Night Verse| A Poem

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Night Verse

Lone she walks

the midnight hill

gathering silver slivers of moonbeams,

crystal nightbird notes

and touchpoints of stars.


Childlike she steps

among the watered stones

choosing the smoothest, rarest,

nesting them with care between the stars.


Under the moonstruck trees,

she collects leaves,

needles,

shadows,

and the footprints of wee beasts.


Carefully, she sorts these gleanings of the night,

arranges them on paper,

and fancies herself a poet.




©4-14-93 C. Elizabeth Carl
©5-23-15 C. Elizabeth Carl Elias

© 2015 DzyMsLizzy

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bravewarrior 18 months ago from Central Florida

Lizzy, this is beautiful. I love the short phrases; the words are few yet powerful. This is one of the best poems I've read. You make us think, but you don't make us wonder what message you're trying to convey. I find poetry that is so complex that I can't see the message to be cumbersome. This definitely doesn't fall into that category.

I've read poetry on this site that I honestly can't respond to because I either don't get it or they're too dark. As a part-time poet, I pay attention to poems I don't understand; I don't want my readers leaving my words having no clue what they mean.

Your words are clear and beautiful. I look forward to more poetry from you.


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Wow, my goodness, thank you, bravewarrior. This is one of my own favorites; and I'm delighted you found it worthy as well.

I have a few poems on here, but not many, compared to the binders-full I have in hard copy.

I wrote for years; my mother, (who was gifted at rhyme), and I would read each other our latest on at least a weekly basis. I've written very little since she passed back in 1998--I feel as if my muse died with her--it no longer comes easily and naturally to me as it used to.


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wayseeker 18 months ago from Colorado

DzyMsLizzy,

I was just wondering through the recent postings and found your poem. This is quite beautiful. There are two things, in particular, that strike me as I read.

I love the sound of this poem. With such brief lines, each individual word is given a lot of power, and the words you have chosen are both powerful in their meaning as well as very musical as their sounds play off of one another.

I also found the last two lines to be a pleasant surprise. The imagery of the poem created a rich picture in my mind and the idea of laying this beauty down on paper captures one of the key essences of what poetry is.

Great poem. Thanks for sharing it!

Bert


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Thank you very much, Bert! How funny that you should stumble upon my poem in this way, as this is the very poem I referenced in my comment on your article about how to analyze poems. ;-). This is, indeed, where it is published.

I'm delighted you found it worthy of praise, and I thank you for that. Coming from someone with your level of education in the fine arts, that is a high honor, indeed!


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drbj 18 months ago from south Florida

Your poetry, Lizzy, is creative, imaginative and a delight to read. Thank you for this unexpected treat.


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Jodah 18 months ago from Queensland Australia

Hi MsLizzy, I don't recall reading one of your poems before, but this is great. Loved it. I hope you write more.


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

@ drbj - Thank you so very much for your kind compliment. I'm delighted you enjoyed this poem so much.

@ Jodah - I have several on here, actually, but nothing compared to the binders-full I have written over the years. As you probably know, HP is not a great venue for poems. ;-)

I'm glad you enjoyed this one, and feel free to check out what other ones I have here. ;-)


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billybuc 18 months ago from Olympia, WA

This is lovely, Lizzy! Beautiful in its phrasing and its simplicity. Well, well done!


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Hi there, Bill!

Many thanks! I'm delighted you enjoyed this elderly poem. Are poems like wine? Do they improve with age?? LOL


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Harishprasad 18 months ago from India

DzyMsLizzy, this is a wonderful poem about poetry , written so beautifully with a keen insight. You are a wonderful poet. I enjoyed reading this poem. Voted up.


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Twilight Lawns 18 months ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

MsLizzy, this is stunningly beautiful. I have read some poems on this site that have "sort of" touched my heart and soul, but this really reaches deep within me.

Brava! As they say.

Exceptional. Mindblowingly perfect.

Thank you.

Ian


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The Examiner-1 18 months ago

That poem was sparkling DzyMsLizzy. I also thought it was very interesting the way that she collected all of the stars and moonbeams. I voted it up, shared and pinned it.

Kevin


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CatherineGiordano 18 months ago from Orlando Florida

You always use such beautiful imagery--the starlight like the song of a bird, the planets like stones in a nest. I loved this poem. Voted up ++


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

@ Harishprasad - I'm delighted you so enjoyed my poem. Thanks very much for the vote!

@ Twilight Lawns - I'm touched and a bit stunned! Thank you very much indeed for your lavish praise. I"m most pleased to have struck a chord with you.

@ Kevin - I am so glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you so much for the vote, share and pin! Much appreciated.

@ CatherineGiordano - Wow--you found similes I did not even have in mind myself when I wrote this; I love it! Thank you so much for your thoughts and votes!


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mary615 18 months ago from Florida

You certainly have a talent for poetry! I enjoyed this one very much.


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Hello, Mary!

Thank you very much for the kind words. I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. It's one of my older ones; back when I was writing a lot of poetry.


Lee Cloak 18 months ago

A really beautiful piece of poetry, with so many wonderful lines, a real pleasure to read, very well done, thanks for sharing, voted up, Lee


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Laura335 18 months ago from Pittsburgh, PA

Really nice.


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annart 18 months ago from SW England

Very clever. I wasn't expecting the last line at all! You did this well, with a great repeating rhythm which lulled as night-time dreams do.

Loved it!

Ann


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

@ Lee Cloak - I am delighted that you liked this poem so much. Thank you so much for the vote and share!

@ Laura335 - Thank you very much, Laura; I appreciate your comment.

@ annart - Like many of my poems back in the day, this one sort of "came to me, " and I had to grab paper and scribble it down before it escaped! I'm most pleased you enjoyed it so much. Thank you!


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annart 18 months ago from SW England

I like 'scribbled it down before it escaped' - I know exactly what you mean!


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Kristen Howe 18 months ago from Northeast Ohio

Lovely poem, Lizzy. Well done. So visual and poetic, too! Voted up for beautiful!


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Hi Kristen;

I'm delighted you liked this poem. Thank you so much for your kind words and the votes!


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Kristen Howe 18 months ago from Northeast Ohio

Anytime Lizzy.


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RobinGrosswirth23 18 months ago from New York

Our dalliances with the serendipitous constellations that inhabit our night sky allows for native childhood play and thought (creativity at its best!).

Very nice.

Robin


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DzyMsLizzy 18 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Thanks very much, Robin; glad you liked this piece.


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RobinGrosswirth23 18 months ago from New York

I'll stop by again.

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