Rictameter Poems.

 A fellow hubber introduced me to a new form of poetry today, called Rictameter. We all know hiaku poems, well this ones a little harder. Instead of 3 lines with a 5, 7, 5 syllable sequence, this one consists of 9 lines, starting with a 2 syllable line, and then 4, 6, 8, 10, then back down, 8, 6, 4, 2, with the first and last 2 syllable lines being the same. I tried it out, and heres my sample of a rictameter poem for you. I hope I did it right, and made my fellow hubber proud. Enjoy and try a rictameter of your own.

"Hello, Goodbye"

Hello.
How have you been?
Its been awhile my friend.
I have missed you all these past years.
Its very nice to see you again here.
I cant believe its been so long.
Ive waited here for you.
Just want to say
Hello.

So, hi.
Where have you been?
I hope this time you stay.
I never wanted it to end.
No never in a million years did I.
I never forgot about you,
You're always on my mind.
Nothing to say,
so hi.

Goodbye,
Leaving so soon?
But you have just got here.
I guess I'm not enough for you.
Go ahead and leave like you always do.
But this time leave my heart with me.
You cant take it with you.
For it is mine.
Goodbye.

"People"

People,
Living a lie.
Do not know what they want,
and what they have they will forsake,
because we always want what we cant have.
We want that neverending rush.
We want it, oh, so much.
Hard-headed fools,
People.

People,
will never learn.
Life is a simple test
of whats to come next and after,
after this life has gone away for good,
when there is nothing left for us.
Will we be satisfied
with what we've done?
People.

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Sherbet Penny 6 years ago from Galway, Ireland.

Brilliant, well done nikki, the " Hello Goodbye" conversation is excellent. For your first attempts, really excellent.


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Jade_Orear 6 years ago from Zombie Land U.S.A

well it must be hard, i have never been a fan of structured art forms.... i like the People one, i dont hate most people but i find myself loathing lots! haha! we are alike! holy smoke batman!


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Nikkij504gurl 6 years ago from Louisiana Author

yea i dont really kno all the forms and types of poetry but im pretty good at putting words together to make it work so but i rather just write freely.


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

Nikki I just read this and it is totally awesome. Can I just say you are amazing? I love this poetry format. It sounds like how some Eastern poems are written. Geez, I have to go read all your hubs. :)


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

lol thanks cathy. yes u can say that :) haha. I have a lot of older poems that are really good. feel free to read as many as you can. thanks again. muah!


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

Hi Nikki,

I really liked your poem and you are indeed gifted.

I don't know if I will be able to create anything as good but I am giving it a go.

I know I am going to have fun following you on here.

Take care and I wish you a great day.

Eddy.


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

Just to let you know that I have composed my first Rictameter poem if you want to check it out.

It's called Move ON and I've inserted a link back to your profile page.

Take care,

Eddy.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

wow thats awesome Eddy! thanks so much :) I will check it out promptly. glad you liked these, and hope you had fun trying to put one together.


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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

From this not so simple test.A sentiment of past years,,never forgetting,your heart,lies of want,forsaken possession,a never ending rush with nothing left...

Wanting,

Asking then,

What if,

Want becomes need,

Or instead,

A simple rush....


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

awesome comment Bryan. too many times need is confused with want, lust with love, etc. etc.


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

This was awesome Sunshine! Great stuff never read anything like it it went perfect and the topic great :)

Smiles :)

bella


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

Muah! thanks Blossom. I've missed you on here.


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

I know I have been dealing with a lot haven't been on top my writing game but it looks like I met be getting there again been hiting some rock bottoms lately but I am coming around I hope :) at least i am trying....I guess!!!


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

all you can do is try. Hope things start looking up and get better for you soon!


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bellawritter23 4 years ago from California

They have been Nikki I cant explain where I was but just know it was hell all over again it was hot and scary and dark and well this time it was by my own self no one to blame but me. I was tired of living the good normal life I was sinking in my own misery and found that I needed to escape once again but this time for good.


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

hmm...sometimes you need to escape, but the place we try to escape to isnt always better. Hope you find some middle ground. and can be happy.


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Debby Bruck 4 years ago

Nikki ~ Really good sentiment in these lines so well written. Blessings, Debby


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

I just retweeted this hub. I love Rictameter poems... :)


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thanks..Youre a doll!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Really nice !! I have not done anything like this before and it seems a bit difficult!


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

try it!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

I have missed reading you lately--just thought I would check in --


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thanks for that Audrey :)

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