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Song Lyrics - A Song About the End of a Relationship

Updated on December 19, 2012

Below are the first song lyrics I have ever written. I have been wanting to attempt to write lyrics for a while, because I love music, especially music with good lyrics. After all, music is a universal medium; perhaps the most powerful of all.

I don't know if this is a good song or not. Feel free to publish your thoughts in the comments box. I just wrote it how it turned out in my head. I have an idea of the way it should sound, but I cannot write music or play an instrument so I am unable to produce the melody.

It is a song about the end of a relationship, as many songs are. It explores the emotions at suddenly finding oneself alone again.



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I'd Make It Right Again If I Could


I remember things we did

And those words you used to say,

You painted rainbows on my world

You took away my grey,

Thought what we had was special,

Though who doesn't think that way?

Start out a hopeful optimist

Just end in disarray,



So why did it all go wrong,

When what we had was good?

You know I'd make it right again

If I could



You smile out from our photo,

Your arm around my waist,

I want to walk away, though

I can't help but contemplate,

Was it me, or was it you?

Oh, what's the point in blame?

Somewhere down the pathway

Something must have changed



So why did it all go wrong

When everything was good?

You know I'd make it right again

If I could



Some day I'll fall in love again,

At least that's what they say,

It doesn't really help

With the way I feel today,

Love can end explosively

Or simply fizzle out,

Not everything in life can last,

That's not what life's about



So why did it all go wrong

When everything was good?

You know I'd make it right again

If I could



The black of night holds memories

That embed upon my soul

Can't sleep, can't think, can't get away,

My strange, new, empty world,

The moon shines through the curtain

I'm waiting for the day,

Darkness tears through my disguise -

And how do stars fall apart, anyway?



© Polly C, Oct 2011 (All Rights Reserved)




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    • Polly C profile imageAUTHOR

      Polly C 

      6 years ago from UK

      Hi Richie, thanks for your comments. Yes, I know all about the Elton John / Bernie Taupin collaboration. I watched a programme on Elton John's life and career once and found it hugely fascinating. I also remember watching Elton John on a talk show (several years ago now) on which he composed music to something really mundane (like a list or something) that the interviewer handed him and instantly made it into a song. He came up with the melody so quickly, I was very impressed!

      When I try to write lyrics I do have a kind of melody in my head, but I am not able to write it down or expand upon it. I will check out your idea of a songwriting club and also see about incorporating a bridge to the song, since that is something I need to work on more.

      Thanks for your help, anyway :)

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      RichieGils 

      6 years ago

      Hi Polly, those are good questions! I primarily write from melody, and then write my lyrics to fit the music. I find it much more difficult to do it the other way around, but I know there are plenty of songwriters who do.

      One of the most famous examples is the collaboration of Elton John and Bernie Taupin. Taupin would write the lyrics first, send them to Elton, who would then set them to music. In the old days they weren't even in the same room together! I expect you could find a partner to collaborate with at a songwriting workshop, or an online songwriting club.

      I really like what you've done, particularly the way you vary the length of the lines in your verses. If I were to turn it into a song I might consider converting the third verse into a bridge, otherwise I think it would work well as a song.

      Great job, I'd like to read some more!

    • Polly C profile imageAUTHOR

      Polly C 

      6 years ago from UK

      Hi Richie, I'm really pleased you commented here because I looked at your profile last night and saw you were a songwriter. As I said at the beginning of the hub, this is my first attempt at writing a song, although I have another couple I am working on right now. Just wanted to test it out. I have often written poetry but I love the power of music. much more so. Please tell me if there is anything not right about the format, I can handle the criticism! (i.e. layout, length, etc.) I write instinctively, so have not really studied it as such. I was also wondering how people go about finding someone to write melodies for a song if they can't write music - I don't think I will ever be able to do that and have no illusions about it! Is it possible, or not worth it if you can't write your own music?

      Thank you for reading and for your great comments, I will be over to visit yours soon :)

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      RichieGils 

      6 years ago

      Very well done Polly C! I love poignant lyrics! As I am a songwriter, I naturally had an echo of melody running through my head whilst reading this. Nice!

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      darrenworks 

      6 years ago from Lake In The Hills, IL

      Found your song this morning while exploring Hub Pages.

      This is a good example to show how song writing in many ways is really just poetry set to music. Without a melody to show us how the song would be performed and sound it's just another poem to us, the readers. I am a guitar player myself and have always struggled to write original songs, at least any I felt were any good! I hear successful songwriters/musicians say it is often the music or melody that comes to them first out of a passing thought. For instance, the story goes that Paul McCartney was taking a walk on a rainy day outside his home one day long ago, and he took a moment to look up and evaluate the weather for a moment and thought to himself, "it's getting better all the time!". He claims the entire melody for the song came to him in moments. He promptly returned home and added some lyrics and in just about half an hour he had created another Beatles classic. He makes is sound so simple. Also, while looking at your profile I noticed your poem regarding the homeless. You may appriciate my Poem "Urban Kight" which also speaks from a homeless mans perspective.

      Warmest Regards, D.

    • Polly C profile imageAUTHOR

      Polly C 

      7 years ago from UK

      Hi V Qisya - thank you, I appreciate your compliment :)

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      V Qisya 

      7 years ago

      Love it ;D Voted up

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