It Was A Downtown Scene

It was a downtown scene,

shot past the streetlight

he thought it was green,

as if to make a point,

the driver gunned the motor again,

and past every red light on that street,

and then,

he gave the gas some extra feet,

he just didn’t care,

as the sirens filled the air,

the police patrol pulled them over,

his good day just got sour,

that car was hitting fifty miles per hour,

for no apparent reason,

and oh, the tickets would stack,

it was curtains for the two large men

in a small compact,

both squeezed beyond all dignity into the

cramped interior

of the two door sedan,

car against man,

it was traveling at a high rate of speed,

but he didn’t get very far,

community service is what he’ll need,

they were flesh under pressure in that car,

a vision of cluttered humanity

that somehow increased the comedic possibilities,

he wanted to plea insanity,

and he’d just might win,

if the judge saw the car they were in.


© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

Awesome story


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PoweroftheCross 5 years ago from Above and Beyond...

Too much you are. There are people who think like this. This is a poem. Now this is a poetry! The rhythm and rhyme is sublime, as per usual.


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Terishere 5 years ago

Great poem!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon

Ha! Great work. Voted up and all but useful. True talent. I look forward to reading more from u!


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Lucky no one got killed :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

hey Susan Good- day to you


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks for reading writer20 powerofthecross, Terri, PDX andSusan :) Frank


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Hello Frank, maybe one day you could write a mystery epic.


DenMica 4 years ago

This was serious, yet hilarious. I appreciate the comedic twist


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks denmica if I knew who you were and had stories to read I'd return the favor bless you


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Vin :)

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