repunzel and all the Grimms. Have you seen the NBC television series Grimm? They did a modern day version of this. Very good. Beautiful work. I loved the poem and the pics as well. I voted UP all across except for funny. Lee

    • ChristyWrites profile imageAUTHOR

      Christy Birmingham 

      6 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      Thanks Debbie! As I really enjoyed your poem this means a lot to me. Take care.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 

      6 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      this is a great story and hub.. love it Christy what a great job.

      voted way up



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