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A new version of "Cinderella" -- What if she had a GOOD stepmother?

Updated on July 28, 2016

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WHY I WROTE THIS STORY

Here's why I decided to write my own version of the Cinderella story, a version that gives Cinderella a kind and good stepmother.

I married a man who already had two children (we've also had two babies together since then). I try my best to be a loving and caring stepmom. But have you ever heard a fairy tale where the word "stepmother" was NOT preceded by the word "wicked"? Neither had I. So I decided that it was about time, and I made one myself!

Of course, doing a rewrite of Cinderella meant changing other elements of the story. If the stepmother and stepsisters weren't mean, then where would the conflict come from? So instead of internal family strife, I went for a strong family working together to face an uncaring, class-biased society.

I had a lot of fun writing this revision, and I hope you have fun reading it.

Overview of stepmothers in fairy tales

Here's an excerpt from the Wikipedia article on blended families:

"The character of the wicked stepmother features heavily in fairy tales; the most famous examples are Cinderella, Snow White, and Hansel and Gretel. Stepdaughters are her most common victim, and then stepdaughter/stepson pairs, but stepsons also are victims as in The Juniper Tree-sometimes, as in East of the Sun and West of the Moon, because he refused to marry his stepsister as she wished, or, indeed, they may make their stepdaughters-in-law their victims, as in The Boys with the Golden Stars. In some fairy tales, such as Giambattista Basile's La Gatta Cennerentola or the Danish Green Knight, the stepmother wins the marriage by ingratiating herself with the stepdaughter, and once she obtains it, becomes cruel."

ONE fairy tale with a good stepmother!

Again quoting Wikipedia:

"The Icelandic fairy tale The Horse Gullfaxi and the Sword Gunnfoder features a good stepmother, who indeed aids the prince like a fairy godmother, but this figure is very rare in fairy tales."

These comments are old, from back when the full story was on this page. I just didn't want to delete them.

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      Robert Sacchi 21 months ago

      An interesting variation of the original story. There was a made for TV movie that was a modern version of Cinderella where the stepmother wasn't evil. In this version the stepsisters were stinkers though.

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      Charito Maranan-Montecillo 2 years ago from Manila, Philippines

      What a beautiful version of "Cinderella"! Like you, I would now and then imagine how the fairy tale would turn out if the stepmom and her daughters were kind and caring. I agree that in real life, many stepmoms are not the slightest bit wicked.

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      dellgirl 3 years ago

      I'm so glad I stopped by here, this is really beautiful! I enjoyed visiting and reading your version of Cinderella. Thanks for sharing this.

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      AskPat 4 years ago

      Truly a great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

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      Tolovaj Publishing House 5 years ago from Ljubljana

      Did you know there are older versions of Cinderella, where she kills her stepmother? There are more than three thousand versions of this timeless fairy tale known in the world and we are still counting. thanks for bringing up another dimension!

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      alex89 lm 5 years ago

      This was a fun story, I only meant to browse, and I couldn't stop reading!

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      GypsyLyric LM 5 years ago

      What a delightful story. This was just the break I needed this afternoon, thank you!!

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      Johanna Eisler 5 years ago

      The story was delightful! I read it aloud to my husband, then watched him wipe away tears. For some reason, the Cinderella story always touches his heart. The accompanying music was perfect. Thank you.

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      Joan Hall 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      @ecogranny: Thank you much! Cindy is delighted to have some new bling to go with the fancy shoes!

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      Kathryn Grace 5 years ago from San Francisco

      Congrats on your purple star! Well deserved.

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      yayas 5 years ago

      What a delightful story! I've always wondered why someone didn't write a story with a Good stepmother. You did very well. Thank you. You've renewed my faith in authors. Not to mention,.. I jus' KNEW there could be good stepmothers.

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      Rose Jones 5 years ago

      I am so pleased to see that this lens seems to have developed a life of its own - it deserves it!

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      asvadwords 5 years ago

      wow... awesome... nice history you changed to make it a book...

