Red Lace and Ashes Reign

A couple short poems related to sleep and dreams. This is my first time putting more than one poem into a hub. Thanks for reading.




---------- Red Lace --------


From a dream, I awake.

Begin a new day.

From me, you take.

And watch me decay.


I became an arsonist last night,

burning your image from my head,

but arson alone was not my crime,

because the flames were laced with red.


------- Ashes Reign -------



My eyes weigh me down.
I can’t fight this now.
Fall into shadow.
Claim my peace.
Dreams fall upon me.
I am not alone.
Surround me now.
Remnants of a broken heart.
Stabbing, blood running.
I open my eyes…how can this be?
Must escape. Eyes fluttering.
Fists clenching.
Saturate me…
Liberate me…
Rid me of torment…
Once to love, forever to lose
I pray to sleep, to wake, to lie in ruin
The remains of a fallen hope
Ashes raining…always reigning…

Spilling from my mouth
Trembling hands…now limp
In my sleep, I find rest.
Finally.



© copyright Ben D.A 2011

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Patricia Costanzo 5 years ago from Behind the Redwood Curtain

"My eyes weigh me down.

I can’t fight this now.

Fall into shadow.

Claim my peace.

Dreams fall upon me."

--love this!


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

It's up to you. Not necessary to show the date written, though, as far as adding to the poem's meaning unless it's an important element of it to you. Adding a current year date to the copyright may be wise, though.

Just enjoy your writing and don't make a chore out of it. It flows so naturally, and that is wonderful!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks Nellie, I actually wrote those a while ago. I have been dating my recent work in the titles. Trying to, at least


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

All very effective, perhaps not as spontaneous as usual -but even so, quite good. You're exploring and that is a very good thing. Voting up.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks elizabeth :] yeah i liked the word play too

nikki - murder indeed. :] thank youuu


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

an arsonist, perhaps a murderer? lets hope only in a dream. loved the second one. sleep is where i always find peace. in sleep you do not feel. I wrote a poem about that called deaths best friend if u want to check it out.


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

Wow, very good again. I like your play on words with rain and reign. Sleep is one of the best cures in this world if you ask me. :)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks nighthag!! :] I really do like those pictures too!

And it isn't without effort that I create such visuals lol

Thank you very much for your support


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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia

lovely pictures, your poetry is just as beautiful if not more...

I love the visual delight your words create drawing me in each time effortlessly. love it


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks caitlin! :]


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CaitlinRose17 5 years ago from Mississippi

both poems were just beautiful...and had great imagery. I could feel exactly what you felt as you wrote it (i think. Keep writing! :) and the pictures are gorgeous too!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Seen - lol we both misspelled

Pooh - thanks for all your great compliments. and voting up is great too ;]

YEAH I agree, this is my favorite art work for any of my hubs! thanks for noticing :]


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

Red** not read lol (Whoops)


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Poohgranma 5 years ago from On the edge

I'm running low on descriptive compliments that could match your work today so I'll just vote up and awesome as usual.

Really great art work you're finding to go with your writing too, I meant to comment before.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Mentalist, I didn't know interdimensional robot vampires needed sleep. :]

Tnder, thanks for that poetic comment :]

Seen - thanks, ( checks out your new one )


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

Read lace, very visual :) Keep up the good work!


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tnderhrt23 5 years ago

Ben, to see such talent in such youth is awe-inspiring...as life seasons you, I can only imagine where your gift will take you...buckle up and hold on tight...nurture this gift you have been given and it will take you on the ride of your life!


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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

Resolution through fatique,I can relate.;)

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