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The Surrogate Lead Detective

Updated on October 13, 2015
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They were combing the waters alongside the beach looking for a nine year old boy taken by the under water currents here at Seaside Park. Detective Laura Kimber found herself drifting away from the search and just staring at the Long Island Sound.

Why did there have to be such ugliness throwing pall over the beauty before her?

A young rookie broke the silence as his voice got high with nerves and said,” I think I see some movement ahead.”

Kimber did not respond to him as she looked at control. “Get us over there now!”

Helplessness poured through the sheer astonishment of finding Noel Rivera at the center of the movement. Looking for a nine year old boy at a packed beach shouldn’t be happening, but it was.

Kimber sighed, for the lost boy and for herself, and for all these others manning their positions in the search. Everyone with worried looks on their faces came to give a hundred percent, and for that she was grateful.

Was this what it meant to be lead detective, the feeling of helplessness? Of wanting to just stare at the sound and do everything personally, yet to be able to delegate responsibilities even in an emergency. She’d rather track down killers, thieves and pimps, whores, anything other than searching for missing and lost children.

Still unable to get the palms of her hands to stop sweating, she turned toward the front of the search boat. “Are we there yet?”

No one replied. That’s when she realized that the question was only said in her head, and not voiced to anyone else. It was nerves getting the best of her.

The surrogate lead detective stepped toward the front of the boat, hoping her legs weren’t shaking, at least no more than her hands were. Maybe if she just sat back and barked out commands, no one would see the worry in her face.

“Kimber,” someone called. “I got something.”

“Pull it up!”

Detective Laura Kimber paused; suddenly tensed she took in a deep breath. For the first ten heartbeats she expected someone to say something as they worked the waters in front of her. By the fifteenth heartbeat she expected the worst. However, the search party continued working the waters diligently.

“It’s something,” one of the searchers said calmly.

Kimber forced herself to ignore everything around her, but the action of the movement. She anchored herself on that searcher’s steady voice and forced herself to sound calm. “Progress?”

“It’s the boy!”

Fear was relentless, even though they found Noel Rivera so many rude thoughts filled her mind. She held her breath. They could call her lead detective and they could call her sir, but she wasn’t a real lead detective and the feeling of dread reminded her of that.

Through a constricting throat, she said, “get him up now!”

Conscience twisted her heart. She saw them lifting the boy out of the water and quickly attended to him medically. They were prepared to handle anything that came their way, but she felt helpless. She paced forward, glaring at the boy and life suddenly hit her. The boy started screaming as the search party roared with content. They slapped one another on the backs and hugged each other.

It was such a sensation, to feel joy conquer fear that it overwhelmed the lead detective. Kimber grabbed for balance and knew she didn’t want to be anywhere else, but there on the search boat with a lost child found safely.






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© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 19 months ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Missy for stopping by :)

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      Missy Smith 19 months ago from Florida

      Yay, a triumphant ending! I'm happy they found the young boy alive. Another good story with lead lady Kimber on the job. I apparently missed this one somehow. Glad I found it!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      I like the beginning part of your comment best.. Laura loving her job and hating it with just as much passion...hmm a great way to describe one of my most read detective character... bless you tillsontitan...:)

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Our dear Laura Kimber, loving her job as detective and hating it with just as much passion. The suspense in this one led us to believe the poor boy was gone but just when we believed the worst not only was he found, but alive! Terrific surprise ending.

      Voted all but funny.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Jodah..:)

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      I like this Kimber story Frank...and what a surprise happy ending for one of your stories

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Pegcole and Phyllis for checking out my short

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 3 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      This was tense, Frank. I like the surprise ending -- I did not expect that. Very well done.

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      Peg Cole 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      This one is eerie and rewarding at the same time. I could feel the pressure the Surrogate was under and the anticipation of fear or joy depending on the outcome of their efforts. Nice one, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Genna and have a wonderful holiday and a very safe and happy new year with your family friends, and pets :)

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      Genna East 3 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      "It was such a sensation, to feel joy conquer fear that it overwhelmed the lead detective. Kimber grabbed for balance and knew she didn’t want to be anywhere else, but there on the search boat with a lost child found safely." I would have felt the same way. Thank goodness he was saved. Phew! :-)

      Best wishes for a happy holiday season, Frank, to you and your family.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you tobusiness and happy holidays and a super new years to you and your family :)

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Lost and found, simply perfect for the Christmas season.

      A Very MERRY CHRISTMAS to you. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Valley.. and may you never get coal in your stockings no matter how bad you are LOL Happy Holidays to you and your family my friend :)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Sandcastles, I agree with you and thank you so much for checking out my surrogate detective :) Frank

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      Valleypoet 3 years ago

      It was great that you gave us a happy ending for Christmas Frank!...must be an incredible feeling for a detective to find a child alive and well. A very Merry Christmas to you and your family buddy, I hope you have the best one yet:-))

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      SandCastles 3 years ago

      It is scary how so many people just don't pay attention. You'd think someone would notice a child drowning but people often just turn away and mind their own business and others say, "Oh, the child is probably just playing in the water", when the kid is struggling to stay afloat. Good story and I'm glad they found the boy and he was saved!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Yes Faith..lol well actually the morgue was done eight months ago I just never hit the publish button..LOL but thanks for noticing two in one day.. both mild yeah? LOL and MsDora thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment bless you both

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 3 years ago from The Caribbean

      "To feel joy conquer fear" is a good summary for this story; it also describes my personal response to it. You surely know how to work our emotions. Good job as usual!

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Two in one day! Dear Frank you are on a roll and thank goodness someone, especially a child, is alive in this one ... here at Christmas!!! Good News Hooray! I love a happy ending.

      Up and more

      Blessings, Faith Reaper

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Becky thanks for reading my surrogate :)

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      Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      I loved this one. So glad they found him alive. I'm sure they were relieved too.