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      JZinoBodyArt 5 years ago

      I love it and all of the subtle changes, especially at the end! :D

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      cleanyoucar 5 years ago

      Nice twist, maybe you can start a new book on this =)

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      anonymous 5 years ago

      A new twist on an old tale... Nicely done.

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      fullofshoes 5 years ago

      I like your style :)

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      LAfamily 5 years ago

      I Like this story mom

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      bakingoutsidethebox 5 years ago

      Charming and well written. Best wishes for a happy future!

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      anonymous 5 years ago

      Nice story

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      anonymous 5 years ago

      i love this story

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      anonymous 5 years ago

      Great story - fun lens.

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      Missy Zane 5 years ago

      I love this. Love the pink, love the story. What great before-bed reading...

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      Eddie20112011 5 years ago

      excellent!

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      toldyaso lm 5 years ago

      This is one of my favorite lens! I love pink, I love fairy tales, love, love LOVE!!! :)

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      Treasures By Brenda 5 years ago from Canada

      As others have said, great job, interesting story, well presented.

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      Linda Pogue 5 years ago from Missouri

      Blessings! This is a wonderful story!

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      anonymous 5 years ago

      Love the idea of fairy tales with alternative endings. Great job!

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      miaponzo 5 years ago

      Yay!!!! happy ending :) Happy story! Blessed!

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      missericaleigh 5 years ago

      I love fairtales. Theres good lessons to be learned in them. And your version is no exception

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      BunnyFabulous 5 years ago from Central Florida

      Great story! I liked it a lot, and I liked that you made the stepsisters good in this one too.

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      Shana rios Chavez 5 years ago

      great story

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      Rhidawn 5 years ago

      I was hesistant at first, but I'm glad I read it. It's amazing. I absolutely loved it! Great job and great lens! Keep writing!

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      Julia Morais 5 years ago

      Hope to read more stories from you soon.

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      anonymous 5 years ago

      Very interesting

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      Frischy 5 years ago from Kentucky, USA

      I enjoyed your version very much and look forward to reading more of your fiction.

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      Edutopia 5 years ago

      That is an interesting take on an old tale. What a unique lens.

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      jadehorseshoe 5 years ago

      Ultra-Fine Lens!

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      marsha32 5 years ago

      I love your version :)

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      pheonix76 6 years ago from WNY

      Wonderful version of Cinderella! :)

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      sousababy 6 years ago

      My father constantly would change the ending of fairy tales. I think it is fabulous!

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      Kathryn Grace 6 years ago from San Francisco

      If there had been an "I love it!", I'd have picked that in the poll. What a beautiful reshaping of an old fairy tale. Is it available in book form? I'd buy a copy for every one of my grandchildren and one for myself.

      As for that glass slipper, even as a child, I questioned its wearability. Always knew it would break. Nice to know that in the original tale, that slipper was pure gold. But then, gold is soft. Could it withstand a night of dancing?

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      jlshernandez 6 years ago

      I love this CInderella story so much and one of my favorite fairy tales.

      You are such a gifted writer and should publish children's story books or ebooks. This was such a fun read( I did this at work because it distracted me) and I hope you write more of the same.

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      RitaDern 6 years ago

      Fun, Positive Stuff - thanks for sharing!

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      lemonsqueezy lm 6 years ago

      Wonderful!

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      lasertek lm 6 years ago

      I like the story very much.

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      Asinka Fields 6 years ago from Los Angeles, CA

      Very interesting ...

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      Lisa Auch 6 years ago from Scotland

      Fabulous story!

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      JenOfChicago LM 6 years ago

      What a great job on this adaptation!

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      MargoPArrowsmith 6 years ago

      I love changing stories like this, and you did an amazing job.

      Have you ever read Gregory Maguire? He wrote Wicked, the Wizard of Oz through the eyes of the Wicked Witch of the West, who wasn't so bad.

      Nice work.

