Close my eyes ... a love poem

Why is that when I close my eyes

Your face is all I ever see

Why does the sound of your cries

Forever haunt me


Limbs entwining in a dreamtime

That can never be real

But in the darkness you are mine

Your touch all I feel



Hearts beating to the ancient dance

As forbidden desire ignites

Locked together in a breathless trance

Trapped by sweet delights


Bodies move bathed in candlelight

Trembling with sensations

Surrendering to the sweetness of the night

Lost in passions sweet temptation


Arching into each other’s touch

Aching with denied need

To a fantasy I desperately clutch

Fate cruel to my plead


Why do dreams of you consume my mind

Your voice all I hear

What is this closing bind

That fills my heart with tears


Breath filled with love and life

As the dream never ends

Despite promising to be another’s wife

I am in love with my best friend

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HaleyMCruz 4 years ago from California

Wow...I'm speechless...I swear I forgot how to breathe for a second. You're words were so...I don't even have a word for how wonderful and emotional they were. Totally lovely, and voted up times two if I could do that. I'm so in awe right now I feel like I'm rambling.


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Haley

Wow what a wonderful compliment, I am thrilled that you enjoyed this so much! to have such an enthusiastic response so soon after posting was a real pleasure :)

thank you so very much!


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Fennelseed 4 years ago from Australia

Amazing poem capturing a taunting connection, forbidden, but wrong?

Such is the connection, I believe of soul mates and gender has no barrier. There is so much power in the pull for completeness and the coming together of such souls. So beautifully expressed, Nighthag, thank you for sharing. My votes and best wishes to you from Annie.


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PRED8A 4 years ago

Wow! I am deeply moved by this piece. My heart genuinely skips a beat with your words. Love flourishes eternal.


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unknown spy 4 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up.

this line really blew me away..i just remembered something like this..

Breath filled with love and life

As the dream never ends

Despite promising to be another’s wife

I am in love with my best friend


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

This is so beautiful and this love happens to many. Fennelseed echoes my thoughts completely..Cheers


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Mama Kim 8 4 years ago

Beautiful. We often can't choose who we fall in love with. I was with another when I fell for my husband. I just knew I had to end the current one and see what could be or I'd regret it forever. Turns out following the heart was the best choice, couldn't be happier. This poem describes perfectly the tormented feeling of loving someone other than who your committed to. voted a bunch!


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

You poor, poor soul! This was devastatingly beautiful - and o, so sad! Life (and love) can be so complicated and painful! I sooo felt this!


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QudsiaP1 4 years ago

Such a passionate aching arises from your words nighthag, so beautiful, so painful.


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Fennelseed

love should never be wrong, gender, religon, culture are only barriers that closed minded poeple use to help conform their world.

I am so glad that you took the time to visit thank you so much


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Pred8a

Love is eternal, it should be shouted from rooftops and painted brightly across the canvas of our lives, unfortunately we are not always open to it when it comes,

simply thrilled that this moved you..


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

unknown spy

I am so glad of your visit, its always amazing to me when other writers are so generous with thier compliments


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Mama kim

I am so glad that you liked this, it can be very confusing to fall for someone else other than the person you have commited yourself to. I am so glad that following your heart has led you to find happiness and love,

thank you for your visit


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Lmkarn23

love is such a complicated thing!, lucky for me the years since feeling this way have been more than kind and I can now use the memory to aid my writing. This poem was exlporing the feelings a character of mine is struggling with in her story and I sometimes find that other writing mediums can help me get a more solid feel of what they are going through

thank you so much for you very kind comment.. I am so glad that you felt this, means I'm on the right track...


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

QudsiaP1

forbidden love can be the most confusing thing to go through, every moment exciting and full of such aching promise...


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

always exploring

thanks so much for your visit, you are right this kind of love happens to many, yet a lot of us still feel that it is somehow wrong...forbidden...

yet maybe that is where the allure is hidden in the taboo...


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MsDora 4 years ago from The Caribbean

Perhaps meditation or visual aids will help re-direct the thoughts / the love. Or maybe dealing with the situation may include admitting the true object of love. This is a real-life situation and your words effectively conveyed that.


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Love is a confusing thing at the best of times, but this situation is complicated for so many reasons... but your right finding the right path(no matter the situation) is the only way to find peace.

thanks so much for your visit and your thoughtful comment I appreciate it


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epigramman 4 years ago

....one of the most beautiful flowing pieces of poetry I've read in quite some time - and as I often associate you with the darker side - there is yin in every yang for every great writer - and that great writer is you - and in every piece that you write - no matter what the shade or the hue that you choose to 'color' your words with ....... sending you warm wishes and good energy from lake erie time ontario canada 11:59pm while listening to the Kronos Quartet Pieces of Africa album


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

wow. A stunning poem, nighthag, very compassionate and powerful. Nicely done!


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

sometimes you leave me just speechless with the praise you so freely send my way. thank you so much your unfailing support is a true gift...


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Thank you so much TToombs, it has to be one of the hardest choices to face, to conform or break free and follow the heart. I am so very glad that you liked it


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James-wolve 4 years ago from Morocco

Wellcontructed and so beautiful.I like it so much.I vote it up!.

Love is the most amazing thing can happen to a human being.That s what makes the whole world turn around.


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

Love can make the whole world turn around, upside down and inside out :) So thrilled that you liked this thanks for the visits :)


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James-wolve 4 years ago from Morocco

hehehe you right:)that part slipped my mind.


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ahorseback 4 years ago

Awesome , Love , whatever it really is , is just love no matter where ,who or why , once I was infatuated with a woman ten years younger than I , and she was happily married with 5 children , and yet every time I was near her ..........well you know . Not a word of it was ever spoken to her, or her to me ! Perhaps the most pure of infatuation with another is that that is never fully realized ! Great write !


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nighthag 4 years ago from Australia Author

The bittersweet passion of unrequited love is indeed all consuming, and for years more will always be remembered as something more than special, almost magical.

I'm glad that this brought back such a vivid memory for you, they are the ones we treasure the most :)

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