Christmas Blend: A Poem

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The snowflakes falling are a wonderful frame around your face

The weather is quite exhilarating and makes me feel alive

As we grasp warmth in the clasping of hands

Twirling in this magical, mistical moisture


I wonder if your scent is tickling my nose

Or if it’s just the atmosphere of bristly firs

Something of a melody is thickening this white blur

Like candied colors I am awake with joyous heart murmurings


It’s a winter juxtaposition of death and vibrant life

I am truly lost within your complicated soul and laughter

And haunted by your bright eyes that are keyed on mine

Your heart is brown coffee to me with happy musings


Let us keep this balmy temperature within this chilling life

Though the blistering wind attempts to separate us

It rather quite entwines and binds, thus making the halves one whole


Therefore, this Christmas blend will continue to echo past time

I quietly cherish this moment as we cling to one other in the gathering softness...

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5 years ago

Well written.

From your record of poems I at first thought it would have a Christian theme, although, reading it through, some of the phrases are almost indicative of an erotic genre. Carefully written, anyway, and, once more, with a long syllabic composition.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

This poem is actually 2 years old. I found it and decided to post it here. It was meant to be romantic, but nothing of a lewd nature. This line, 'It rather quite entwines and binds, thus making the halves one whole,' suggests that the couple is married. It was mainly just meant to be an entertaining poem centered around winter and Christmas. Thanks for reading and commenting, f. :)


5 years ago

YW. The last line, too, comes across as intending to be gently erotic.

And anyway, I guess in your mind the line you quoted indicates the couple is married.

Take care.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Yes, I'm sorry that you took it in that way. I hope my earlier comment will clear up anything readers might be thinking as well.


5 years ago

Don't worry. Compared with some of the poems on these hubs by other writers, yours here is quite comparatively benign, really.

I just used the word erotic anyway to express what seemed to be a reasonable observation, particularly about the line you subsequently quoted, but I guess sometimes the way the writer and the reader see it can be different.

Blessings.


5 years ago

PS: It's not overtly lewd at all, as you say.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Ok good; I just don't want to give off the wrong impression. I want to please God in everything I do which includes everything I write. That's very true in that sometimes it is hard for any reader to ascertain a writer's true purpose and meaning within their writings.


5 years ago

Oh, I'm sure about that, yes. Fact is, what for one person would be what you call the wrong impression, for others would be an impression perceived as accurate in their minds, and of course the language of poetry is often inherently imprecise. In any case, the Song of Solomon (and I'm not quoting it here) is kind of uninhibited by some standards in anyway. So your poem is pretty benign, really. Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Yes, poetry can be quite ambiguous. You are right about Song of Solomon; although, I have heard it is meant to be a description of love between God and humans (married love as well). Ok, thanks.


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pennyofheaven 5 years ago from New Zealand

Very magical and beautiful. Thanks


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Thanks, pennyofheaven! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)


5 years ago

Ebower: Song of Solomon is often given various applications in its interpretation, but the original context is in relation to Israel, I think, being in the Old Testament.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

So, I was correct loosely. :) Anyway, thanks for sharing your knowledge.


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emichael 5 years ago from New Orleans

This is great. And it makes me wish we had snowy Christmases down south...


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Thanks, emichael. I wish we did, too. :) I guess we'll just have to dream of a white Christmas.


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emichael 5 years ago from New Orleans

I may get lucky this year though, actually. My family just moved up to Virginia, so I'll be going up there this Christmas crossing my fingers for some snow!


5 years ago

YW.

Anyway I think some of your other poems are a bit similar to this one (well written, of course), whether or not one chooses to use the e-word to describe them. You have a talent, anyway. Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

emichael: Awesome! I want to see pictures if it happens. :)

f: Yes, my poems are similar; I guess they all display my particular style, word choice, etc. Thanks!


5 years ago

PS: I was referring to your poem, Steel Waters, which in some ways is rather similar in its themes and wording to this one. Blessings.


5 years ago

YW. I meant that it's really a moot point whether your word imagery in 'Steel Waters' would also be described as erotic (though definitely not lewd). Blessings.


5 years ago

What I meant was that it's objectively a moot point whether some of the language in your poem Steel Waters, is, similarly, erotic (although it's not at all lewd, of course.) Blessings.


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emichael 5 years ago from New Orleans

You got it!


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

f: Yes, both poems are romantic in nature.

emichael: Thanks!


5 years ago

Yes, well, this is true, as well; they're certainly romantic also.

Blessings.


5 years ago

Oops, I seem to have repeated a post, above; sorry)


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

That's ok; great minds think alike.


5 years ago

LOL.

I'm not sure we quite agree with my categorizations of some of your poems; or maybe you do, I don't know. Certainly some of your well written poems that I've commented on are romantic in a general sense; although to me some of the imagery is probably a little beyond the romantic as well; but I won't quibble. Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

You are right in that we don't agree on the exact categorizations of some of my poems. That's ok; poetry is open to interpretation as we have discussed before.


5 years ago

Okay, well this is fine. I guess your assumption, which is okay by me, is that any erotic element in poetry must be lewd, and your poems are definitely not like that. I would say that there is a sense in which some of your poems' verbal imagery, that we have discussed, going beyond the romantic, does tend to the erotic also, even though it's definitely not lewd. (But I guess we are going round in circles with definitions, so ... )

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

I'm guessing that we just have two different meanings of erotic; mine offers a negative connotation.


5 years ago

Well, certainly I can empathize with you desire not to be negative, and to be God honoring, yes.

Negative, or positive, I think that it’s sometimes simply a question of what is there, in the language used.

‘Let us keep this balmy temperature within this chilling life

Though the blistering wind attempts to separate us

It rather quite entwines and binds, thus making the halves one whole

Therefore, this Christmas blend will continue to echo past time

I quietly cherish this moment as we cling to one other in the gathering softness...’

Very well written. Again, in ‘Steel Waters’:

'We jump into the sparkling stream despite it's swishing,

Together we will be interwined in heart and spirit,...

Our eyes will dance, our arms will fold, our lips will form a sharing smile

Let's be partners for a moment, let's rest in this beauty for just awhile...'

Again, well-written; whatever was your authorial intent (which to you is sacrosanct, of course) in these excerpts, a reasonable, objective reader might possibly think he or she were reading lines suggesting lovemaking scenes. But I won’t quibble with your definitions. You have a lot of talent. Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

f: I understand your point; I guess it depends on the reader and how they view it. Thank you.

slwriter: Thank you for the very encouraging comment! :)


5 years ago

PS: in seeking focus for writing, I think Phil. 4.8 provides an excellent framework to build on. Blessings.


5 years ago

(As a very general point, I mean. Blessings.)


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calico Stark 4 years ago from Earth for the time being

Wow "E" this was so packed with talent I don't even know where to begin! The greatest writers create an atmosphere that is so tangible it is as if you are there. This is what you accomplished with this beautiful poem. I love this part...

"It’s a winter juxtaposition of death and vibrant life

I am truly lost within your complicated soul and laughter".

Perfect pictures to go with the poem as well! Great job! Vote way up and beautiful!


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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

calico Stark: Thanks so much; what you said means a lot to me! Thanks for commenting and voting. :)

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