Entangled
I've been in the mountains for several days with my family enjoying the holiday, I've had very little internet access but I've been writing like a fiend. Revising old poems, writing fresh ones, preparing blog post. One of the poems I revised was one called Weed Killer. Read it here:
If you like this poem
Then check out my poetry book,Digging to China, released by Sweatshoppe Publications. This poem is in it, along with fifty others. Signed copies are available throughSweatshoppe Publications. It's also available on Barnes and Noble andAmazon.com.
To be honest, I have never liked it. I like the message, I like what i was trying to say but I hate the way i said it. I finally revised it in a way that says everything I want it to say and, amazingly, I made a longish (for me) poem into a very brief one (18-19 syllables, depending on dialect:-)). I hope you like the changes. Even if you don't, I do :-)
Entangled
(Weed Killer Revisited)
I am a garden
riddled with weeds
entangling the stifled flowers.
all rights reserved. Copyright Justin W. Price. Nov. 24th, 2011