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Could We Just

Updated on September 2, 2013

Could we just . . .


Could we just
       try
one more time?

Help me to
understand
     your
point of view...

Perhaps we could
     discuss
 the price of milk
     without
killing the cow.


By A. Gagliardi  August 2009


This poem is written in the style of “This is Just to Say” by William Carlos Williams (1934) whose short poem attempted to slow the reader to focus on the details of the sentence. So, I ask you to read the lines more slowy than you might, so you can take in the meaning of each part of the sentence.
The theme is still redemption, (as in Williams' poem) but the transgression of my poem is unclear. We do know that Williams’ has eaten plums meant for breakfast. However, “Could we just” expresses a plea for continuation of a debate or an argument. The unique connotation of discussing ”the price of milk without killing a cow” should not to be taken literally. This sentence gives you the idea of the intensity of the debate and the suggestion of a more conciliatory recommencement of the negotiations.

For your help in remembering Williams’ poem, I am including it in this discussion.


This Is Just to Say
I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold
by William Carlos Williams (1934)


Two garden fairies

These two appear to be deep in discussion. I wonder if they are talking about the "price of milk".
These two appear to be deep in discussion. I wonder if they are talking about the "price of milk".

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      agaglia 5 years ago

      cnwriter, You might want to check out my hub, titled: His Body, Long and Lean. - similar theme with a surprise ending.

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      cnwriter 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      It truly happened to me love...

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      agaglia 5 years ago

      Oooh. this is a good one. I love the going toward the temptation and the coming back.

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      cnwriter 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      I Remember Walking..

      I remember walking atop the cliffs of Camelot

      The sky above so blue

      And down below the sea tearing at the tall cliffs

      I remember walking atop the cliffs of Camelot

      A voice calling ‘come, come closer’

      My steps drew me towards the edge of the cliffs

      A long way down to the sea

      I remember the quietness inside me

      The urging of that voice

      And I walked

      Nearer and nearer to the edge

      As if I knew I could jump down

      Into the waiting arms of the clear blue sea

      I remember my Traveller calling

      Turn around Carolan

      Turn around and return to Me

      And I did

      Back to the waiting glance of Him

      Who has been with me since time eternal

      He who has watched my every step

      And guided me for so long now

      He smiled at me

      He knew the temptation

      That had gripped me

      He knew that once again

      I had returned into His Care

      And so it is…

      And so she walked

      Stars in my Hair

      And so she walked with stars in her hair

      Lighting up the darkness

      Knowing she did

      The Light was always with her

      The Brightness shining everywhere

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      agaglia 5 years ago

      Oh, is it on your hub page? I would like to read it.

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      cnwriter 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      I do like the way you write love, and also the content of this piece. I did an Ode on this subject too.