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      spritequeen lm 6 years ago

      Great story! You're very talented! You should get it published in a book! (not just here)

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      BonnieSue55 6 years ago

      Joan,

      Have you considered publishing this as a kid's book? I think it would be great! If you would like to, you could even self-publish online, like at http://www.hulu.com or at http://www.wordclay.com. We need children to learn that being aware of other people around them, and the situations in which people live and work, can lead to having a caring heart and being able to have empathy for others. This story shows this and shares it as a natural order of things (for some personalities, which children can also learn from). I love it, and I really believe that this is a story that needs to be shared!

      God bless,

      Bonnie

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      Joan Hall 6 years ago from Los Angeles

      @joanhall: One possibility, I think, is that they suppose that the target viewer of the movie (a young girl) envisions herself in the role of the main character. If she has no mother (or a bad mother), then she is the ranking female, facing the world on her own.

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      Joan Hall 6 years ago from Los Angeles

      @hlkljgk: Wow! I didn't realize that. I'm not too familiar with the Disney princess genre. I wonder what they might think is the subconscious appeal of a motherless girl? I'm going to ponder that . . .

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      hlkljgk 6 years ago from Western Mass

      love it! have you ever noticed that ALL disney movies either kill, leave out or include an evil (step) mother?

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      JoyfulPamela2 7 years ago from Pennsylvania, USA

      Oh Joan ~ this is a beautiful story!! I love it much more than the original story! I can't wait to read more of your stories. :-D

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      anonymous 7 years ago

      this gives me a rather more POSITIVE outlook to talk about in my speech

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      jolou 7 years ago

      Very well done. It's nice to have a tale that is positive and had a great role model of a stepmother.

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      Virginia Allain 7 years ago from Central Florida

      Very well written and you fitted in elements from the original Cinderella, yet made your characters stand on their own. Lovely.

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      Indigo Janson 7 years ago from UK

      I didn't just like this, I LOVED it! Simply enchanting. The original fairy tales were very dark and some of that has been moderated over the years, but this tale is full of light and sparkle and happiness. Why should the step-mother not be kind, and the step-sisters not have good hearts? I loved the twist of the tale with the godmother too. I cannot help but leave a Fairy Godmother... er, no... *~*~ Angel Blessing ~*~* here for your rewrite of Cinderella.

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      KCottrell 7 years ago

      Oh beautiful . . . as a woman who lost her own mother at the age of 24, I cried when you wrote of Sarah offering up the emerald necklace. What a beautiful gesture from the stepmother to her stepdaughter, preserving the memory and honor of the mother. Aaah, kudos for holding us all to a standard of kindness, respect, and peace.

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      Carmel Aaron 7 years ago

      Thank you. I loved it that all the main characters were good and kind.

      Even the stepmother.

      I also liked the part that Cinderella had a brain, a conscience

      and a desire to make a difference.

      You tell the story very well.

      Thank you,

      5 Stars

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      Susan Deppner 7 years ago from Arkansas USA

      Excellent!

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      Laniann 7 years ago

      I love your story.

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      CleanerLife 7 years ago

      What a great way to retell a well known story! If only the people who try to make new movies out of old movies and TV shows had some of your talent! :)

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      Tiddledeewinks LM 8 years ago

      I know because I remarried that my grown daughter and ex have treated me with such hate, that the world could use a better story like this. Not all step-relationships are bad. My ex and daughter need to stop the jealousy.

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      Robin S 8 years ago from USA

      I love this!

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      GrowWear 8 years ago

      Best re-write of Cinderella I've read. :)

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      Rose Jones 8 years ago

      I loved your lens! Thanks for putting all the effort into writing that story! I have become really interested in the power of story in healing, the wicked stepmother myth is one that could do with some positive changes. I'm sure you are putting a lot of good work into your blended family.

      Please see my book review of Confessions of an Ugly Stepsister by Gregory Maguire.

      https://hubpages.com/literature/confessionsofanugl...

      He focused most on the stepsisters, but portrayer the stepmother as a survivor.

      And that ezine article on glass slippers was hilarious.

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      anonymous 8 years ago

      Fantastic!

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      purplefire 8 years ago

      That was a really interesting take on Cinderella and idea of stepmothers. Great job.